Ghost
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "The forest Cradle"Biography/Supernatural
16 total reviews
Comment from Sarita Méndez
This is an interesting chapter that gives the willing to know the rest of the story.
It's well written and the suspense is well conducted.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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This is an interesting chapter that gives the willing to know the rest of the story.
It's well written and the suspense is well conducted.
Thanks for sharing.
Regards.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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Thank you Sarita! I appreciate your kind comments. Im truly honored, and if you wish, feel free to take a look in my portfolio at the book this chapter is written in. Thank you again so much for stopping in and reading! Offering your fine review is greatly appreciated! I hope you have the best of days.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I think it is interesting that the font size changes back and forth throughout the story. Why did you do this? Was it to emphasize the disturbing parts or to make this more readable, you tell me I don't know.
Anyway, the way you look at yourself versus the way others look at you is always a conundrum.
Jesse
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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I think it is interesting that the font size changes back and forth throughout the story. Why did you do this? Was it to emphasize the disturbing parts or to make this more readable, you tell me I don't know.
Anyway, the way you look at yourself versus the way others look at you is always a conundrum.
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2023
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I made the front changes on the beginning and on the end. A present tense comment at the beginning and a present tense comment on the end. The body of the chapter is italicized and bold to show tdifference and is written in past tense. I hope this helps! If you wish in my portfolio is a book called "Ghost" feel free to read if you wish it will give answers and I hope you will find equally interesting! Thank you do much for your review and your fine comments! I hope your day is amazing!
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Thanks for the clarification.
Enjoy the day.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
I can't imagine having to make the sort of decisions you had to make, when you should have been enjoying your teenage years with your friends. Well done Lea.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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I can't imagine having to make the sort of decisions you had to make, when you should have been enjoying your teenage years with your friends. Well done Lea.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 16-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 16-Oct-2023
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Thank you again! For all intents and purposes i had no childhood. As far back as I can remember. It has been work and abuse. I wish it was different. I was able to enjoy some of my adult years which will come. Thank you so much again amazing work following me with all this writing. I appreciate so much have a great day!
Comment from LJbutterfly
I almost missed this chapter where your story takes a slight turn. You become "the girl in the woods," which has its own set of challenges. You have jumped from the frying pan into the fire. You are going to confide in your friends. Is that going to help? I'll find out as I keep reading.
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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I almost missed this chapter where your story takes a slight turn. You become "the girl in the woods," which has its own set of challenges. You have jumped from the frying pan into the fire. You are going to confide in your friends. Is that going to help? I'll find out as I keep reading.
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, I'm so glad you read this one. I'm happy to see your review as always insightful and full of practical comments. I like that I like practical people because they know what it is and they don't mess around. Thank you for your great review. We're welcome to poke around the book goes if you want I appreciate you. Thank you for coming along with me on this journey! Have the best evening!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Riveting. As I have said, I like the narrative before and after because it makes your reader part of your story. It's like the early days in school when the teacher is reading you a chapter book and after that day's chapter, you discuss it. It helps make the story a little less harrowing, yet, oddly more personal at the same time.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Riveting. As I have said, I like the narrative before and after because it makes your reader part of your story. It's like the early days in school when the teacher is reading you a chapter book and after that day's chapter, you discuss it. It helps make the story a little less harrowing, yet, oddly more personal at the same time.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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That's a cool way of looking at it. Yeah, I like that very much. I'm glad you're along for the ride. I feel like I'm not alone anymore. And that is A foreign feeling but a good one well i'm just gonna go with it. At saying something for a person who has a hard time trusting. I don't know what magic you got there. But you sure got something, thank you so much. Rachelle, hope you having a good day!
Comment from Ric Myworld
"Things got worse before they got better." I'm sure your words are true, and I'd bet you had no idea just how bad they could get. I remember the shock of my own disturbing experiences. Now imagining how much worse it could have been for a girl. I've wished I had a six for every chapter, but sadly, they only give us a few, and for those of us who read a lot, they don't go far. I'm usually out by Monday or Tuesday. But that doesn't mean I like your story any less. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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"Things got worse before they got better." I'm sure your words are true, and I'd bet you had no idea just how bad they could get. I remember the shock of my own disturbing experiences. Now imagining how much worse it could have been for a girl. I've wished I had a six for every chapter, but sadly, they only give us a few, and for those of us who read a lot, they don't go far. I'm usually out by Monday or Tuesday. But that doesn't mean I like your story any less. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thank you I appreciate that. the sentiment alone is quite enough for me. You have great insight and hindsight. As well as compassion and empathy, which is different from sympathy. Sympathy gets nothing done, empathy gets everything done!
Thank you so much!
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It's too late for sympathy once the damage is done. But it's always nice to have someone who truly cares, and not just with words. :-)
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So very well sad thank you!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is quite a story Lea and these experiences have shaped you and made your the person you are today, it is scary being homeless and living in a tent and at this age it is also very dangerous too, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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This is quite a story Lea and these experiences have shaped you and made your the person you are today, it is scary being homeless and living in a tent and at this age it is also very dangerous too, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Yes, you're right. It is well I had my scary moments while I was there. But nothing so scary as him. So I was able to get through.
Thank you Dolly thank you for reading. I know it's been hard to read. But appreciate you hanging in there and offering your insight. Your compassion and your wisdom. Hope your day is grand!
Comment from Jim Wile
Excellent intro to your tale of life in the woods, Lea. You may have forgotten to bring a few things, but you thought of an awful lot and should be commended on the presence of mind you had under such circumstances. (I hope you subsisted on a few healthy foods other than Ding Dongs, though!)
It will be interesting to read how much you revealed to your friends and how much help they were able to give you. Looking forward to it. - Jim
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Excellent intro to your tale of life in the woods, Lea. You may have forgotten to bring a few things, but you thought of an awful lot and should be commended on the presence of mind you had under such circumstances. (I hope you subsisted on a few healthy foods other than Ding Dongs, though!)
It will be interesting to read how much you revealed to your friends and how much help they were able to give you. Looking forward to it. - Jim
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Jim, I'm glad you're along for the ride. I appreciate your reviews and everything you have to say. Compassionate and caring person you are.
Yes, I'm going to write up that next. And put out that chapter today and the plan going forward. Thank you for sticking with me and reading my work. I'm very grateful, have an awesome day!
Comment from BethShelby
I assume this means you are no longer in school. I guess all that you have endured up to this point has allowed you to be less fearful of the woods at night than you were at home under the roof with you step-dad. You seem very brave to risk living alone in the woods. The Army cadet training must have given you the courage to risk it.
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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I assume this means you are no longer in school. I guess all that you have endured up to this point has allowed you to be less fearful of the woods at night than you were at home under the roof with you step-dad. You seem very brave to risk living alone in the woods. The Army cadet training must have given you the courage to risk it.
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Hiya! Next 6 months I was out of school and then I return which I will tell you about gladly. Thank you again for reading.
And continuing along this journey with me since I started writing. I got the feeling more and more that I wasn't really alone. And it's cause of folks like yourself. That I really appreciate it, so thank you again. Have a great day!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
A great chapter, well expressed and revealing the practical side of your character that was coming to the fore and was going to be instrumental in this struggle of survival. I don't know if it's an American spelling but my understanding is that 'bows' should be 'boughs.' But, otherwise clearly written with momentum and interest. Thanks for sharing, Lea. Debbie
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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A great chapter, well expressed and revealing the practical side of your character that was coming to the fore and was going to be instrumental in this struggle of survival. I don't know if it's an American spelling but my understanding is that 'bows' should be 'boughs.' But, otherwise clearly written with momentum and interest. Thanks for sharing, Lea. Debbie
Comment Written 12-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much Debbie! Your reviews are always so thoughtful and incitable. And you point out things that mean something. And in turn, mean something to me. So soon as I'm able to actually vote for you! I'm on whom I'm always appreciative of your time and for your clock and your compassion is great. I can't stop saying that to people who really are that. Thank you again and hope you have an awesome day!