Comment from Wendyanne

Excellent

This is a delightful piece of children's poetry and I think this would certainly encourage children to smile. I like the rhythm and rhyme scheme and I think it's a good entry for the contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 22-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

thanks, Wendy for your very nice comments! I couldn't resist the picture.

Comment from WalkerMan

Exceptional

This is a delightfully amusing poem to tease a little girl out of hiding a smile that wants to be seen. The cute illustration perfectly fits the theme. If needed, reciting this poem likely will reveal that missing smile. Superb.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

thank you so much for your lovely comments and the wonderful 6!!! I really appreciate it. I couldn't resist that picture.
Katharine

reply by WalkerMan on 22-Oct-2023

You are most welcome, Katharine. When I read your poem, I realized it could not be any better for the purpose, and that picture could not be better either. This post should do well in competition. :)) -- Mike

reply by the author on 22-Oct-2023

I appreciate that!

reply by WalkerMan on 22-Oct-2023

:))

Comment from Daylily

Excellent

I can truly picture a child responding excitedly to this cheerful little poem using various parts of the head to move toward the goal of having a child be unable to any longer hold back a joyful smile. Perfect choice of photographic art, as well.

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

Thank you so much for your lovely comments. Yes, I couldn't believe my luck finding that picture.
Katharine

Comment from Mrs. KT

Excellent

Absolutely delightful, Katharine!
I can just imagine your poem in made into a children's book - or in a collection of poems for children.
And I will share your poem with my grandson, Bowdie; he is sure to love it as well!

Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
diane

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

Diane, sharing it with your grandson is the greatest compliment you could give me!!!Thank you so much!
Katharine

reply by Mrs. KT on 21-Oct-2023

My pleasure, Katharine!
and Thank you!

diane

Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is excellent work. Your use of imagery is very good. Your expressive words and authentic descriptions will draw in readers.

Best wishes,

Alexandra

 Comment Written 21-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

thank you, Alexandra. What a lovely response.
Katharine

Comment from Douglas Goff

Excellent

This is a wonderful Child based poem for the competition.

I felt that it was written in a similar style to Dr. Sues, whom I loved.

Very good. This was a fun one.
D

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Oct-2023

Thank you, Douglas. I agree, I think Dr. Seuss was brilliant.

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

It is a kind of kind hearted and soft funky of a children's poem and I have enjoyed reading it. Excellent work! No mistakes found. I like it. Thank you for sharing!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Soft funky is a new one on this grandma :)

Comment from Liz O'Neill

Excellent

This is a fun poem. I especially like these two lines: "Oops! It moved down in your ear;
Too dark in there to see, I fear."
This is a good aproach to give the reader cause to pause. This is begin to take the form of a metaphor. Clever.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

thanks, Liz for your neat comments.

reply by Liz O'Neill on 20-Oct-2023

***smile*** I was narc-ing & it shows with words left out

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

A lovely photograph and I enjoyed your sweet loving words here, when children smile, the whole room lights up, I enjoyed your uplifting and positive post, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

thanks, Dolly. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Couldn't resist the picture. :)
Katharine

Comment from T B Botts

Exceptional

Hello Katharine,
your heart for children is coming through in this poem. You have a real skill in relating to them. I saw it in your book and I see it now in this poem. This was delightful gal. Good luck in the contest. I think you've got a winner here.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 19-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

Thank you, Tom! That means a lot to me! And thanks so much for the 6! I saw that picture, and couldn't resist it. Isn't she a cutie!
You're in the low 30's already. Makes me cold to think about it :)
When you waited for 4 hours, did you have to keep your car running the whole time?

reply by T B Botts on 20-Oct-2023

Oh no, I just went inside after an hour or so. The only place that people leave machinery running due to the cold is like up in Prudhoe Bay on the oil rigs and stuff. Most of the vehicles in places farther north, like Fairbanks and beyond have electric engine heaters to keep the oil from freezing up. The tires do get flat spots on them after they've sat all night in the cold, and for a while, they will make a noise until they warm up enough to get round again. It's not that cold here. I have the added advantage of having a heated garage too, so I seldom spend too much time out in the cold in the car.

reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023

brilliant - a heated garage.
How do the chains work on pavement?
Would you believe we were 94 degrees this afternoon!!! and last week we were chilly. Crazy weather!