Ghost
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Comment from Pearl Edwards
A lot of spent emotion in the chapter Lea, both back then and in the writing I'm sure. It is good that you had your two friends that stuck with you. Like you say, a beautiful gift. Well done, cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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A lot of spent emotion in the chapter Lea, both back then and in the writing I'm sure. It is good that you had your two friends that stuck with you. Like you say, a beautiful gift. Well done, cheers
Valda
Comment Written 30-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2023
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I'm grateful thank you Valda! Your interest touches me. It's so nice to have yourself and people like you reading along with me. I spent my life people not believing me. Now it is different, it's validation. A great thing and people like yourself and make that happen. Thank you so much!
Comment from Annmuma
Your writing makes my heart hurt sometimes! But it is always honest, emotional and addictive. Once I begin a story, there is no stopping until I read every word. I can't imagine your fear or your courage in facing it. Well done. annn
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023
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Your writing makes my heart hurt sometimes! But it is always honest, emotional and addictive. Once I begin a story, there is no stopping until I read every word. I can't imagine your fear or your courage in facing it. Well done. annn
Comment Written 22-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023
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Ann thank you so very much again. You are so insightful. I think a lot of Of writers are but you got that little extra something I appreciate you and you coming along with me on this journey, I can't stop saying how much it needs to be everyone could look at my heart they would know. Thank you again, have a great night!
Comment from LJbutterfly
It's good your friends took you to get food, but their news about your parents and sister was devastating. Now that your parents have no children to hate, what are they doing? How will you ever find your sister? The saga continues.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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It's good your friends took you to get food, but their news about your parents and sister was devastating. Now that your parents have no children to hate, what are they doing? How will you ever find your sister? The saga continues.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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At the time I didn't know what they were doing. And I didn't know about my sister but thankfully it wasn't too long before I found out some decisions were made for me across the nation is never a good thing one in a situation that I was in. I thank you so much for your review. I'm just hanging in there with me. I'll put up 2 new chapters today. I hope to win 2 of them and hope your day is amazing.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
How very sad this situation is and I hope your sister is okay. To say you don't live at home any more when there has been no search for you of care as to how you are surviving, is rather evil. When no one else cares for you, at least you are caring for yourself and this is what you have to do to survive, another great chapter Lea, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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How very sad this situation is and I hope your sister is okay. To say you don't live at home any more when there has been no search for you of care as to how you are surviving, is rather evil. When no one else cares for you, at least you are caring for yourself and this is what you have to do to survive, another great chapter Lea, love Dolly x
Comment Written 21-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much Dolly again, I appreciate your reviews. You're always consistently compassionate knowledgeable and have great insight. 2 more today, I'm busy writing. The task been turned on, you see and continues to flow. Thank you again, have a great day!
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I am a little bit confused by this story but maybe is something that I am missing, anyway if you do continue the story it will be a good story. Tahnk you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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I am a little bit confused by this story but maybe is something that I am missing, anyway if you do continue the story it will be a good story. Tahnk you for sharing and good luck with your writings.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Hi Iza! Thank you for reading and I appreciate your comments just to answer. You're to let you know that. This is a chapter in an autobile called ghost. It can be found in my portfolio. If you wish to read, they're all about the same length. You're welcome to look at it any time if you wish, it will take some confusion away.
Thank you so much for reading and for coming along with on the journey. I hope you have the best day!
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
this turn of events is distressing for sure. I understand your reluctance to reach out to the authorities, but there is only so much a young person can do on their own. With the coming of fall a consideration, and the difficulty that it can bring as far as weather, I'm sure the pressure was mounting on you. I can only imagine the troubled thoughts that you endured when your sister came to mind. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Hello Lea,
this turn of events is distressing for sure. I understand your reluctance to reach out to the authorities, but there is only so much a young person can do on their own. With the coming of fall a consideration, and the difficulty that it can bring as far as weather, I'm sure the pressure was mounting on you. I can only imagine the troubled thoughts that you endured when your sister came to mind. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much Tom, once again. You offer a bang up review for which I'm always grateful! I will be putting out 2 more chapters today. And find out a little bit more the time defy if on horizon.
I appreciate you reading and seeing your review come up as always makes me smile. Thank you for this and I hope you enjoy the next couple chapters. Thank you again!!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This one is anxiety-riddled.
One thing I'm noticing is that I feel irritated by the monikers "Mad Friend" and "Sad Friend." For me, that's interfering with my concentrating on the scene and the dialogue. Even if you just call them "M" and "S" I think it would flow better.
I'm interested to see what happens next. My curiosity is definitely piqued.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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This one is anxiety-riddled.
One thing I'm noticing is that I feel irritated by the monikers "Mad Friend" and "Sad Friend." For me, that's interfering with my concentrating on the scene and the dialogue. Even if you just call them "M" and "S" I think it would flow better.
I'm interested to see what happens next. My curiosity is definitely piqued.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Good morning, how are you? I guess it's still morning where you're at? Ohio so exhausted and fell righto sleep. I hope my friend moved a whole bunch of tools and stuff on his truck into my car. And of course, we had to go unload it. And when I got back last night. What was it after 7 anyway. I fell right asleep! I've gone ahead and Is implemented your suggestion there are now m and s. And definitely it does blow better thank you for that cool suggestion. That's always i'm happy for your advice and for your review I got two chapters to pump out today, so here we go, thank you so much!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Goodness, I could taste that filet o'fish going down and see the look of amazement on the faces of your friends. The mystery of your missing sister is unresolved and this concern takes precedence over everything else. Your word 'distractedly' says it all. Be careful over punctuation here, Leah. It's mostly very good but there are a few omissions: That bites(,) man; I looked up at my two friends(,) so grateful...; That's kind of creepy(,) someone...; but I brought it here instead (no need for the comma after but: We gotta take off(,) dude...; I tried anyway(.) I tried...; Some questions... ('had to' and 'must' are the same although I understand your reinforcement but could it finally be 'would be'? Thanks for sharing another fine chapter here. Debbie
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Goodness, I could taste that filet o'fish going down and see the look of amazement on the faces of your friends. The mystery of your missing sister is unresolved and this concern takes precedence over everything else. Your word 'distractedly' says it all. Be careful over punctuation here, Leah. It's mostly very good but there are a few omissions: That bites(,) man; I looked up at my two friends(,) so grateful...; That's kind of creepy(,) someone...; but I brought it here instead (no need for the comma after but: We gotta take off(,) dude...; I tried anyway(.) I tried...; Some questions... ('had to' and 'must' are the same although I understand your reinforcement but could it finally be 'would be'? Thanks for sharing another fine chapter here. Debbie
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Absolutely correct, Debbie, thank you again you've been very helpful. I've taken a lot of your suggestions and incorporated them there will be some rewrites. once completed the final chapter I'll go back to the beginning, read my corrections why you do a quite a bit along the way as well? Thank you again. I appreciate all your help and your kindness. And I'm going to be sending out 2 more chapters today. Comes the change in these ones when decisions and choice is taken from you. Thank you again I always look forward to your reviews. I appreciate you taking the time, but totally do. Enjoy your day for sure!
Comment from BethShelby
Okay, now I'm almost as much concerned about you sister as you were. Has the little sister started living full time with her father. I remember she was living with him some of the time. I'll be looking forward to your next post.
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Okay, now I'm almost as much concerned about you sister as you were. Has the little sister started living full time with her father. I remember she was living with him some of the time. I'll be looking forward to your next post.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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Hello Beth, how are you? Thank you so much for reading again. I've be sending a couple more chapters today. My sister remained with her father from the time he took her when she was 5 until she grew up to be an adult. She did, however, come every odd weekend to visit. He was equally cruel. Thank you again for reading offering your kind comments and your concern. Yes, I will address all of those. I hope you're having the best day. Thank you again!
Comment from Jim Wile
You are certainly building the suspense about what will eventually happen to you, Lea. You can't even enjoy your little victory over the walking stick lady for very long before worries about your sister plague you. And your friends keep reminding you that summer won't last forever.
What could have happened to your sister? Could she have run away too and found her own hiding place? I'm sure this was really eating at you.
At least you have your two friends whose loyalty to you is admirable. I'm sure they worried about you and wished they could help you in other ways besides bringing you food.
Your presence of mind and self-awareness were also quite admirable. You realized that your small victory over the walking stick lady shouldn't give you an over-inflated image of yourself and that you were still very vulnerable. Amazing in one so young.
Gosh, I wish I could read this whole story in one sitting. It really is riveting.
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"my hands were tired" -- should be "tied"
"bowl of wax" -- should be "ball of wax"
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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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You are certainly building the suspense about what will eventually happen to you, Lea. You can't even enjoy your little victory over the walking stick lady for very long before worries about your sister plague you. And your friends keep reminding you that summer won't last forever.
What could have happened to your sister? Could she have run away too and found her own hiding place? I'm sure this was really eating at you.
At least you have your two friends whose loyalty to you is admirable. I'm sure they worried about you and wished they could help you in other ways besides bringing you food.
Your presence of mind and self-awareness were also quite admirable. You realized that your small victory over the walking stick lady shouldn't give you an over-inflated image of yourself and that you were still very vulnerable. Amazing in one so young.
Gosh, I wish I could read this whole story in one sitting. It really is riveting.
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"my hands were tired" -- should be "tied"
"bowl of wax" -- should be "ball of wax"
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023
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As usual as you give the best reviews. I always so insightful and I don't have good things to say. Almost like you live through it yourself. I can appreciate that, and clarity of mind is refreshing. Thank you for this awesome review. All of the questions you have are coming up soon. And we'll carry on from there. I don't wanna give away too much. LOL have a great night.
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You're making this very real, which puts the reader right there with you, experiencing the emotions that you are experiencing. That's what makes this so riveting. I can't wait to read your next chapters each day; it's such a fascinating and well-told story.