Just a Small Sip
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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
That would certainly have been a memorable church picnic. This has to be one of the top contenders for the drink poetry contest. It sounds so possible; I wonder how many times it happened in real life.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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That would certainly have been a memorable church picnic. This has to be one of the top contenders for the drink poetry contest. It sounds so possible; I wonder how many times it happened in real life.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Hi Carol!! Thanks so much for reading this silly spiked punch poem. Sometimes it is fun to do crazy and silly ones to steer away from those serious ones all the time.
Thanks for your awesome comments and having a little fun with me.
Comment from Boogienights
Very creative and quite possible. It's happened before I'm sure, probably will again. Nice rhyming throughout, this is a great contest entry. Best of luck to you.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Very creative and quite possible. It's happened before I'm sure, probably will again. Nice rhyming throughout, this is a great contest entry. Best of luck to you.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2023
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Thanks Sharon, for your awesome review and kind condiments.
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Thanks Sharon, for your awesome review and kind condiments.
Comment from gramalot8
Oh my... that's something to picture! Can just envision all the proper ladies indulging in their after church lemonade... that never had ever tasted this good before!ð??? Would be a hoot for everyone to try and discover who done it! Great fun to think about and thanks for sharing this with us.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Oh my... that's something to picture! Can just envision all the proper ladies indulging in their after church lemonade... that never had ever tasted this good before!ð??? Would be a hoot for everyone to try and discover who done it! Great fun to think about and thanks for sharing this with us.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Thanks so much for reading this silly spiked punch poem. Sometimes it is fun to do crazy and silly ones to steer away from those serious ones all the time.
Thanks for your awesome comments and having a little fun with me.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good image and nice presentation, Debi.
-You wrote a good poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-You also tell a good story.
-Very good progression as the story moves along.
-People are feeling good,having fun, but the
there was a "a goofy, silly vibe."
-Seems like there was something funny about those drinks.
-I wonder who did spike the lemonade at a church picnic, of all things!
-Thanks for sharing it.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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-Good image and nice presentation, Debi.
-You wrote a good poem with effective imagery and rhyme.
-You also tell a good story.
-Very good progression as the story moves along.
-People are feeling good,having fun, but the
there was a "a goofy, silly vibe."
-Seems like there was something funny about those drinks.
-I wonder who did spike the lemonade at a church picnic, of all things!
-Thanks for sharing it.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Pam, what a lovely review and comments. You are always so sweet and I thank you with all my heart. Those lovely six stars are so appreciated too, dear friend. Thanks again Pam.
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Debi. You have a gift with words and rhyme! I think you could write a page in the phone book and make it poetic!
Comment from TPAC
Super. I loved the conclusion to this read, finding that ending disclosed funny, well structured piece: yielding a smooth flow. This view started in my given viewpoint: prevailing this particular read.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Super. I loved the conclusion to this read, finding that ending disclosed funny, well structured piece: yielding a smooth flow. This view started in my given viewpoint: prevailing this particular read.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Awe, TPAC, you are awesome. Thank you so much for the kind comments and for the big smile you gave me.. thanks again, my friend,
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This funny poem definitely fits that writing prompt. Here is a revealing stanza:
I wanted to do crazy flips
And while I'm in the air
To see if I can take more sips
And not spill anywhere
That definitely indicates it's not your normal lemonade! Sounds like someone wanted to get even with someone at that picnic.
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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This funny poem definitely fits that writing prompt. Here is a revealing stanza:
I wanted to do crazy flips
And while I'm in the air
To see if I can take more sips
And not spill anywhere
That definitely indicates it's not your normal lemonade! Sounds like someone wanted to get even with someone at that picnic.
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 09-Oct-2023
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Hi Crystie! Thanks so much for reading this silly spiked punch poem. Sometimes it is fun to do crazy and silly ones to steer away from those serious ones all the time.
Thanks for your awesome comments and having a little fun with me.
Comment from l.raven
Hi Debi, this is just to funny my sweet friend...
and the last stanza had me laughing...
and at a church picnic yet...someone
spikes the lemonade...LOL...
I love your poem beautiful girl...and love your picture...
so very well written...love much...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Hi Debi, this is just to funny my sweet friend...
and the last stanza had me laughing...
and at a church picnic yet...someone
spikes the lemonade...LOL...
I love your poem beautiful girl...and love your picture...
so very well written...love much...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 07-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Linda, you are a gem. Thank you so much for this kind review and having some fun with my fiction church scenario for the drink contest.
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Hi Debi, how are you beautiful girl???...
I hope and prayer you are feeling better...🙏🙏
I went out a got some lemons for
lemonade...you talked me into it...LOL...
your always so welcome my sweet
friend...love you...xxoo 😘🤗💝🌼
Comment from Teri7
Debi, This is a very cute and very well written Drink poem you have penned for the contest. Sounds like that was very fun church picnic with some very tasty lemonade! lol Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Debi, This is a very cute and very well written Drink poem you have penned for the contest. Sounds like that was very fun church picnic with some very tasty lemonade! lol Thank you for sharing. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2023
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Oh Teri, you are a gem. Thank you so much for this kind review and having some fun with my fiction church scenario for the drink contest.
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
What a cute ending. It had me smiling. I thought at first you were talking about tequila. That stuff will trip you our
Great stanzas in 8/6 Debi. The 2nd last line has the accents on the syllables off. Check the words "adult" and "picnic"
Otherwise all is flawless and an enjoyable read.
Best wishes Debi!
Take care and enjoy your weekend!
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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What a cute ending. It had me smiling. I thought at first you were talking about tequila. That stuff will trip you our
Great stanzas in 8/6 Debi. The 2nd last line has the accents on the syllables off. Check the words "adult" and "picnic"
Otherwise all is flawless and an enjoyable read.
Best wishes Debi!
Take care and enjoy your weekend!
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Ooh, Katie, you are so sweet. And yes, I wondered about that line too. So if you have a suggestion, that would be great. But, lol, can you imagine if I would have left the word adult out, what I would have been in for?
The way it was, there were just a couple people that took it a little too serious and said someone could have gotten hurt. And for the life of me, aren't we all writers and suppose to use our imaginations? This was completely fiction and I just knew if I didn't add the adult, I would have been in more trouble than the one who spiked the lemonade. Haha! So do you have a suggestion for that line and keeping the word adult in. After all, without it there will be hell to pay. Lol..
Comment from BermyBye50
Debi,
Congratulations on the third place win in the The Drink Poetry contest. you crafted an excellent lighthearted poem with a humorous little twist at the end.
All the best,
Eugene
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Debi,
Congratulations on the third place win in the The Drink Poetry contest. you crafted an excellent lighthearted poem with a humorous little twist at the end.
All the best,
Eugene
Comment Written 06-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Eugene, I thank you so very much for your always kind comments.
I appreciate your congrats too. You are such a special mañ and I thank you again, dear friend.