Free Rein
If Iwas a horse given ...8 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
As a lifetime owner, trainer, and breeder of thoroughbred horses you certainly caught my attention with your POV and your fine descriptions. Best of luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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As a lifetime owner, trainer, and breeder of thoroughbred horses you certainly caught my attention with your POV and your fine descriptions. Best of luck in the contest and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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What breed of thoroughbred. Arabian?
Quarter horse? Are you familiar with the TIEC?
It is only eight miles from us?
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Thoroughbreds, race horses.
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I have heard of Tryon International Equestrian Center. My daughter used to do eventing and jumping. But we?ve never been there. But it sounds like a wonderful community.
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High propfile people world wide tried to meet there four years ago. The Saudi princes flew in 37 arabians on whatever a 747 would be today. Shame, it rained 10 straight days. Nearly a total washout. There are 1100 stalls on site.
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There will be big events there in the future. I used to be partners with Prince Ahmed Salmon at one time on some thoroughbred race horses.
Comment from prettybluebirds
This is a clever story for the writing prompt. The only thing I might change is the end. You were hoping the paddock door remained open, so (it) might sound better than I did. It is okay the way it is, so it is your choice. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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This is a clever story for the writing prompt. The only thing I might change is the end. You were hoping the paddock door remained open, so (it) might sound better than I did. It is okay the way it is, so it is your choice. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Thanks for your read and comment
Comment from Wendy G
A fun story with a very descriptive introduction about the horse's sense of freedom and exhilaration. I just wondered whether the horse had been a human, in keeping with the contest theme of waking up to be some-one different. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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After that, I galloped to where I began, hoping the paddock door remained open and (arrived) prior to the pair's arrival.
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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A fun story with a very descriptive introduction about the horse's sense of freedom and exhilaration. I just wondered whether the horse had been a human, in keeping with the contest theme of waking up to be some-one different. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Edit:
After that, I galloped to where I began, hoping the paddock door remained open and (arrived) prior to the pair's arrival.
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Your suggestion is valued and so I eliminated (arrived)
Thank you.
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Then again, I may have misinterpret what you said. Was it to add (arrived)? I went with the thought arrived was thre and I could remove but it wasn't. To ad felt awkward, so I didn;t, though I did think of changing and to but or placing a comma before the and.
Comment from HarryT
understandable grin. Maybe an understanding whinny.
After that, I galloped to where I began, hoping the paddock door remained open and prior to the pair's arrival. (a bit confusing for me at first suggest prior to mother daughter arrival.)
Overall, I loved it. Especially the lines, "Racing forward, even the wind could not keep pace. I rose a crest to rest. There, I saw a waterfall descending into a pool of veiled sunlight.
Wonder what the horse would feel if she climbed naked upon his back?
Just a thought. My mind does work in mysterious ways sometimes.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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understandable grin. Maybe an understanding whinny.
After that, I galloped to where I began, hoping the paddock door remained open and prior to the pair's arrival. (a bit confusing for me at first suggest prior to mother daughter arrival.)
Overall, I loved it. Especially the lines, "Racing forward, even the wind could not keep pace. I rose a crest to rest. There, I saw a waterfall descending into a pool of veiled sunlight.
Wonder what the horse would feel if she climbed naked upon his back?
Just a thought. My mind does work in mysterious ways sometimes.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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I know I have
Seen a
Dog
Grin so why not a
Horse
Whinny would have worked
As
Well
And
By the way
The daughter did ride date I say ? bareback?
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a wonderful post about the freedom a horse experiences when it has the chance to roam free and enjoy nature. This is well written, inventive, and a joy to read, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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This is a wonderful post about the freedom a horse experiences when it has the chance to roam free and enjoy nature. This is well written, inventive, and a joy to read, love Dolly x
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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One never knows from what cubby hole my thoughts will escape from. I guess u no yur #1 in poetry.
Comment from Thesis
A very good story. I see two applications of being someone else. Both the horse and the owners daughter were experiencing being other than their normal selves. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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A very good story. I see two applications of being someone else. Both the horse and the owners daughter were experiencing being other than their normal selves. Nicely done.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Thank you
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your detailed descriptions of a horse allowed the reader to easily envision a horse free to be a horse roaming the land as his ancestors had. I especially enjoyed your knowledgeable description of the horse's hoofs, muzzle, breath, shoulders, neck, and thighs. In the end, the horse willingly returns to safety. Beautiful. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Your detailed descriptions of a horse allowed the reader to easily envision a horse free to be a horse roaming the land as his ancestors had. I especially enjoyed your knowledgeable description of the horse's hoofs, muzzle, breath, shoulders, neck, and thighs. In the end, the horse willingly returns to safety. Beautiful. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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And it enjoyed its day off
Comment from royowen
I'm pretty sure you stayed in the present tense, I struggled with that at first, staying in the moment becomes Normal after a while, I loved the perspective of horse and rider being as one entity, that's how I understand lovers of horses, beautifully wrutten, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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I'm pretty sure you stayed in the present tense, I struggled with that at first, staying in the moment becomes Normal after a while, I loved the perspective of horse and rider being as one entity, that's how I understand lovers of horses, beautifully wrutten, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Thanks friend
