Ghost
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
I love some of your unique phrasing, like - put your head down and play volleyball with the bees in my brain
So Grandmother is more like the wicked witch than a fairy godmother I am thinking. You are going well with this Lea, I hope it is helping you.
cheers,
valda
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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I love some of your unique phrasing, like - put your head down and play volleyball with the bees in my brain
So Grandmother is more like the wicked witch than a fairy godmother I am thinking. You are going well with this Lea, I hope it is helping you.
cheers,
valda
Comment Written 07-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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Thank you again my friend. Yes, I will continue to write until the well runs dry or the whole story has been told, and we'll see how it goes after that. I appreciate you just so you know if I haven't said so a 100 times already thank you for your review makes me smile. To see your name come up. I hope you're enjoying your day!
Comment from Ric Myworld
As your story moves along, additional elements are brought into play to let us readers realize just how trying the times were for you girls. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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As your story moves along, additional elements are brought into play to let us readers realize just how trying the times were for you girls. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 08-Nov-2023
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You rock my friend, I'm so happy to see your reviews really. I am thank you. I shouldn't for reading along and hanging in there with me. If i've said it before I'll probably say it again thank you!
Comment from Wendyanne
Wow this chapter of your book is extremely vividly descriptive and very well written. I can picture each scene clearly as you have described them so well. I can almost see the dirt draining off you. Well done for being brave enough to share this with us.
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Wow this chapter of your book is extremely vividly descriptive and very well written. I can picture each scene clearly as you have described them so well. I can almost see the dirt draining off you. Well done for being brave enough to share this with us.
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much. I appreciate those kind comments very thoughtful of you to say. you're welcome to read an autobio in my portfolio called ghost the other chapters that go with it are there I should say that some are chapters are difficult to read. Thank you again, have the best day!
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is excellent chapter. You use genuine, expressive words and colorful imagery that help readers understand how you felt throughout. Good for you, continuing to tell your story. It's not easy but you're doing it and we're reading.
Good work,
Alex
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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This is excellent chapter. You use genuine, expressive words and colorful imagery that help readers understand how you felt throughout. Good for you, continuing to tell your story. It's not easy but you're doing it and we're reading.
Good work,
Alex
Comment Written 06-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 06-Nov-2023
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Thank you again my friend i'm glad you like it!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written. Somehow I read the next part first. But all is good.
that he was taking me to my grandmothers. - (grandmother's)
shoulder."We're - You need a space after the period.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Nicely written. Somehow I read the next part first. But all is good.
that he was taking me to my grandmothers. - (grandmother's)
shoulder."We're - You need a space after the period.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Wayne, your review is wonderful. I appreciate you putting up your thoughts and things to be fixed. Because I need that.
You're insightful and kind words always welcome by me. Thank you again!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This is quite the chapter. For some reason it reminds me of how people who might be entirely neglected or on their own in the nineteenth century may have been rescued or come out of the darkest section of the woods or even a mental institution. Here is a strong paragraph:
A horrid realization hit me not just as a matter of intellect but as a matter of heart. If I hadn't made it out today, I would be dead in a matter of days. Not the girl I left behind but a wilder darker version of me came out.
It sounds like you came close to literal starvation.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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This is quite the chapter. For some reason it reminds me of how people who might be entirely neglected or on their own in the nineteenth century may have been rescued or come out of the darkest section of the woods or even a mental institution. Here is a strong paragraph:
A horrid realization hit me not just as a matter of intellect but as a matter of heart. If I hadn't made it out today, I would be dead in a matter of days. Not the girl I left behind but a wilder darker version of me came out.
It sounds like you came close to literal starvation.
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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I was very weak underweight border line malnutrition. Now. I'm I'm better I also had a virus that was causing a fever. Many cuts and bruises scrapes but recover I did. Harsh realities tend to take innocence away. Thank you, I appreciate you and your kind reviews. Totally do, and you have an Eagle Eye as well. Catch things and know what I'm saying. That's a beautiful thing. I appreciate having you along for the ride and your wisdom and insight, it's very valuable. Have a great night and thanks again!
Comment from JSD
Feeling quite down today, but reading your writing makes me feel that others have suffered and struggled and come out strong and clever and healthy like you. It helps. xxx
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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Feeling quite down today, but reading your writing makes me feel that others have suffered and struggled and come out strong and clever and healthy like you. It helps. xxx
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 26-Oct-2023
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I'm sorry you're not feeling up to snuff today. I hope you are better now and I do send you healing well wishes and hope thatt helps. I'm so glad to see your review as always. And I hope that it helps you or anybody. I'm good with thanks again for your review and for. I hope you have an amazing night and that you feel better soon!
Comment from Lisasview
Good morning Lea,
You must be writing day and night!!! Seems everyday I find a new chapter to your story and I think your writing has improved... Which of course happens when one writes a lot.
Keep writing...
Lisa
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Good morning Lea,
You must be writing day and night!!! Seems everyday I find a new chapter to your story and I think your writing has improved... Which of course happens when one writes a lot.
Keep writing...
Lisa
Comment Written 26-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Lisa, I appreciate that especially from you. Such a prolific writer as yourself. I have committed to two chapters a day And she'll write until I can write no more.
I thank you for stopping in for reading for going on the journey with me. I hope it gets a little warmer where you're at. Have a great day, thanks again!
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You are so welcome... Gosh two chapters a day... Don't you sleep? ha ha..
Lisa
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Some days are better than others when it comes to sleep. Yes, LOL hope you are well. And thank you again
Comment from pome lover
This is very worrisome, and it was when you were 15?
Hopefully you found peace with your grandmother and your sister. It must have felt great to be clean!
I hope you were kept safe there, your wounds healed and with good food, you gained weight.
Wow, what a story. As I've said before, you are a brave strong gal.
Katharine
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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This is very worrisome, and it was when you were 15?
Hopefully you found peace with your grandmother and your sister. It must have felt great to be clean!
I hope you were kept safe there, your wounds healed and with good food, you gained weight.
Wow, what a story. As I've said before, you are a brave strong gal.
Katharine
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Thank you, katharine, I'm so pleased and touched by your kind comments. Unfortunately, in this case, the rabbit hole goes very, very easy. My family's very involved with social services people are supposed to protect family's. The rabbit hole goes very deep. I wish it wasn't the case but to survive you need to and knowledge brings danger. This makes things harder to figure out and even harder to defend. I appreciate you and your kind words. And that you're reading with me enjoying me on this journey. Your well wishes and compassionate Congress are important to me. And very much appreciate it again. I thank you. I will sound like a record that is busted all over the place. But it's still relevant and must be sad. I hope you have the best night, thanks again!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Really, really, REALLY good, this chapter. All the feelings and emotions and sensations and thoughts and descriptions of what appeared visually. This is exceptional.
What do you think of making this part:
The art of disguise my family has experts, masters of the trade. She's fooled you now the reader, She is not the savior as she would have you believe.
But the reason...
The reason for it all.
like this:
When it comes to the art of disguise, though, Beloved Reader, no family has more experts and masters of the trade. Take my grandmother, for example. She is not the savior she would have you believe. Not even close. She's fooled you, as she fooled everyone. She is actually the reason for it all.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Really, really, REALLY good, this chapter. All the feelings and emotions and sensations and thoughts and descriptions of what appeared visually. This is exceptional.
What do you think of making this part:
The art of disguise my family has experts, masters of the trade. She's fooled you now the reader, She is not the savior as she would have you believe.
But the reason...
The reason for it all.
like this:
When it comes to the art of disguise, though, Beloved Reader, no family has more experts and masters of the trade. Take my grandmother, for example. She is not the savior she would have you believe. Not even close. She's fooled you, as she fooled everyone. She is actually the reason for it all.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2023
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Top of the morning and evening afternoon to you, we'll catch him all the parts of the day, just in case l o l. Thank you for your fine compliment. I'm glad you liked this one. I'm gonna to go ahead and made the suggested changes with the same intention intended. Thank you again. I appreciate your amazing suggestions corrections for it all of that good stuff, you're the best!
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Always a pleasure.