Comment from Karen Cherry

Excellent

Very well done. I read one for one as long as you have some for me to read. I look forward to reading more of your work. You will meet a lot of nice people here. Use a decent size font, yours is too small. A lot of the older folks have trouble reading smaller print and they are the ones who review a lot. Karen

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023

Thanks for that feedback, Karen - much appreciated.

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Is it 'Minority Report' that this reminds me of? I think so. A great use of a few words. The last paragraph was a real surprise and was economically and effectively achieved. Well done.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023

Thank you. Gosh, I hadn't been thinking about Minority Report, but the parallel is definitely there. Subconscious influence!

reply by JSD on 28-Oct-2023

Woman in floatation tank did it for me.

Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your short 100 words piece of flash fiction and the ending was very unexpected and effective. Sounds nice being in a flotation tank for a short period but not as a 'prisoner'. Good luck.

 Comment Written 28-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023

Thanks, Wendyanne. I know people do it for relaxation, but I'm a bit claustrophobic and I think I'd struggle! Appreciate your feedback.