2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from aryr
This was a great senryu haiku, Gypsy. The picture was fantastic after the sunset. I really appreciated your words about widow watching the sunset lift her spirits. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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This was a great senryu haiku, Gypsy. The picture was fantastic after the sunset. I really appreciated your words about widow watching the sunset lift her spirits. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for reading my poem. May you have a wonderful day. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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You are very welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
In the story about Seth and Emma, somebody in Emma's life dies and she's sure that God used that beautiful sunset to remind her He's there for her. She's angry with God. Your wonderful poem is perfect.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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In the story about Seth and Emma, somebody in Emma's life dies and she's sure that God used that beautiful sunset to remind her He's there for her. She's angry with God. Your wonderful poem is perfect.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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oh, no... who dies? Emma's dad? Don't tell me :(
Thank you very much for your lovely review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
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It's my secret until it happens. I think it will be shock.
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Oh darn... I can't wait to find out
Comment from Mark D. R.
Gypsy,
Nice presentation for the widow's thoughts of her loved one.
I might suggest an edit in your last line to keep it in the present moment: lifting her spirit(s) - still keeps to 17 syllables.
Mark
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Gypsy,
Nice presentation for the widow's thoughts of her loved one.
I might suggest an edit in your last line to keep it in the present moment: lifting her spirit(s) - still keeps to 17 syllables.
Mark
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Good suggestion, thanks. Thank you very much for your lovely review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Mrs. KT
Very moving, Gypsy,
I appreciate the double meaning of the last line of your well-crafted senryu.
Your ability to say so much in so few words is truly a gift.
Thank you for sharing you gift with me.
Best Wishes!
diane
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Very moving, Gypsy,
I appreciate the double meaning of the last line of your well-crafted senryu.
Your ability to say so much in so few words is truly a gift.
Thank you for sharing you gift with me.
Best Wishes!
diane
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for your lovely review and kind words.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from lyenochka
That's a sweet farewell in "lifting the spirit. I imagine her looking at the sunset, which does symbolize the end, and releasing her hold on her beloved.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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That's a sweet farewell in "lifting the spirit. I imagine her looking at the sunset, which does symbolize the end, and releasing her hold on her beloved.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much big sister. (*÷*)
Love
Marival
Comment from GWHARGIS
I saw or interpreted this two different ways. First she watched the sunset and thought of her loved ones spirit soaring to heaven. The other was she is celebrating her freedom. This was a pleasure to read. Gretchen
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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I saw or interpreted this two different ways. First she watched the sunset and thought of her loved ones spirit soaring to heaven. The other was she is celebrating her freedom. This was a pleasure to read. Gretchen
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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I left it open to personal interpretation on purpose.
Thank you very much for your excellent review .
Gypsy hugs
Comment from shelley kaye
not sure about the 3 THEs...
funeral has passed -
widow watches the sunset
as spirit lifts
or something like that lol
just a couple thoughts...
good senryu - could also be a haiku, too...
nice imagery as the funeral passes so does the sun... and spirit
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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not sure about the 3 THEs...
funeral has passed -
widow watches the sunset
as spirit lifts
or something like that lol
just a couple thoughts...
good senryu - could also be a haiku, too...
nice imagery as the funeral passes so does the sun... and spirit
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Good suggestion. Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.(*÷*) have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
There is something about the sunset, laying to rest the day, (and one's woes) and then the similarity of the sunrise, but the sign of new beginnings, oh yes, a sign of grace, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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There is something about the sunset, laying to rest the day, (and one's woes) and then the similarity of the sunrise, but the sign of new beginnings, oh yes, a sign of grace, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.(*÷*) have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from Lea Tonin1
That's a really nice poem. I love the picture and too. The colors are great, I always enjoy sunset colors.
I like that there's a little bright light at the end where the sunset can lift the spirits of a lady who iso sad so good job. I really like this one!
I don't see any issues with grammar spelling sentence structure or esthetics. I think it's well done as always. When you are writing, have yourself a great evening!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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That's a really nice poem. I love the picture and too. The colors are great, I always enjoy sunset colors.
I like that there's a little bright light at the end where the sunset can lift the spirits of a lady who iso sad so good job. I really like this one!
I don't see any issues with grammar spelling sentence structure or esthetics. I think it's well done as always. When you are writing, have yourself a great evening!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.(*÷*) have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs