A Particular Friendship
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Cross the Brook"We meet Lizzy who has just come out of the convent
10 total reviews
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is very interesting and it is a sign of your excellent writing skills that you are introducing readers to the brook this way. By foreshadowing more from and around the brook, you are preparing readers to set up places in their minds, to save information as you add it to the story.
Looking forward to more.
Best wishes,
Alexandra :))
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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This is very interesting and it is a sign of your excellent writing skills that you are introducing readers to the brook this way. By foreshadowing more from and around the brook, you are preparing readers to set up places in their minds, to save information as you add it to the story.
Looking forward to more.
Best wishes,
Alexandra :))
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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I love the way you sum this up. Excellent review. Thank you.
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Thank you for saying that! I am disabled from my MS but I do have a masters on literacy so I try to use what I've learned, whenever I can. ;)
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***you go girl***
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow what a very terrifying experience you have been through! No wonder you have PTSD!! You have described the experience and the resulting thoughts and feelings very well.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Wow what a very terrifying experience you have been through! No wonder you have PTSD!! You have described the experience and the resulting thoughts and feelings very well.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your engaged review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an interesting chapter in your non-fictional memoir, both in terms of subject and style used. I think I would have liked to see the whole chapter posted as poem, as there are many poetic devices running through the prose section. kay
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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This is an interesting chapter in your non-fictional memoir, both in terms of subject and style used. I think I would have liked to see the whole chapter posted as poem, as there are many poetic devices running through the prose section. kay
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you for your observative review.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I believe that there are parallel lives going on all the time and sometimes we step from this one into another. Thus, the deja vu. I have a few episodes in my life which give me PTSD flashbacks too. They are debilitating. I enjoy your work, I was a champion berry picker too. But my mouth was always stained! hahaha Karen
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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I believe that there are parallel lives going on all the time and sometimes we step from this one into another. Thus, the deja vu. I have a few episodes in my life which give me PTSD flashbacks too. They are debilitating. I enjoy your work, I was a champion berry picker too. But my mouth was always stained! hahaha Karen
Comment Written 04-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2023
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This is funny, but you must have had some left for pie...lol
Also I'd be curious about some of your past life triggers. It is good to find someone who gets it. It'd be healing to share stuff
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
The brook was almost like a character in your lives. You knew it when it was in a playful mood and fun to cross and also when it threatened your house and your very life. Well written but I don't quite understand the changes in font, size, and spacing of your letters.
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2023
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The brook was almost like a character in your lives. You knew it when it was in a playful mood and fun to cross and also when it threatened your house and your very life. Well written but I don't quite understand the changes in font, size, and spacing of your letters.
Comment Written 02-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2023
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The font just got messed up. I love the way you saw the brook as a character and personified it, cool
Comment from aryr
The brook manage to shape us, unites us and created days of enjoyment. It was 'us'. It also was us that provided the plots. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2023
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The brook manage to shape us, unites us and created days of enjoyment. It was 'us'. It also was us that provided the plots. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 02-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 03-Nov-2023
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Thank you for the delightful review.
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You are very welcome, Liz.
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***hugs***
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***smile***
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A mile of smiles
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Wohoo, a long mile.
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I need this! I have been stress for a week or so. I will not go into the several technological plus reasons. I'll just say, this humor is good. Things are slowly sorting themselves out. the universe takes good care of me.
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The universe always take care of us.
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So true
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Blessings and promises!
Comment from lyenochka
I love it when prose is broken up with poetry! I liked how you summarized the experience with a poem. I also like how you show us that it's possible to have PTSD after that thundercrack which was followed by a life-threatening hurricane event.
The sentence that starts with "In the exact spot Nike..." has two different font sizes.
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I love it when prose is broken up with poetry! I liked how you summarized the experience with a poem. I also like how you show us that it's possible to have PTSD after that thundercrack which was followed by a life-threatening hurricane event.
The sentence that starts with "In the exact spot Nike..." has two different font sizes.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your supportive review. I've just spent about an hour trying to get on here. I wrote to Tom etc I can suddenly get on. It was all kinds of tangled red tape about my password & it got messier from there. I'm glad you appreciate my account & poem. I'm beginning to have a mild PTSD from the subject of Passwords...bwaaa
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So sorry! 😔
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It got worse...my chrome book appeared to die. I went on my junker Dell to see how I could resisitate it. I ordered another on, hopefully I can move me material to the new one. I've done it be fore. I cant remember the word, but I'll figure it out. I'vejust got to keep this alive to be able to save some stuff. I save stuff in my email. I was glad I've saved my manychapter of my autobiography I started 20+ years a go. Also, my pellet stove is need inattetion. They said it will be a week before they can give me an appt. I have a propane wall heater cranked to 72 & if necessary a wood stove. Enough of that. I hope you are well & settled in
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Poison Ivy doesn't seem to affect me either. Interesting because I have very sensitive skin and am allergic to most things that come in contact with my skin. I enjoyed reading. I do understand the PTSD. It's horrible.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Poison Ivy doesn't seem to affect me either. Interesting because I have very sensitive skin and am allergic to most things that come in contact with my skin. I enjoyed reading. I do understand the PTSD. It's horrible.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. I appreciate all the support you offer me.
Comment from Beck Fenton
I can see where you are going now with this memoir. perhaps you can make a clearer definition of the story being told as a child and then the adult comments being separate. Just my opinion... I love your stories.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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I can see where you are going now with this memoir. perhaps you can make a clearer definition of the story being told as a child and then the adult comments being separate. Just my opinion... I love your stories.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you for your sensitive review. I'm actually writing in themes, but you havenbroughtnup a point, I need to be more desriptive as to the age. I modified the last chapter at your suggestion. The very beginnig is when I just left the convent & it sedge ways from there. I've got t0 get nack to the beginning chapters in 1st person. Others suggested, just tell it all in 1st person, so I'm revamping the entire perspective.
Comment from prettybluebirds
You left out the word (I) in the sentence as long as (I) could. Other than that, it is a lovely story and well-written. I enjoyed reading your writing and look forward to more of the same.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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You left out the word (I) in the sentence as long as (I) could. Other than that, it is a lovely story and well-written. I enjoyed reading your writing and look forward to more of the same.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm relieved to know that was all you found. I don't know why I had such a time consuming frustrating attempt to post