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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "Georgios"Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.
20 total reviews
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I still have more to get through. This is so involving am going to copy this so I can read faster. I like this story very much. But without any points. I need to increase my time. I hope this does not offend you in any way. Karen
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I still have more to get through. This is so involving am going to copy this so I can read faster. I like this story very much. But without any points. I need to increase my time. I hope this does not offend you in any way. Karen
Comment Written 21-Jan-2024
Comment from w.j.debi
This is an exciting escape from Echo's apartment. The specters seem to be working overtime trying to catch her, using as many tricks as they can conjure. Thankfully, Theo has plenty of backup to help Echo. I like these creatures from the ether coming to the rescue. I see this was nominated for Book of the Month. Congrats.
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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This is an exciting escape from Echo's apartment. The specters seem to be working overtime trying to catch her, using as many tricks as they can conjure. Thankfully, Theo has plenty of backup to help Echo. I like these creatures from the ether coming to the rescue. I see this was nominated for Book of the Month. Congrats.
Comment Written 14-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 14-Nov-2023
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Hi Debi,
Wow, thank you so much for catching up on the chapters! It?s so good to hear from you and to get your take on the chapter.
It was nominated, thank you.
Comment from rspoet
Hello Rhonda,
Another exciting chapter in the book, as Echo makes her escape, with a little assistance form Georgios and Theo, as she flew through the trees. Ah, flying through trees, I used to do that. A slight exaggeration, more like climbing through trees, branch by branch. if my parents only knew, I'd have been grounded for weeks. Now I'm grounded by gravity and age.
Plus, we have knights in shining armor riding muscular horses. Sounds a bit like Camelot.
And Junior refers to his father. I assume he will play a big role, as top villain.
And soon, I suspect, Echo will wonder everyone is so anxious to get her. She must be quite special, aside from being a talented person.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Hello Rhonda,
Another exciting chapter in the book, as Echo makes her escape, with a little assistance form Georgios and Theo, as she flew through the trees. Ah, flying through trees, I used to do that. A slight exaggeration, more like climbing through trees, branch by branch. if my parents only knew, I'd have been grounded for weeks. Now I'm grounded by gravity and age.
Plus, we have knights in shining armor riding muscular horses. Sounds a bit like Camelot.
And Junior refers to his father. I assume he will play a big role, as top villain.
And soon, I suspect, Echo will wonder everyone is so anxious to get her. She must be quite special, aside from being a talented person.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Hi Robert, thanks so much for the six star review!
Funny about you climbing through trees. Echo should have gone to you for instructions!
I loved to climb, but not from tree to tree, and definitely the lower branches, lol.
Understand the grounding by age, but my mother was usually up in the tree with me.
Junior?s father will show up fairly soon, though Theo?s father first.
She has value, for sure, though the enemy?s fascination is a bit convoluted.
Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment from Pam (respa)
An excellent chapter, Rhonda. It flowed well and explained a few things about Echo's experiences and the various people she is encountering. It definitely isn't a dull life, but she probably wouldn't mind something calmer.
I like how she is very observant and tries to figure out people and their motives, like the guy who had her pinned to the tree. She doesn't back down but I think she also tries to make sure things don't get worse. She is lucky that Theo and those associated with him are there to protect her even though it is confusing keeping track of everything at times.
I like the break in tension when her cat mews. She also makes good observations about Theo, his men, and wonders about the lives they lead in their world. I have a feeling she might be going to find out. Georgios seems similar to Theo in demeanor and cares about Echo's welfare and doesn't hesitate to tell her who he is. I like his endearing comment, "Fly, little sparrow."
A very good conclusion showing Echo following the advice of Georgios and making sure she and Sunny would wait until she thought things were safe. Very well done.
For one, brief second, she hesitated.
[I would leave out the comma after one]
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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An excellent chapter, Rhonda. It flowed well and explained a few things about Echo's experiences and the various people she is encountering. It definitely isn't a dull life, but she probably wouldn't mind something calmer.
I like how she is very observant and tries to figure out people and their motives, like the guy who had her pinned to the tree. She doesn't back down but I think she also tries to make sure things don't get worse. She is lucky that Theo and those associated with him are there to protect her even though it is confusing keeping track of everything at times.
I like the break in tension when her cat mews. She also makes good observations about Theo, his men, and wonders about the lives they lead in their world. I have a feeling she might be going to find out. Georgios seems similar to Theo in demeanor and cares about Echo's welfare and doesn't hesitate to tell her who he is. I like his endearing comment, "Fly, little sparrow."
A very good conclusion showing Echo following the advice of Georgios and making sure she and Sunny would wait until she thought things were safe. Very well done.
For one, brief second, she hesitated.
[I would leave out the comma after one]
Comment Written 31-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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Pam, thank you for spending so much time on this review. You analyzed action, motive, characters, setting. I appreciate that so much!
Echo does spend a lot of time analyzing people and situations. It?s part of her personality to overthink, but what makes her a good reporter. Thank you you noticing. It will show up again later.
I?m pretty sure she?s about to find out a lot about his world! It will take her a bit, but she will figure out why all the attention is on her, then what her new role in life will be.
I fixed the comma, thank you!
Thank you again,
Rhonda
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You are very welcome, Rhonda. A good story makes a good review. I am enjoying it, and you are doing a good job. Thanks for the insight about Echo.
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Again, thank you. You?re encouragement means a lot!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is such an exciting story I'm not sure if I'd catch a proofing error. I just get lost in the story. It is now apparent there are more than humans in Echo's world. I'll looking forward to seeing where Echo is going.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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This is such an exciting story I'm not sure if I'd catch a proofing error. I just get lost in the story. It is now apparent there are more than humans in Echo's world. I'll looking forward to seeing where Echo is going.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Awww, that's so sweet. I hope there were no errors, but no matter how many times you go through something, you always miss something.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from prettybluebirds
Thank you for saving the cat, too. I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and can hardly wait for the next one. I hope you are intending to publish this story. I think it would do well.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thank you for saving the cat, too. I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter and can hardly wait for the next one. I hope you are intending to publish this story. I think it would do well.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much! The cat is going to be an important part later, as are some more animals.
I self published this years ago, way before I really knew what I was doing. I?m kind of using it now like an outline to rewrite it so I can republish. Thanks for being a part of my journey.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is such a magical story and, from the start, you know exactly how to enchant the reader with your wonderful imagery. Echo has now been rescued by Georgios and would seem to be safe until Theo's arrival. Once again we read about the evocative odours, this time of the powerful steed, as they make their escape away from the fray. Excellent write, Rhonda. Looking forward to reading more. Debbie
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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This is such a magical story and, from the start, you know exactly how to enchant the reader with your wonderful imagery. Echo has now been rescued by Georgios and would seem to be safe until Theo's arrival. Once again we read about the evocative odours, this time of the powerful steed, as they make their escape away from the fray. Excellent write, Rhonda. Looking forward to reading more. Debbie
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Debbie. I appreciate your time and effort in reviewing, and for your support. You are a true friend,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from forestport12
Love that first line! Much descriptive writing. That first scene with crashing glass or her past stays with me. I like how you used the sense of sound in last paragraph too. You had me all in, believing there is another world.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Love that first line! Much descriptive writing. That first scene with crashing glass or her past stays with me. I like how you used the sense of sound in last paragraph too. You had me all in, believing there is another world.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Wow, thank you Stan. I appreciate the stars and comments!
I?m glad the other world sounds realistic. That?s one reason I started by developing the characters outside of Concorde Valley, that way there?s a connection before presenting all of the fantasy elements.
Take care,
Rhonda
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Well played my friend...well played
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Thank you ever so much!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Echo is rescued by an interesting but very safe and capable person. I enjoyed reading and can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you for sharing this with us. I couldn't find any way to improve this post.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Echo is rescued by an interesting but very safe and capable person. I enjoyed reading and can't wait for the next chapter. Thank you for sharing this with us. I couldn't find any way to improve this post.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, Barbara, for carefully reviewing, and leaving helpful comments.
Take care,
Rhonda
Comment from Ulla
Rhonda this is a beautiful new chapter. Just imagine if you could fly away from all the danger. And Echo certainly had a lucky escape, with some help. I loved this chapter. Ulla, xcx
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Rhonda this is a beautiful new chapter. Just imagine if you could fly away from all the danger. And Echo certainly had a lucky escape, with some help. I loved this chapter. Ulla, xcx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Hi Ulla, thank you so much for the beautiful comments and six stars, my friend! I wish I could fly through the trees, too. I?m too afraid of heights to climb on top of a bunk bed, lol.
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Hahaha, oh dear. Of heights I have never been afraid. Lol. It was a lovely chapter. Xcx
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I have a feeling there?s not much at all you?re scared of!
My other phobia is spiders. How are you on those?
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Hahaha, you caught me out there. I hate them. We have some pretty black hairy ones here in Spain. The can be huge, but they wouldn't harm you. But still, I cringe when I have to remove one. Yuck!! Fortunately, my cat seems to care of most critters in my house. Lol.