Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

I like this. The sensation of the leaves shuffling underfoot is very vivid and the little rhyme completes an excellent 8 word poem, saying so much more than the words on the page. Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023

Thank you for your review, Debbie. We had to sweep them today!! LOL!

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

I love the sounds of Autumn leaves as we 'shuffle' through them or slip on them!!. It's a great onomatopoeic word! After looking up hustle and bustle I, personally, think that bustle might be more appropriate but it is your work. Good luck.

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023

Thank you for your review, Wendyanne!

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

I can relate to that feeling from my past. This is excellent work for the challenge. Your presentation is very good. You use sensory, expressive words and colorful imagery that readers will enjoy.

Best wishes,

Alex

 Comment Written 08-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023

Thanks for your review, Alex. It's all well and good, until you gotta rake them up, right? :)