Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

Thank you for sharing this presentation with us. It's beautiful as we've come to expect with your poetry. I can't imagine you ever posting something just plain. You always dazzle us.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023

Thank you, Barbara. I appreciate your excellent review and kind words.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from Fei Ma

Exceptional

I love this poem, very classic and poetic. The words line up in an increasing pattern, creating very pleasing visual effect. I suggest this beautiful poem is not to be called a busso, I am not sure though, as I have hard time to count 5/7/5/7/7/7.

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023

Fei Ma

Thank you for catching that error. This is a Gogyohka 5 Lines Poem.

I appreciate your exceptional six stars review and helpful feedback. (*÷*) may you have a wonderful day.

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Comment from shelley kaye

Excellent

this was a cool busso

and i like the pyramid effect...
question- so the syllable counts aren't written in stone? (3-6-5-8-8)
as long as it's 38 syllables or less?

anyway, good flow of words and imagery
maybe have one of the lines in a light blue to match that cool blue flower in the bottom pic? lol just a thought ;)


thank you for sharing'
shelley :)

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023

Gogyohka was a form developed by Enta Kusakabe in Japan and translates literally to "five-line poem." An off-shoot of the tanka form, the gogyohka has very simple rules: The poem is comprised of five lines with one phrase per line. That's it.

.I appreciate your excellent review and helpful feedback. (*÷*) may you have a wonderful day.

Gypsy hugs

reply by shelley kaye on 16-Oct-2023

oh wait- was thinking of the busso LOL! oops! so many forms - gotta start making better notes LOL!

thank you gypsy 😅😁👍💙🖊️🦄

reply by the author on 17-Oct-2023

You are right, I wrote rules of busso in my author notes by mistake but the poem is Gogyohka. A reviewer told me. I guess I had busso in my mind too.

Comment from kahpot

Excellent

Excellent, though I am so happy that I did not have to travel that far to find my love, seduction is hard to avoid, though we must, very well written and presented****kahpot

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023

.I appreciate your excellent review and helpful feedback. (*÷*) may you have a wonderful day.

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Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Your poem shows an enthusiastic and loyal love that goes beyond this world. Hopefully, the one that is so loved with that much dedication, will reciprocate such a love!

 Comment Written 16-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023

Ihank you very much, big sister, it's interesting the way different people grieve. When my mother died I did lay in my mother's side of the bed and held on to her illow and clothes.

Love,
Marival

reply by lyenochka on 16-Oct-2023

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Comment from Alexandra Trovato

Excellent

This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. I also love that song. Your beautiful presentation is very good, too. You use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in many readers I'm sure.

Best wishes!

Alexan

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023

Thank you very much, Alexan. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

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Comment from aryr

Excellent

This was a beautiful Bussokusekika, Gypsy. The dual picture were of great value since they spoke a fantastic dual. Your words were wonderful because they addressed the fact that you spoke the truth of searching the universe. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023

Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy hugs

reply by aryr on 15-Oct-2023

Most welcome, Gypsy.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was a poem that made me think of lost love. Searching for that one soul who you connected with. It was as if two worlds were moving close in orbit but still far enough away to miss. Gretchen

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023

A very insightful review, Gretchen. Some loves are not meant to happen. Tanka is about passion, lovers, or love lost. It's my favorite kind of poem. I've read Tanka written by Japanese women poets from 100 years ago that write about the same I write about. It's amazing to me. I guess women across time and cultures share a lot.

Thank you very much. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem.

Gypsy hugs

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

I love both the song and your poem. Your words and presentation, as always, are exceptional.

It gives me great joy to read and enjoy your poetry. It takes me to an ephemeral place. Thank you. Jacqueline

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023

Thank you very much for the wonderful review and kind words. Have a fabulous day.

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Comment from royowen

Excellent

Wouldn't it be wonderful soaring across the universe searching out a lover, some of my imaginative friends have thought that heavenly duties would do that, beautifully written Gypsy, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 15-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Oct-2023

Thank you very much for the wonderful review and kind words. Have a fabulous day.

Gypsy hugs

reply by royowen on 15-Oct-2023

Bless you.