Comment from JSD

Excellent

An enigmatic and intriguing, thought-provoking piece. I can't say I get all of it; at times I think it is just words without the most precise care in their selection - a bit of a stream of consciousness - but that is just my own irrelevant opinion.

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023

That poem was supposed to be disabled. It is a work in process. It is confusing.

Norm

reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023

The Dream That Is Life


and the dream of life disappears into infinity
with an ending
that never was

in a time
of expansion

in a multiverse of forever
with a God
called Creator

that created this world
of forevermore

that goes on and on

forever in time
again and again
to be born again

unto tomorrows of predestination

with a form and a future
speeding along
in the speed of light

in relative time
with thoughts
that betray us
to who we are

in that moment in time
when now is now

I will forever be









and the dream of life disappears into infinity
with an ending
that never was

in a time
of expansion

in a multiverse of forever
with a God
called Creator

that created this world
of forevermore

that goes on and on

forever in time
again and again
to be born again

unto tomorrows of predestination

with a form and a future
speeding along
in the speed of light

in relative time
with thoughts
that betray us
to who we are

in that moment in time
when now is now

I will forever be










and the dream of life disappears into infinity
with an ending
that never was

in a time
of expansion

in a multiverse of forever
with a God
called Creator

that created this world
of forevermore

that goes on and on

forever in time
again and again
to be born again

unto tomorrows of predestination

with a form and a future
speeding along
in the speed of light

in relative time
with thoughts
that betray us
to who we are

in that moment in time
when now is now

I will forever be









and the dream of life disappears into infinity
with an ending
that never was

in a time
of expansion

in a multiverse of forever
with a God
called Creator

that created this world
of forevermore

that goes on and on

forever in time
again and again
to be born again

unto tomorrows of predestination

with a form and a future
speeding along
in the speed of light

in relative time
with thoughts
that betray us
to who we are

in that moment in time
when now is now

I will forever be

Comment from JT traveller

Good

In my humble opinion, this has the potential to be a six star poem. The lack of punctuation or pause left me somewhat exhausted. You certainly have talent and a way with words. Perhaps it's just me; I did not know when to take a breath to digest your beautiful words. Jacqueline

 Comment Written 18-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023

Hi, this was supposed to be disabled. It is a work in progress at. I agree with you. Too hard to understand like that.

Norm

reply by JT traveller on 18-Nov-2023

Hi Norm. You certainly have talent. There was no I'll intent. Have a wonderful day. Jacqueline