Me. Her. Him
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Me. Her. Him - Chapter Seven"A hidden past, a devastating truth.
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Comment from Janis M.
I've worked with one person in my life that gave me the same visceral reaction. I literally told my boss that if they didn't switch my department then I was transferring because clearly they did not take my complaint seriously. (He said; she said)
Anyway, the protagonists feelings are well communicated and easily transferred to the reader.
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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I've worked with one person in my life that gave me the same visceral reaction. I literally told my boss that if they didn't switch my department then I was transferring because clearly they did not take my complaint seriously. (He said; she said)
Anyway, the protagonists feelings are well communicated and easily transferred to the reader.
Comment Written 27-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 27-Nov-2023
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Thank you Janis.
Comment from karenina
Grrrr! Blood and dirt on her cheek, then! It seemed traumatic.
If rape why ever would William be coming around?
And Rebecca?
I'm at sixes and sevens here!
I bet you're sleeping soundly at 5:33 a.m. -- it's 12:33 a.m. here and guess what I will be tossing and turning about?
I think you omitted an "I" between how and imagined in the sentence below:
"she's not convinced by my answer, like how imagined the police would look at me, if I told them what happened."
I see there's another chapter!
To bed late this night!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Grrrr! Blood and dirt on her cheek, then! It seemed traumatic.
If rape why ever would William be coming around?
And Rebecca?
I'm at sixes and sevens here!
I bet you're sleeping soundly at 5:33 a.m. -- it's 12:33 a.m. here and guess what I will be tossing and turning about?
I think you omitted an "I" between how and imagined in the sentence below:
"she's not convinced by my answer, like how imagined the police would look at me, if I told them what happened."
I see there's another chapter!
To bed late this night!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you Karenina, I'm pleased that you're enjoying it.
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I spent my night enjoying alk the chapters!
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You keep me, the reader, in suspense. I look forward to seeing how this plays out. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. You keep me, the reader, in suspense. I look forward to seeing how this plays out. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
How does she walk around with all those deep holes she keeps digging. If and when everything comes to light, Olivia will blame her every bit as much as William because she offered more than once to hear her objections. She lied to Olivia. She should have said Olivia, I knew him years ago, and he treated me and every woman he ever knew horribly If you hire him I will have to quit. I cannot look at him everyday.
This is all making me sick. She needs to look for a new job. Karen
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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How does she walk around with all those deep holes she keeps digging. If and when everything comes to light, Olivia will blame her every bit as much as William because she offered more than once to hear her objections. She lied to Olivia. She should have said Olivia, I knew him years ago, and he treated me and every woman he ever knew horribly If you hire him I will have to quit. I cannot look at him everyday.
This is all making me sick. She needs to look for a new job. Karen
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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Thank you, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
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I was immersed in the story.
Karen
Comment from prettybluebirds
You have done and excellent job with this chapter. I must admit that this is the first time I have read any of this story. However, it was easy to get the idea as I read the previous notes and the character list. I look forward to reading more of the story.
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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You have done and excellent job with this chapter. I must admit that this is the first time I have read any of this story. However, it was easy to get the idea as I read the previous notes and the character list. I look forward to reading more of the story.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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Thank you, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Ooh, Jacob! You're not giving up that little secret yet and the mystery continues. I enjoyed this chapter. Your style is very readable and has good pace and dialogue. Olivia is far from stupid and I think she might become quite likable. Angela is going to need a friend when William starts, I seem to think. There are some small edits: para starting "But you were fine...cert(ai)nly; next para fo(rc)eful; "It feels as though something's pressing down hard on (my) brain; para starting "Dinner last night....interrup(t)ed. And re-reading, I like the way Angela's palpable physical condition seems to intensify throughout the story, seemingly reflecting her inner turmoil at the prospect of William coming there to work. Well done, Jacob! Debbie
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2023
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Ooh, Jacob! You're not giving up that little secret yet and the mystery continues. I enjoyed this chapter. Your style is very readable and has good pace and dialogue. Olivia is far from stupid and I think she might become quite likable. Angela is going to need a friend when William starts, I seem to think. There are some small edits: para starting "But you were fine...cert(ai)nly; next para fo(rc)eful; "It feels as though something's pressing down hard on (my) brain; para starting "Dinner last night....interrup(t)ed. And re-reading, I like the way Angela's palpable physical condition seems to intensify throughout the story, seemingly reflecting her inner turmoil at the prospect of William coming there to work. Well done, Jacob! Debbie
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2023
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Thank you Debbie and thank you for spotting those errors as well. I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from BethShelby
I don't what happened will come out in time. I think she may be sorry she did reveal whatever it was to Angela when she had the chance. She appears on the way to making life miserable for herself. You are doing a great job of peaking our interest.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2023
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I don't what happened will come out in time. I think she may be sorry she did reveal whatever it was to Angela when she had the chance. She appears on the way to making life miserable for herself. You are doing a great job of peaking our interest.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2023
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Thank you Beth, I'm pleased you're enjoying it.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is another well done post. We still aren't positive about Angela and William's relationship. I'm guessing he sexually molested her, but not sure, because if that's the case, he would accept the job for fear it would come out. Can't wait to read more.
You know me, sometimes I can't function of a morning without caffeine,' I laugh. (period needed after 'caffeine.' Laugh is an action tag not a speech tag.)
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2023
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This is another well done post. We still aren't positive about Angela and William's relationship. I'm guessing he sexually molested her, but not sure, because if that's the case, he would accept the job for fear it would come out. Can't wait to read more.
You know me, sometimes I can't function of a morning without caffeine,' I laugh. (period needed after 'caffeine.' Laugh is an action tag not a speech tag.)
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2023
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Thank you Barbara, I'm pleased that you're still enjoying it.