Me. Her. Him
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Me. Her. Him - Chapter Five"A hidden past, a devastating truth.
8 total reviews
Comment from Janis M.
Giving off more "I know what you did last summer" vibes. The chapters seem to be progressing well. I would still emphasize more details regarding how people look, smells, sounds, etc. it will help for visualizing the characters.
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Giving off more "I know what you did last summer" vibes. The chapters seem to be progressing well. I would still emphasize more details regarding how people look, smells, sounds, etc. it will help for visualizing the characters.
Comment Written 26-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 26-Nov-2023
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Thank you Janis.
Comment from karenina
How curious, this fleshing out of characters here in chapter five!
Clever you!
William lurked between every line even as I came to understand that Angela has much to lose if the past catches up with her!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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How curious, this fleshing out of characters here in chapter five!
Clever you!
William lurked between every line even as I came to understand that Angela has much to lose if the past catches up with her!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you're enjoying it.
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Totally!
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. You have moved the story along nicely. I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. You have moved the story along nicely. I look forward to the next chapter. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 04-Nov-2023
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Thank you.
Comment from BethShelby
This chapter helps us get to know Angela and her relationship with her boss and her great relationship with her husband. We still don't know what happened in the past with William and why she was hoping he wouldn't be hired where she works. Nice written. I'm looking forward to more.
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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This chapter helps us get to know Angela and her relationship with her boss and her great relationship with her husband. We still don't know what happened in the past with William and why she was hoping he wouldn't be hired where she works. Nice written. I'm looking forward to more.
Comment Written 01-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Thank you, I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I am seeing more into her life, but do not have even a crumb of insight into what happened to her. Was it "date rape" ? Did William briefly break up with Caz, take her out, and take her virginity without a second of thought or care? Or, did he in fact calculatingly rape her, and told guys she gave it uo easy and was a bad lay? Karen
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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I am seeing more into her life, but do not have even a crumb of insight into what happened to her. Was it "date rape" ? Did William briefly break up with Caz, take her out, and take her virginity without a second of thought or care? Or, did he in fact calculatingly rape her, and told guys she gave it uo easy and was a bad lay? Karen
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023
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Thank you Karen, I?m pleased that you?re enjoying it.
Comment from royowen
I wonder what happened twenty years ago that affect the present day. I love the thoughts of the first person, as always, it sounds like our own minds drifting in and out of observation, but not necessarily other people's global perspective, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I wonder what happened twenty years ago that affect the present day. I love the thoughts of the first person, as always, it sounds like our own minds drifting in and out of observation, but not necessarily other people's global perspective, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Roy. I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
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Most welcome
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Most welcome
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I enjoyed reading this post. I am on the edge of my seat waiting to find out what happened twenty years ago.
'Well, that's a big relief, I can just make scrambled eggs,' I laughed. (period after 'eggs.' Laughed isn't a speech tag, it's an action tag.)
'Please don't say in a microwave,' he grinned. (period after 'microwave.' Grinned is an action tag.)
'Yeah, I don't mind, shall I book the Crown?' he says. (maybe 'he asked.')
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I enjoyed reading this post. I am on the edge of my seat waiting to find out what happened twenty years ago.
'Well, that's a big relief, I can just make scrambled eggs,' I laughed. (period after 'eggs.' Laughed isn't a speech tag, it's an action tag.)
'Please don't say in a microwave,' he grinned. (period after 'microwave.' Grinned is an action tag.)
'Yeah, I don't mind, shall I book the Crown?' he says. (maybe 'he asked.')
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Barbara, I?m pleased that you?re enjoying it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You are keeping us in suspense about something that happened 20 years ago, unless you mentioned it in a post I have missed. When something like this is hanging over you it is hard to live a normal life, but she has her husband to keep her stable, another fine chapter Jacob, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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You are keeping us in suspense about something that happened 20 years ago, unless you mentioned it in a post I have missed. When something like this is hanging over you it is hard to live a normal life, but she has her husband to keep her stable, another fine chapter Jacob, much enjoyed, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you Dolly. I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
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You are doing well with this book Jacob x x x