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A third party for President 2024

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Comment from kahpot
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This is becoming very intriguing, as nobody seems to have a clue who is targeted or is committing the murders? Another excellent write and read, very well written****kahpot

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
    Thank you, kahpot
Comment from lyenochka
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This keeps getting wilder and more people are being murdered but Bull and Weirdo will never be able to prove who did the killing. I wonder how this case will be solved.

 Comment Written 10-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
    Me too.
Comment from BethShelby
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The Plot thickens. The surpreme court canadate is dead
The is part is being killed off one by one. If this keeps up there will be no third party and we'll have to vote for and a Democrat or Republican.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
    I want to keep readers off balance, but I am really only succeeding at chasing them off it seems.
Comment from nomi338
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GED must be pretty hungry to have devoured two sets of brains in such a short period of time. It looks like we may be headed towards a pivotal point in the story as things are definitely heating up. I can smell brains in the air, and your boy GED does not seem to care.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
    I have added two more universes to this story line. The Fox and Felix Fines and Inspector Bull Schlitz. I hope to drag this part out until Halloween and then do something that allows the campaign to continue after the murders.
reply by nomi338 on 09-Oct-2023
    As my friend Buhwheat would say "Otay!"
Comment from royowen
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It w seems the bodies are going to pile up, considering that brains as delicious favourite for Zombies, is the unusual appetiser for those that are brainless themselves, no one has the detectives on the job, beautifully written Bill, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
    Thanks, Roy
reply by royowen on 09-Oct-2023
    Most welcome
Comment from Barry Penfold
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I just crack up over the names you use in this entertaining script. A lot goes on in a short while. More please . Take care and have a good day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Barry
Comment from Lea Tonin1
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Wow! I'd love to see this one on stage. What a beautiful layout you've given for this screenplay lovely text colors at the right spots, it looks amazing!
Having said that, the subject matter of yours screen play the characters, the conversations, the dialogue, the story itself. Really good. I'm gonna keep an Eye on this one. Because I think that he got something here. I wish you good luck in the rest of the day!

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
    Thank you, Lea