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Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Lea,
This is a well written and very graphic story about your abuse as a child. I am sorry that you and you sisters had to go through this. Your stepfather was and evil man and your mother seemed to be weak. I wonder if he was abusing her too.
I wish this never happened to anyone.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Enjoy your weekend
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Hi Lea,
This is a well written and very graphic story about your abuse as a child. I am sorry that you and you sisters had to go through this. Your stepfather was and evil man and your mother seemed to be weak. I wonder if he was abusing her too.
I wish this never happened to anyone.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Congrats on placing in the contest.
Enjoy your weekend
Comment Written 23-Mar-2024
Comment from barbara.wilkey
No child should ever have to live like that, and I blame your mom for not protecting you and your sisters. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I can't say I enjoyed reading this entry because of the subject. I do want to wish you luck with the contest.
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No child should ever have to live like that, and I blame your mom for not protecting you and your sisters. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I can't say I enjoyed reading this entry because of the subject. I do want to wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2024
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This chapter reminds me of something an acquaintance told me about over twenty years ago. He had been living in some part of Asia and told me how many girls were available for being 'used' at any given time. This chapter with the details on beatings reminds me that there are other parts of the world where this is also going on.
One suggestion:
We were rail thin, and had shadows around our eyes.
You can take the comma out after thin.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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This chapter reminds me of something an acquaintance told me about over twenty years ago. He had been living in some part of Asia and told me how many girls were available for being 'used' at any given time. This chapter with the details on beatings reminds me that there are other parts of the world where this is also going on.
One suggestion:
We were rail thin, and had shadows around our eyes.
You can take the comma out after thin.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Thank you, I'm gonna have to remove that, as your suggestions. That are very helpful to me. Thank you very much for reading again.
Very happy to have you along thank you!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Without an alternative, we often learn to live with the beatings and pain. I learned to glare through the splattered blood without shedding a tear. Then, searching for a new ways to torture me, at four-years-old, I was locked in a pitch black closet and told the rats were going to get me. I'm glad you made it out. But like with me, I'm sure it wasn't without scars deeper than the visible ones. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Without an alternative, we often learn to live with the beatings and pain. I learned to glare through the splattered blood without shedding a tear. Then, searching for a new ways to torture me, at four-years-old, I was locked in a pitch black closet and told the rats were going to get me. I'm glad you made it out. But like with me, I'm sure it wasn't without scars deeper than the visible ones. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2023
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Thank you again my friend I appreciate this very much!
Comment from Barry Penfold
I admire your courage. I am not sure I could have handled the situation. My life has been blessed. Arguments yes, but no physical rebuke. Well written and all the best with your autobiography. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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I admire your courage. I am not sure I could have handled the situation. My life has been blessed. Arguments yes, but no physical rebuke. Well written and all the best with your autobiography. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you very much appreciate you reading. Thank you for your kind review as well. And for your Insightful comments I'm honored to receive your rating as well I hope you have the best day!
Comment from Yusita
Ah, I have so many mixed emotions right now. On one hand, it was a very good story in the sense that you are a good story-teller who knows how to keep readers interested and hooked. I enjoy your writing style. On the other hand, this was hard to read because I just can't stand abuse and injustice, even more so with children. But at the same time, these feelings are proof that you know how to write powerfully. I'm so sorry you and your sisters had to go through this hell and my heart breaks for all of you. I pray that life has (or will) make up for these dark chapters of your life and that the healing is complete and sweet. Sending many blessings your way.
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Ah, I have so many mixed emotions right now. On one hand, it was a very good story in the sense that you are a good story-teller who knows how to keep readers interested and hooked. I enjoy your writing style. On the other hand, this was hard to read because I just can't stand abuse and injustice, even more so with children. But at the same time, these feelings are proof that you know how to write powerfully. I'm so sorry you and your sisters had to go through this hell and my heart breaks for all of you. I pray that life has (or will) make up for these dark chapters of your life and that the healing is complete and sweet. Sending many blessings your way.
Comment Written 06-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 08-Dec-2023
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Thank you so much for your kind words and your compassion. I very much appreciate it. Thank you for reading too I know some of it is difficult to absorb so thank you for that. I also thank you for your kind review and great rating. I hope your day is amazing!
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Thank you and I hope your day is amazing also!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
As I 'm reading I can't help but wonder what he got out of such brutal treatment of small children both the physical and the mental aspect. As I've said before, how strong you were Lea to get through.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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As I 'm reading I can't help but wonder what he got out of such brutal treatment of small children both the physical and the mental aspect. As I've said before, how strong you were Lea to get through.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Thank you Valda for your kinds words and compassion.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Lea,
How old were you when this particular incident was going on? Weren't there any school councilors who could intervene for you? Where were the teachers who should have noticed at least your demeanor of one who is being abused, even if the physical evidence wasn't where it could be seen. No one should ever, ever be subjected to such cruelty. The man belongs in a jail, in solitary confinement. Thanks for sharing this heart wrenching story.
Blessings,
Tom
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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Hello Lea,
How old were you when this particular incident was going on? Weren't there any school councilors who could intervene for you? Where were the teachers who should have noticed at least your demeanor of one who is being abused, even if the physical evidence wasn't where it could be seen. No one should ever, ever be subjected to such cruelty. The man belongs in a jail, in solitary confinement. Thanks for sharing this heart wrenching story.
Blessings,
Tom
Comment Written 10-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023
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All my life from as far back as I can remember until I emancipated myself. Some of the reasons why will come but I had to do a lot of work on my own to figure it out and find out who what where and when. Thank you again for reading. I know it's a hard read but a necessary one for some.
Thanks again Tom!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I am so proud of you for telling this excruciating tale. It can't be easy to live through it again at all, let alone in this public a venue. But doing so makes people understand what far too many children have to live through and why we, the adults of this world, have to be aware and willing to do the right thing should we ever encounter it. You are doing an enormous public service here by making people see that the ugliness DOES exist, and ignoring it or dismissing it or mitigating it doesn't make it go away. That, in fact, enables it to grow.
I hope this writing is helping YOU to process through the pain, as well, Lea. Your style is riveting in its ferocity. I can see this book becoming something big outside of FS in the biggest of ways.
xoxoxoxo
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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I am so proud of you for telling this excruciating tale. It can't be easy to live through it again at all, let alone in this public a venue. But doing so makes people understand what far too many children have to live through and why we, the adults of this world, have to be aware and willing to do the right thing should we ever encounter it. You are doing an enormous public service here by making people see that the ugliness DOES exist, and ignoring it or dismissing it or mitigating it doesn't make it go away. That, in fact, enables it to grow.
I hope this writing is helping YOU to process through the pain, as well, Lea. Your style is riveting in its ferocity. I can see this book becoming something big outside of FS in the biggest of ways.
xoxoxoxo
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Again, thank you so very much, I'm proud and happy to receive such an awesome review!.
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totally my pleasure. xo
Comment from Jim Wile
Lea, you have written this so well that the reader can almost feel every horrible thing that happened to you and your sisters. You were living with psychotic people, especially your stepfather, who was also a pervert, yet somehow you survived. You must be incredibly strong, although you may not have felt that way at the time. This is such a moving tale, told so well.
One very small point: You say, "I thought maybe death was surely better." So, which is it--maybe or surely? It seems like you're not sure, so perhaps it would be better to say, "I thought maybe death would be better after all."
Just a general question: Is there a particular reason why you've chosen to write these chapters in italics? I like to use italics for emphasis, so I actually would have written my suggested sentence as "I thought maybe death would be better." (and leave out the "after all.") - Jim
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Lea, you have written this so well that the reader can almost feel every horrible thing that happened to you and your sisters. You were living with psychotic people, especially your stepfather, who was also a pervert, yet somehow you survived. You must be incredibly strong, although you may not have felt that way at the time. This is such a moving tale, told so well.
One very small point: You say, "I thought maybe death was surely better." So, which is it--maybe or surely? It seems like you're not sure, so perhaps it would be better to say, "I thought maybe death would be better after all."
Just a general question: Is there a particular reason why you've chosen to write these chapters in italics? I like to use italics for emphasis, so I actually would have written my suggested sentence as "I thought maybe death would be better." (and leave out the "after all.") - Jim
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Hi jim great suggestion I have made the change thank you so much!
Again I You're support and this fine review it gave me a a good smile Thank you so much!!