Ghost
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "A Deeper Look"Biography/Supernatural
15 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Almost as if we've traveled back in time with this chapter from book one, but it lets us readers learn more about you and the happenings from early on. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Almost as if we've traveled back in time with this chapter from book one, but it lets us readers learn more about you and the happenings from early on. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Hi Ric! Thank you so much for reading yes I do like to put up a particulars there sometime so his people a better understanding for sure I thank you for noticing that I'm going to thank you for your review hope you had the best Christmas hope your new year is rocking and that your day is amazing too thanks again!
Comment from Sanku
I can see that your book is going to be heart rending .You have gone through so much in your young days..It is sadwhen children prefer foster homes to their own mothers...all the best..
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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I can see that your book is going to be heart rending .You have gone through so much in your young days..It is sadwhen children prefer foster homes to their own mothers...all the best..
Comment Written 22-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2023
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Thank you for reading I appreciate your kind review on your offers of insight which are right on the money sorry for my late reply I've had a bad accident and suffered third degree burns I do hope your Christmas was great and your new year would be better and you have the most wonderful day too thanks again!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I am re-reading your chapters early in your book to see patterns and details more clearly. I think the 'white horse' reference was used about two chapters ago also. However, it would not surprise me if your mother said that more than once. I would change "Tik Tok, tik tok" to "Tick, tock, tick, tock" so as to avoid any confusion with Tik Tok the social media company. I like your similes at the end like the slow drip of molasses or slower than a caterpillar. I just bought a jar of molasses this week to try making gingerbread cookies for the first time, but I know it's slower than honey.
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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I am re-reading your chapters early in your book to see patterns and details more clearly. I think the 'white horse' reference was used about two chapters ago also. However, it would not surprise me if your mother said that more than once. I would change "Tik Tok, tik tok" to "Tick, tock, tick, tock" so as to avoid any confusion with Tik Tok the social media company. I like your similes at the end like the slow drip of molasses or slower than a caterpillar. I just bought a jar of molasses this week to try making gingerbread cookies for the first time, but I know it's slower than honey.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2023
reply by the author on 20-Dec-2023
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Good luck with the gingerbread cookies! Once again Thank you I appreciate the time you're putting in treating and offering your comments. And you're fine review! Thank you again!
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Sadly, it seems that the closet was your safe place. After three weeks of heaven you were thrust back into the hell you knew. I'm not sure how you hung onto hope that you'd get out of that situation, Lea.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Sadly, it seems that the closet was your safe place. After three weeks of heaven you were thrust back into the hell you knew. I'm not sure how you hung onto hope that you'd get out of that situation, Lea.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 14-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2023
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Mostly it was about fear and what he would do or maybe what I would do. So much more to tell so many reasons, devious ones for why they did what they did. Three girls were sacrificed for that. It will take time but Ii will be clear soon, thank you again Valda so happy to have you along. It can be a hard read I know
Comment from Annmuma
What a powerful post and book chapter. It tore at my heart as I read and felt the fear and anxiety of a little girl with no control over her situation. This should be a contender in the contest. Good luck. ann
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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What a powerful post and book chapter. It tore at my heart as I read and felt the fear and anxiety of a little girl with no control over her situation. This should be a contender in the contest. Good luck. ann
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Thank you again enjoy your day!
Comment from Aussie
And now? The story of your young life touched me. I was abused by my mother slapping me across the face. Why? Because I was too strong for her. When she couldn't slap me anymore, she waited until Dad came home and he picked up the leather strap. These events can make or break us. I think we are both very strong people. Thanks for sharing your chapter. Love, K. xx
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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And now? The story of your young life touched me. I was abused by my mother slapping me across the face. Why? Because I was too strong for her. When she couldn't slap me anymore, she waited until Dad came home and he picked up the leather strap. These events can make or break us. I think we are both very strong people. Thanks for sharing your chapter. Love, K. xx
Comment Written 08-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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I thank you so much for your fine review. And your kind of ready your compassion? And your support is evident and I am truly grateful. I was not delete my whole life. I was not relieved even today. Family members doubt it. But that is because it's easier to doubt than deal with the facts as they are even though I have boxes and boxes of reports given about them. There are some successes and some setbacks, but that is the flow of life, is it not question? Thank you for your fine review once again and for reading and hanging in there. I know it's hard to read, also know it's necessary. I hope you have a great day!
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I never give up. I was a nurse for ten years and have lots of patience. Love, and big hugs. Kay xx
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Comment from Mrs. KT
As tortuous it is for me to read your well-crafted work, I am grateful that you have found your voice and courage to share. I've read a number of your offerings, and each time, your voice becomes stronger...
I admire your perseverance and courage.
Keep writing...
Much appreciated,
diane
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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As tortuous it is for me to read your well-crafted work, I am grateful that you have found your voice and courage to share. I've read a number of your offerings, and each time, your voice becomes stronger...
I admire your perseverance and courage.
Keep writing...
Much appreciated,
diane
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Diane, thank you again for your awesome review.
Knowing yourself and others like you are out there that have offered support means more than the world... its gold.
Thank you again. I hope that whatever I'm writing here helps someone if it does, it makes it all so much easier to bear. Thanks so much I hope the sun is shining where you're at!
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Thank you, Lea!
As for the weather, well, it is freezing here in northern Michigan!
Sitting and writing in front of a cheerful fire!
Gotta love northern Michigan; last week we were sweltering in the high 80s!
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Today, here in Surrey British Columbia. The weather is around 26 degrees Celsius, which roughly aver 82. Fahrenheit. A fire sounds nice even though we're quite warm today
Comment from Lisasview
Lea, I just finished carefully reading every word of yur story and although good in many ways you never bring up what your fear was? At one time when you and your two sisters went to the home and you were so happy to be away from all the pain...You do say fist... I believe you need to talk about the abuse.
You know what it is but your reader does not know.
And, I did like reading about your personal life, getting arrived, etc. but it just doesn't really go with the beginning of your story...
And, last but not least I feel that your final lines
Tik Tok, tik tok, the days, the weeks, the years. We experienced time like the slow drip of molasses. Slower than a caterpillar on the sidewalk...
This line would be a fabulous beginning to your story... It would make the reader to read more....
Lisa
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Lea, I just finished carefully reading every word of yur story and although good in many ways you never bring up what your fear was? At one time when you and your two sisters went to the home and you were so happy to be away from all the pain...You do say fist... I believe you need to talk about the abuse.
You know what it is but your reader does not know.
And, I did like reading about your personal life, getting arrived, etc. but it just doesn't really go with the beginning of your story...
And, last but not least I feel that your final lines
Tik Tok, tik tok, the days, the weeks, the years. We experienced time like the slow drip of molasses. Slower than a caterpillar on the sidewalk...
This line would be a fabulous beginning to your story... It would make the reader to read more....
Lisa
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Hi Lisa!
I appreciate your throat reading of this and all your kind words and offerings of advice without that, we cannot improve so I thank you very much! Addressing some of the questions you ask this is a Chapter in a book i'm writing called the "Ghost". It's an autobio about my life. Obviously, so all the things you mentioned above are in the preceding chapter. The first three are in the actual book, My portfolio holds the separate chapters which includes this one. The first separate chapter is called Enough. The second separate chapter is called Navigation, the next is Small Mercys followed by this one. The things you wondered about in the questions who asked are in those chapfirst. Feel free to look if you have time. I want to thank you again for your insight and for your very discerning eye. I hope your day is amazing!
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You are so welcome...
I read Enough the other day.
Lisa
Comment from JSD
Hey Lea. A 'creek' is a stream. You want 'creak'!
What an amazing picture. Such a beautiful girl - how could anyone hurt you?
More painful and utterly gripping writing. Well done and thank you for sharing this.
John x
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Hey Lea. A 'creek' is a stream. You want 'creak'!
What an amazing picture. Such a beautiful girl - how could anyone hurt you?
More painful and utterly gripping writing. Well done and thank you for sharing this.
John x
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Hi John, I thank you for reading. I sure do appreciate people following along with this story and offering support like you and others do. There are good people in the world. And I knew what would happen? LOLI shall continue to write. There'll be some victories and there'll be some down falls, but that is life. Thank you again I hope you have the best day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
How dreadful for a child to fear going to bed and to listen for sounds before sleeping in order to be forewarned of abuse. I dreaded every morning as I woke in my home growing up. We were woken by my Father's alarm and he would shout from his bedroom to tell us to get up every morning. I would nudge my sisters to get out of bed and get ready for school.
The three of us slept in the same room and one of my sisters struggled to get out of bed every morning. Despite the warnings, she lay there sleeping. My Father would storm into the room and hit her through the covers whilst she was sleeping. She cried every morning but she still defied my Father and would not get out of bed when called. I feared my Father and this violence every morning started my day and I vowed I would never have a man like him in my life when I grew up. My husband was gentle and kind and my children had a wonderful childhood, unlike my own. I have never written about my experiences, and yet they are so vivid. I feel for you Lea, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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How dreadful for a child to fear going to bed and to listen for sounds before sleeping in order to be forewarned of abuse. I dreaded every morning as I woke in my home growing up. We were woken by my Father's alarm and he would shout from his bedroom to tell us to get up every morning. I would nudge my sisters to get out of bed and get ready for school.
The three of us slept in the same room and one of my sisters struggled to get out of bed every morning. Despite the warnings, she lay there sleeping. My Father would storm into the room and hit her through the covers whilst she was sleeping. She cried every morning but she still defied my Father and would not get out of bed when called. I feared my Father and this violence every morning started my day and I vowed I would never have a man like him in my life when I grew up. My husband was gentle and kind and my children had a wonderful childhood, unlike my own. I have never written about my experiences, and yet they are so vivid. I feel for you Lea, love Dolly x
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Ah, Dolly, a kindred spirit. You know more than most what it is to live in this way. I thank you for sharing that with me. I5 will also stay with me and feel privileged to do so.
I thank you for your thoughtful review. I really appreciate your kind words and your wisdom....