Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Waiting Is The Hardest Part"Miranda tries to find Dougie.
20 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Poor Waylon, his dad, Dougie, is a toe-rag! He could at least left a message that he loved Waylon, anything to ease his pain. perhaps he's being followed, and wants Miranda to stop this in case whoever is after him will find him. Sorry, I'm jumping ahead! Well done!! I can't keep saying that, they are all fabulous and I know the rest will be, too. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Poor Waylon, his dad, Dougie, is a toe-rag! He could at least left a message that he loved Waylon, anything to ease his pain. perhaps he's being followed, and wants Miranda to stop this in case whoever is after him will find him. Sorry, I'm jumping ahead! Well done!! I can't keep saying that, they are all fabulous and I know the rest will be, too. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 28-Nov-2023
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Thanks so much. If he had left a message for Waylon, there is no way Waylon could keep that secret. Gretchen
Comment from w.j.debi
Oh, what a tangled web. Like Miranda, I hope Mitch calls soon, but these other phone calls are muddying the water. Can or should Miranda find Doug? How long will Mitch make Miranda wait? Ugh....
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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Oh, what a tangled web. Like Miranda, I hope Mitch calls soon, but these other phone calls are muddying the water. Can or should Miranda find Doug? How long will Mitch make Miranda wait? Ugh....
Comment Written 16-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 16-Nov-2023
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Miranda won't wait to long. She'll get to Mitch. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from Ric Myworld
I've been traveling for most of last week and I'm damn near 50 reviews behind, but I'm glad to be home and back just in time for you to fill me in on what's I've missed. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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I've been traveling for most of last week and I'm damn near 50 reviews behind, but I'm glad to be home and back just in time for you to fill me in on what's I've missed. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 12-Nov-2023
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Thanks for reviewing. I panic when I have 10 pieces to review. Lol. Gretchen
Comment from Sanku
Oh Tat is very sad .he has deliberately dumped his son on her .He should be found and made answerable. It is getting interesting .I hope Dougie wont attempt anything funny
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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Oh Tat is very sad .he has deliberately dumped his son on her .He should be found and made answerable. It is getting interesting .I hope Dougie wont attempt anything funny
Comment Written 10-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 10-Nov-2023
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Thank you. I'm not even sure it was Dougie who called. Glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
Comment from jim vecchio
When there is so much love to give in this world, writers (myself included) flex their writing muscles on filed or deteriorating romances. Some day I'll write a straight, no problem love relationship story! I enjoy your writing and I'm sorry for having missed some of th4 beginning, but I would like to be there as you write more!
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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When there is so much love to give in this world, writers (myself included) flex their writing muscles on filed or deteriorating romances. Some day I'll write a straight, no problem love relationship story! I enjoy your writing and I'm sorry for having missed some of th4 beginning, but I would like to be there as you write more!
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you enjoyed this. Gretchen
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Your writing is very good.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Gretchen,
I absolutely loved all the detail in this chapter. All the thoughts, the dialogue, the whole story was all so believable gal. That phone call at the end was rather chilling. You really know how to capture the mood of the various participants. Well done.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Hello Gretchen,
I absolutely loved all the detail in this chapter. All the thoughts, the dialogue, the whole story was all so believable gal. That phone call at the end was rather chilling. You really know how to capture the mood of the various participants. Well done.
Have a blessed day.
Tom
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much. I really value your review and comments. Gretchen.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Another excellent chapter in the Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
Book. I wish Miranda and Mitch would get back together already. She is a very hard headed woman who may have lost her chance to a good relationship. I can relate. I chose the same kind of man and if a good one came along I wouldn't know what to do.
A very engaging story. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Another excellent chapter in the Miranda's Trouble In Paradise
Book. I wish Miranda and Mitch would get back together already. She is a very hard headed woman who may have lost her chance to a good relationship. I can relate. I chose the same kind of man and if a good one came along I wouldn't know what to do.
A very engaging story. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much for this. I think Mitch will return. Gretchen
Comment from barbara.wilkey
So, the plot gets messier. I do with Miranda would go to Mitch. It can't get any worse, well of course, it can. I'm glad Miranda knows she messed up. Thank you for sharing this with us. I like this story.
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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So, the plot gets messier. I do with Miranda would go to Mitch. It can't get any worse, well of course, it can. I'm glad Miranda knows she messed up. Thank you for sharing this with us. I like this story.
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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I'm hoping Mitch will return her call. Thank you for this. Gretchen
Comment from royowen
Poor Waylon, he has a miscreant father, but he struck the jackpot with Miranda, I don't believe Mitch is now necessarily in the right, two wrongs don't make a right, and pride is stupid, it means the man's unstable, forgiveness puts relationships on the table, but process destroys them, he's not worth it. But great write, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Poor Waylon, he has a miscreant father, but he struck the jackpot with Miranda, I don't believe Mitch is now necessarily in the right, two wrongs don't make a right, and pride is stupid, it means the man's unstable, forgiveness puts relationships on the table, but process destroys them, he's not worth it. But great write, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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I'm not so sure it is Dougie. Thanks so much for this. Gretchen
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If you?re not sure, nor am I
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I cannot get enough of your writing; I'm as serious as I can possibly be. Every chapter is EXCELLENT. Every. Single. Chapter.
These are the things that I found especially good in this one:
1. Waylon. His turn-around since living with the wonderful Miranda is just so heartwarming for the teacher in me. She's made him feel secure, and he's blossoming because of it: homework done, trash taken out, concern for her and Mitch's relationship, the KIND-but-funny way he teased her with her own words. He's become a young man anyone would love to have around. I feel like Miranda always saw that in him --though, originally, it was NOT easy-- and she just kept nurturing him until everyone else could see it, too.
2. This line...because there has to be at least ONE time per chapter when I experience a LOL moment:
I move faster than a fat kid reaching for the last cookie.
I so seriously wish you lived next door to me. You are hilarious and would make my life absolutely perfect.
3. The INTRIGUE! Is Dougie alive? Was that him? Who keeps hassling Miranda in these little passive-aggressive ways? Way to keep me wanting more!!
4. Every character has his or her moments, and they always stay true to their personality traits: Aaron, Miranda's mom. It reminds me of an assessment by a six-year-old student of mine who said this about Hershey's kisses: "I like them because you can count on them." Isn't that perfect? And she's right! It's the same for your characters. Solid as life gets.
5. I also love the way Miranda is wise, but you bestow her wisdom through other means so that she doesn't come across as a Know-It-All. She always remains the "aw shucks" down-to-earth girl next day. This time, it came in this form of this wonderful writing and character development:
I remember reading an article once, probably in Cosmopolitan or Marie Clair magazine. It said that women who pick the wrong guy, time after time, don't do it because they want that kind of guy. They do it because they know what to expect. There is a certain security in repetition.
You "sneak in" the important message so seamlessly, you cagey little wench, you!
6. Finally, I think 'Honey' here needs to be capitalized: Miranda, honey, that man wants to take care of you. He's a good man. And you deserve a good man."
Also, I'm noticing a lot of sentences that are linked with conjunctions but don't have the necessary comma in them. Here's just a couple, but there are several. [I know this because I read about it in Cosmo and Marie Claire...there; do I seem like less of a Know-It-All/grammar nerd now, I hope?]
I turn into the Garden of Eden Park ***comma needed here because these are two independent sentences*** and the headlights bounce over Waylon and Aaron tossing a football in the front yard.
Ditto here:
I trudge up the steps****comma**** and as I go to open the door, I glance to see Aaron.
I love the days when I see that there is another chapter in my Inbox!! Thank you for the delight this morning. xoxox
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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I cannot get enough of your writing; I'm as serious as I can possibly be. Every chapter is EXCELLENT. Every. Single. Chapter.
These are the things that I found especially good in this one:
1. Waylon. His turn-around since living with the wonderful Miranda is just so heartwarming for the teacher in me. She's made him feel secure, and he's blossoming because of it: homework done, trash taken out, concern for her and Mitch's relationship, the KIND-but-funny way he teased her with her own words. He's become a young man anyone would love to have around. I feel like Miranda always saw that in him --though, originally, it was NOT easy-- and she just kept nurturing him until everyone else could see it, too.
2. This line...because there has to be at least ONE time per chapter when I experience a LOL moment:
I move faster than a fat kid reaching for the last cookie.
I so seriously wish you lived next door to me. You are hilarious and would make my life absolutely perfect.
3. The INTRIGUE! Is Dougie alive? Was that him? Who keeps hassling Miranda in these little passive-aggressive ways? Way to keep me wanting more!!
4. Every character has his or her moments, and they always stay true to their personality traits: Aaron, Miranda's mom. It reminds me of an assessment by a six-year-old student of mine who said this about Hershey's kisses: "I like them because you can count on them." Isn't that perfect? And she's right! It's the same for your characters. Solid as life gets.
5. I also love the way Miranda is wise, but you bestow her wisdom through other means so that she doesn't come across as a Know-It-All. She always remains the "aw shucks" down-to-earth girl next day. This time, it came in this form of this wonderful writing and character development:
I remember reading an article once, probably in Cosmopolitan or Marie Clair magazine. It said that women who pick the wrong guy, time after time, don't do it because they want that kind of guy. They do it because they know what to expect. There is a certain security in repetition.
You "sneak in" the important message so seamlessly, you cagey little wench, you!
6. Finally, I think 'Honey' here needs to be capitalized: Miranda, honey, that man wants to take care of you. He's a good man. And you deserve a good man."
Also, I'm noticing a lot of sentences that are linked with conjunctions but don't have the necessary comma in them. Here's just a couple, but there are several. [I know this because I read about it in Cosmo and Marie Claire...there; do I seem like less of a Know-It-All/grammar nerd now, I hope?]
I turn into the Garden of Eden Park ***comma needed here because these are two independent sentences*** and the headlights bounce over Waylon and Aaron tossing a football in the front yard.
Ditto here:
I trudge up the steps****comma**** and as I go to open the door, I glance to see Aaron.
I love the days when I see that there is another chapter in my Inbox!! Thank you for the delight this morning. xoxox
Comment Written 09-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 09-Nov-2023
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Well, you sure know how to make a girl smile. I love seeing your work too. I would love another Fly on the wall piece. I am so glad you are enjoying the sequel. Your excitement and approval mean the world to me. So thank you. Your review made my night. Gretchen
