Tempted To Run
She had many scars16 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This poem, Tempted to Run, presented with five AABB-rhymed quatrains, tells a tale that so many women know as true. If they could only get a viable chance to escape.
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
  |
This poem, Tempted to Run, presented with five AABB-rhymed quatrains, tells a tale that so many women know as true. If they could only get a viable chance to escape.
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
-
Yes, thanks!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
The temptation from Satan fulfils the brief of the contest, luring her into a state of despair and unwillingness to survive. I would have wished that element to have been more dominant in the verse because, otherwise, it sounds more like a poem about a broken relationship. But a great effort nonetheless. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
|
The temptation from Satan fulfils the brief of the contest, luring her into a state of despair and unwillingness to survive. I would have wished that element to have been more dominant in the verse because, otherwise, it sounds more like a poem about a broken relationship. But a great effort nonetheless. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 20-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 20-Oct-2023
-
Thank you!
Comment from Wendyanne
I think we have all been tempted to run at times, I know I certainly have. Your poem makes the reader feel pity for the lady in the poem as you have described her pain and anguish so well. I saw one minor typo, ie, second verse should be SHE not SBE but you know that.
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
|
I think we have all been tempted to run at times, I know I certainly have. Your poem makes the reader feel pity for the lady in the poem as you have described her pain and anguish so well. I saw one minor typo, ie, second verse should be SHE not SBE but you know that.
Comment Written 18-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
-
Thanks
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Tempted to run, is something many go through but still stay. I never understand why they do that. Yet I do in another way. After having the one you love constantly putting you down, it's hard not to believe the words in the end. A vicious circle. Well done, this is a well written poem on the topic of abuse and the need to give into the temptation of running. Well done and good luck. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
|
Tempted to run, is something many go through but still stay. I never understand why they do that. Yet I do in another way. After having the one you love constantly putting you down, it's hard not to believe the words in the end. A vicious circle. Well done, this is a well written poem on the topic of abuse and the need to give into the temptation of running. Well done and good luck. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 18-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
-
Thanks
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is excellent work. You use descriptive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers. Many will relate to this.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
|
This is excellent work. You use descriptive words and colorful imagery that will draw in a readers. Many will relate to this.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
Comment Written 18-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 18-Oct-2023
-
thanks
Comment from gramalot8
Very unfortunate but so true how Satan affects us when we're at our lowest point. It can be hard to get out of his clutches. Hopefully one can reach out for the proper help when it's needed. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on this issue with us.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
|
Very unfortunate but so true how Satan affects us when we're at our lowest point. It can be hard to get out of his clutches. Hopefully one can reach out for the proper help when it's needed. Thanks for sharing your thoughts on this issue with us.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
-
You are welcome.
Comment from JSD
Great entry for the Temptation contest. There's a typo in the second stanza but otherwise this is well composed and structured. The story maybe needs a better conclusion but the message is clear. Good luck.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
|
Great entry for the Temptation contest. There's a typo in the second stanza but otherwise this is well composed and structured. The story maybe needs a better conclusion but the message is clear. Good luck.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
-
Thanks for your great review!
Comment from tempeste
Ciao!,
It's sad to know that there are people out there whose sole intent is to play around with others' hearts.
They get a kick in pretending to love and the victim is left devastated when the charade is over... cruel people that leave their victims feeling cheated, used.
The victims later suffer from trust issues and lose confidence..some even stop eating and put their health in danger.
I think you did a good job of showing the damage these creeps cause.
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
 |
Ciao!,
It's sad to know that there are people out there whose sole intent is to play around with others' hearts.
They get a kick in pretending to love and the victim is left devastated when the charade is over... cruel people that leave their victims feeling cheated, used.
The victims later suffer from trust issues and lose confidence..some even stop eating and put their health in danger.
I think you did a good job of showing the damage these creeps cause.
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
-
Thanks for the six stars!
Comment from jake cosmos aller
very moving poem about an abusive relationship. I like these lines the best
but once became more than twice
Now he's my master
pills and jabs keep me floating
will I ever find my feet?
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
|
very moving poem about an abusive relationship. I like these lines the best
but once became more than twice
Now he's my master
pills and jabs keep me floating
will I ever find my feet?
Comment Written 17-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023
-
Thank you.
-
I didn't write those words in my poem.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are sad, upsetting, heartfelt, descriptive and creative. I pondered on the author's words and saw this situation as abuse. The author describes the scene well and conveys the hurt felt throughout these words. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with the words of this poem.
Hi, hope you are having a great day!...Maria
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
|
The author's words are sad, upsetting, heartfelt, descriptive and creative. I pondered on the author's words and saw this situation as abuse. The author describes the scene well and conveys the hurt felt throughout these words. The poem flows and connects well. The artwork goes well with the words of this poem.
Hi, hope you are having a great day!...Maria
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
-
I am, are you?
-
I am having a great day!
Stay well n safe.....Maria
-
I am having a great day too!
Stay well n safe.....Maria
