Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

I think you have mastered the art of writing haiku and this one is no exception. I enjoyed the lovely imagery in this poem, ie, gusty winds sweeping through a winter garden. Really lovely.

 Comment Written 01-Nov-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from aryr

Excellent

The picture was beautiful with the wintery scene haiku- the house in the background, the two deer, the owl. It was a beautiful scene. Your words summed it up, waiting for a new leaf. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Blessed be.

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reply by aryr on 31-Oct-2023

Most welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

This is a magical write as winter will soon be turning all the leaves white with frost, I enjoyed your snowy scene as we start writing chilling poems filled with cold icy days ahead, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

Wonderful visual and a distinct chill passing through your verse, urging with that powerful pressure, a new beginning to start. So cleverly expressed here, Gypsy, in your lovely evocative haiku. Take care Debbie

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023

I appreciate your exceptional five stars review and kind words.

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Comment from Navada

Excellent

This is such beautiful imagery! The author's note is also very instructive. While I am aware of the basics of haiku, your explanation has helped me to understand the structure more effectively, particularly the relationship between the first two lines and the third, along with the use of the dash. I really appreciate learning from knowledgeable writers - it's one of the reasons I recently joined the site. Thank you for the share.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 01-Nov-2023

Welcome to fanstory!!! It's a wonderful community of writers and poets. Let me know if you have questions about haiku or the Fanstory site.

If you are ever interested in learning more about haiku and other Japanese poetry, I have two clubs. They are free and all levels are welcome. There are other clubs. You just go to "social" in the toolbar, and then "clubs."

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Once again, your presentation is phenomenal. You never cease to amaze me, with your God given talents. I keep checking back to see if this is a contest entry and I missed it. It should be.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023

Thank you very much, Barbara. I only enter site contests for cash. They seem to be fairer then the fanstorians prompts.

Thank you very much, Barbara! It's always a pleasure.

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Comment from Daylily

Excellent

This is a lovely posting with the gorgeous winter picture. I am a bit confused, however. I thought haiku is supposed to be about something that can actually be witnessed in one moment of time. The last line here -- waiting to turn a new leaf -- is a future event just being thought about in the human mind and not something actually being observed; it is a guess about what is going to be happening in the future. If it said, plants lie dormant, or dormant leafless plant, then it would be something actually seen.

If I am wrong, please let me know as I am always open to learning new things. Thanks, Lily

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023

Hello, Lily,

You are partly right.

Haiku gives a moment of insight based on observation in nature (usually written in the first two lines). It's about the relationship between humas and nature. *in my haiku, the observation is the winter scene in a garden* the satori is in juxtaposition of barren winter in hope of a new beginning in spring, starting a new. The satori in my haiku *turning a new leaf* means to make a connection between two parts connected in a common phrase...."turning a new leaf" a well known phrase people can relate to. What does the phrase "turning a new leaf" mean to you?

My satori is not just about new beginnings, the connection is also the "leaf"

Satori is a deep experience; "seeing into one's true nature". Satori (usually last line) is a moment of enlightenment.

Thank you very much for taking the time to read and review my haiku.

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Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

love the turning over a new leaf in a gust of wind... cool imagery

a great haiku with smooth flow of well-chosen words

thank you for sharing
shelley :)

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from Mark D. R.

Excellent

Gypsy,

Just like turning the leaves of a book, your poem gives us hope for new beginnings regardless of the seasons.

Do like your artwork and coloring scheme.

Mark

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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Comment from Eli. Nightingale

Excellent

I am a huge fan of Haikus and am a bit of a stickler when it comes to them sometimes. More often than not, people throw 17 beautiful syllables on a page and call it a haiku, but forget that they still need to communicate something. In yours, I particularly liked the last verse about the wind "waiting to turn a new leaf."

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023

Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

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