Prison Bars
A longing to escape.13 total reviews
Comment from Julie Helms
I see why this won. It is very well written with an awesome twist/reveal at the end! It's also a stark reminder that occasionally we should take time to think about how our pets perceive us. Beautifully done!
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023
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I see why this won. It is very well written with an awesome twist/reveal at the end! It's also a stark reminder that occasionally we should take time to think about how our pets perceive us. Beautifully done!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read and review. I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from lyenochka
This was brilliant. You had us thinking it was the woman's partner who was complaining and clearly out of love with her. But it was her caged, pet bird. Congratulations on the win!!
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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This was brilliant. You had us thinking it was the woman's partner who was complaining and clearly out of love with her. But it was her caged, pet bird. Congratulations on the win!!
Comment Written 30-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2023
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Thank you, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hey, Jacob! I had been planning to visit your portfolio and hadn't had a chance. Thank you for the great review on Pieces of Butternut and Blue.
This is cleverly written, and I didn't expect the ending, which was well hidden until the bird escaped. Great stuff! I can see why it won! Best, JohnC
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Hey, Jacob! I had been planning to visit your portfolio and hadn't had a chance. Thank you for the great review on Pieces of Butternut and Blue.
This is cleverly written, and I didn't expect the ending, which was well hidden until the bird escaped. Great stuff! I can see why it won! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you John. I?m really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is an inventive tale of a bird bolting for freedom and taking the opportunity to escape this ageing jailer, a fine post and congratulations on your well deserved win Jacob, a joy to read, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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This is an inventive tale of a bird bolting for freedom and taking the opportunity to escape this ageing jailer, a fine post and congratulations on your well deserved win Jacob, a joy to read, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you for taking the time to read it Dolly. I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Janis M.
I can see why this is a contest winner. I am like most, extremely empathetic to animals and how awful human beings can be to them. I'm even critical of myself. These short stories are great, because they keep the suspense right until the last line. This one especially. Good for that little bird. It's also funny to me to note the culture differences in writing. I would have written coffee stained teeth!
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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I can see why this is a contest winner. I am like most, extremely empathetic to animals and how awful human beings can be to them. I'm even critical of myself. These short stories are great, because they keep the suspense right until the last line. This one especially. Good for that little bird. It's also funny to me to note the culture differences in writing. I would have written coffee stained teeth!
Comment Written 17-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 17-Nov-2023
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Thank you Janis. I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from karenina
Wow. Second post and a contest winner! Congratulations!
Way to think outside the box...
(Or cage)
Finesse shows in your details:
"She's edging over to me, gold key in hand. She's baring her teeth, which are the colour of tea."
I was totally engaged...
What a full bodied story in 100 words!
You're going to grow a fan base quickly!
Karenina
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Wow. Second post and a contest winner! Congratulations!
Way to think outside the box...
(Or cage)
Finesse shows in your details:
"She's edging over to me, gold key in hand. She's baring her teeth, which are the colour of tea."
I was totally engaged...
What a full bodied story in 100 words!
You're going to grow a fan base quickly!
Karenina
Comment Written 08-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you, I'm really pleased that you enjoyed it.
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Love that you scored a win so fast!
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Love that you scored a win so fast!
Comment from judiverse
Congratulations on your contest win. Looks like we're sharing. I think you have a great idea for your "Prisoner" story. You build up nicely to the idea it's the bird who's the prisoner. If he's making his escape, he'll be sorry. It's a jungle out there. Who knows what calamity could happen to him? Well-constructed and very creative. judi
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Congratulations on your contest win. Looks like we're sharing. I think you have a great idea for your "Prisoner" story. You build up nicely to the idea it's the bird who's the prisoner. If he's making his escape, he'll be sorry. It's a jungle out there. Who knows what calamity could happen to him? Well-constructed and very creative. judi
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you Judi and congratulations to you as well.
Comment from Claire Tennant
A thriller from beginning to end. I might think twice about using lavender. A most deserving win. Congratulations Looking forward to reading more.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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A thriller from beginning to end. I might think twice about using lavender. A most deserving win. Congratulations Looking forward to reading more.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the generous review and the six stars, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Excellent work. I always wondered what it was like for birds that are imprisoned in cages. How can people confine animals? It must be a horrible life for them.
Karen
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Excellent work. I always wondered what it was like for birds that are imprisoned in cages. How can people confine animals? It must be a horrible life for them.
Karen
Comment Written 28-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2023
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Thank you, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
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Free all caged birds everywhere! :-)
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Have a good week friend :-)
Karen
Comment from Navada
Fantastic! I really enjoyed this look at life from the perspective of a caged bird. I also enjoyed the break for freedom at the end. I've often wondered what our pets think of us in our worst moments. This gave me some insight. Thanks for the share and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Fantastic! I really enjoyed this look at life from the perspective of a caged bird. I also enjoyed the break for freedom at the end. I've often wondered what our pets think of us in our worst moments. This gave me some insight. Thanks for the share and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Thank you, I?m pleased that you enjoyed it.
