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2023 Gypsy's Clubs

Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "Warm Southern Sea"
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6 total reviews 
Comment from Jumbo J
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Hi Gypsy Queen,
Yes... the Southern Sea kissed my cheeks and caressed my face in the full view of love... the wind drove its intent within a tender touch, as the echoes of a lasting body breeze skimmed over my skin leaving tingles of raised body hair standing in sensitivity... the fragrance of roses lingered in the outline of a memory wrapped up in a dream that seemed to have no end.

Of course, mine is only a response to the beauty of your dreamy composition. Your construction and presentation shines in the love and respect of your craft.

I guess I'm a hopeless romantic when it comes to words that evoke an emotional response.

I do love these Asian forms of communication. I can only imagine the letters and poems sent through the want of another from afar, the connection formed through the power of written word, and the depth to which forged a lasting echo in the heart of the recipient.

Stunning!

With our thoughts we create...
the power of word.

Warmest regards,
James.

 Comment Written 30-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
    Hello, James, I'm a romantic too. I think a love poem is the best thing you came give to a lover. I remember love poems, Robert when we fell in love but they stopped when we moved in together. I asked him why he stopped and he responded upset with me...we live together! He didn't get it. I was the one who continued and who did little acts of passion and love. Like leaving love notes around the house, dressing up sexy, putting love notes in his lunch...until he asked me to stop making lunch for him... he was annoyed with me. By then he was already enfatuated with a coworker.

    I was hoping you would read this one. I treasure your opinion and feedback because you get me, and because we share a love for nature.

    Thank you for the detailed insightful feedback.it validates my intention.

    Thank you for the exceptional six stars review.

    Take care, my friend. I wish the best for you.

    Gypsy Queen
    "A friend is one who overlooks your broken fence and admires the flowers in your garden."-author unknown
Comment from GWHARGIS
Excellent
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This was awash in nature. The sea water cradling a loved one. Waiting for a kiss in a bed of roses. This was a beautifully written poem. Great presentation. Thank you for sharing this. Gretchen

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Very sensual, yet again, very innocent. Once again, you've impressed me with your beautiful presentation. I don't know how you continually outdo yourself, but you do. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
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This is an excellent poem. Your presentation is very good. You use expressive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers.

Best wishes,

Alexandra

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
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ooh this had such cool imagery
love the thought of lying in a bed of flowers (though i prefer daisies lol)

the pic is perfect... it looks like she is dreaming of that last kiss

great sijo with a smooth flow of words

thank you for sharing
shelley :)


 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.

    Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
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I really liked "We are a flash of light amidst eternal dreams." That describes a brief passionate relationship as well as life in general. The couple is parted but the narrator keeps the memories fresh.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
    Yes. (*=*) very dramatic. LoL. Thank you, big sister.

    Love

    Marival