Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

As parents we do tend to always busy. As a child they are always discovering things. Then when the patent gets older and starts to notice the world around them, the children are embarking on their journey as adults. Sometimes there is a happy medium. Gretchen

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 07-Nov-2023

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. You are right :) thank you for the kind words. Children are wise before they are too busy for nature adults until they are old and they get wise again.... or something like that. LoL

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my poem. You are right :) thank you for the kind words.

Gypsy

Gypsy

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

In the novel I'm writing I have a moon scene. I wonder if it'll cause these two to have their first kiss. LOL Who knows with me. Thank you for sharing this gorgeous package with us.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Thank you very much, Barbara. :)

gypsy hugs

Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was a wonderful haiku, Gypsy. This was a spectacular moon which shone through a window, it was great that the baby pointed at it. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Thank you very much, Aryr. :)

gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 06-Nov-2023

You are so welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

become a parent. . . never sleep again LOL!

cute "slow down" senryu... more people should stop and look at the moon once in awhile

great imagery - could totally see the baby pointing and the adults running around...

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Thank you very much, Shelley. :)

gypsy hugs

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I guess the parents are as busy as those speeding meteors? The baby takes time to see nature and reminds the parents to stop and take note of the beautiful things like the moon. Nice!

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023

Thank you, big sister. Yes, you got it.

Love

Marival

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

A beautiful and well-crafted senryu that is not only perceptive, but will resonate with many readers.
Your words remind me of (paraphrased) 'The geranium on the windowsill died, but the teacher kept on talking...'
Let's all hope we have time to stop rushing and embrace the moon's beauty...

Much enjoyed, Gypsy!
Thank you for sharing!
diane

 Comment Written 05-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023

Thank you very much, Diane, I appreciate your detailed and insightful review. I love the teacher senryu.

Gypsy