That Fist Butiful Drink
Contest entry7 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This well expressed and beautifully metered and rhymed verse takes the reader on a little journey with that "fist butiful drink." I love the humour/cynicism (particularly in the 5th stanza) and it's fine, engaging story that was probably only ever going to conclude one way which made my evening! Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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This well expressed and beautifully metered and rhymed verse takes the reader on a little journey with that "fist butiful drink." I love the humour/cynicism (particularly in the 5th stanza) and it's fine, engaging story that was probably only ever going to conclude one way which made my evening! Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Debbie. You were the only one to mention the title. Lol. Yes, it usually concludes the same way. Haha. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. I'm glad you liked this silliness. I was just in one of those moods. Lol. Have yourself a great weekend.
Comment from Terry Broxson
LOL, and then the next morning you realized you actually spent the five dollars and entered the contest and spent ten bucks on vodka. And you needed two aspirins for that splitting headache. Very fun and well-written. Terry.
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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LOL, and then the next morning you realized you actually spent the five dollars and entered the contest and spent ten bucks on vodka. And you needed two aspirins for that splitting headache. Very fun and well-written. Terry.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 06-Oct-2023
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Yes, there's been a few times I woke up and asked myself, "What did I do on here? Yikes." Lol. Thank you for the great review and stop in, Terry. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silly piece. Have a great weekend, friend.
Comment from LisaMay
I see the demon drink made you forget that you did actually spend the 5 bucks entry fee.... you got 'wasted' yourself! But it didn't inhibit your poetic ability to write a terrific poem. Hopefully the Hallmark appreciators will see the skill on show here and vote it a deserved winner.
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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I see the demon drink made you forget that you did actually spend the 5 bucks entry fee.... you got 'wasted' yourself! But it didn't inhibit your poetic ability to write a terrific poem. Hopefully the Hallmark appreciators will see the skill on show here and vote it a deserved winner.
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Lisa. I was actually meaning other contests. I haven't read too many Hallmark cards about what a first drink might do to someone. Lol. I changed "I saw the prompt" to "I saw 'a' prompt." I doubt that really helped anything but what can you do? Ha. I'm always writing dumb crap when I'm hammered. You can spot it because that tends to be when I whine the most. Lol. Thank you again, Lisa. Have yourself a great upcoming weekend.
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Amen, sister! Or brother as the case may be. This was very well written. And the underlying theme of the poem was on the money. I have been unable to figure out how the voting works. A piece with errors by a well known wins 1st place, and a work of art, by an unknown gets zippy. I won 1st place once for something I wrote in five minutes, and another time I didn't make it into the top three over a fine piece of writing I edited for days! Since, I do not know who you are, I will say, "Fan" people and get "Fanned
so people see your name out there keep writing.
Write for yourself only. You do not have to join contests to write. You can post twice a day. Keep writing. Karen
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Amen, sister! Or brother as the case may be. This was very well written. And the underlying theme of the poem was on the money. I have been unable to figure out how the voting works. A piece with errors by a well known wins 1st place, and a work of art, by an unknown gets zippy. I won 1st place once for something I wrote in five minutes, and another time I didn't make it into the top three over a fine piece of writing I edited for days! Since, I do not know who you are, I will say, "Fan" people and get "Fanned
so people see your name out there keep writing.
Write for yourself only. You do not have to join contests to write. You can post twice a day. Keep writing. Karen
Comment Written 05-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much for the great review, Karen. There's really no figuring out these contests. Sometimes you win, sometimes you don't. I've been playing these games on here for many years and that's all I do, write for myself. Sometimes it flies. Lol. Yes, I don't get the logic of it, how something we jot down in 5 minutes gets more votes than something we spent days on. There are definitely some folks that have loyal fans that vote for no one else but them but there's nothing we can do about it EXCEPT WRITE SOMETHING THAT PUTS THEIR'S TO SHAME. Lol. It's hard to beat them but it can be done. I just wish there were more people on here that went to the voting booth and took the time to vote. That hasn't changed over years either. Thank you again for the great review, Karen. Have yourself a fantastic upcoming weekend.
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I also don't get that they read the work, but don't bother to review it.rude and selfish.
Karen
Comment from Claire Tennant
What an entertaining poem. The reader must surely relate to the "Will I Won't I?" feeling. I certainly did but meanwhile giggled like mad, in fact, I still am. Well done Good luck
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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What an entertaining poem. The reader must surely relate to the "Will I Won't I?" feeling. I certainly did but meanwhile giggled like mad, in fact, I still am. Well done Good luck
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the fantastic review, Claire. I just couldn't resist. Lol. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you had a chuckle at this silly piece.
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Comment from Eleri
I love this poem as it says what I am sure many writers feel at one time of another. I don't recommend the vodka as a cure though. The rhyming in this poem is great and the rhythm of eight/six beats per line works well. I truly hope that you win or place in this contest as I, for one, think you deserve it.
Eleri
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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I love this poem as it says what I am sure many writers feel at one time of another. I don't recommend the vodka as a cure though. The rhyming in this poem is great and the rhythm of eight/six beats per line works well. I truly hope that you win or place in this contest as I, for one, think you deserve it.
Eleri
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you for the great review, Eleri. Yes, I know vodka isn't the cure but that's what I came up with for a 'drink' contest. Lol. I really appreciate the generous stars and good luck wishes. Have yourself a wonderful night.
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
lol That was funny and imaginative! This is a very good story for the challenge! I enjoyed reading this. This is well written and I'm sure others will relate. I don't drink but I do understand about the contests. I have vowed never to use my own money here.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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lol That was funny and imaginative! This is a very good story for the challenge! I enjoyed reading this. This is well written and I'm sure others will relate. I don't drink but I do understand about the contests. I have vowed never to use my own money here.
Best wishes,
Alexandra
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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That's a perfect way to go about it. It's not worth spending 'real' cash to try to win fake money. Lol. Thank you for the fantastic review and stars, Alexandra. I'm glad you liked this silly offering.