A Poetic Pause
Viewing comments for Chapter 32 "Hollarween"First Poems
5 total reviews
Comment from royowen
This is an excellent post Lea, the word choice is brilliant, the flow of the deftly written narrative is exceptional, and the rhyming slots in seamlessly, well done and good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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This is an excellent post Lea, the word choice is brilliant, the flow of the deftly written narrative is exceptional, and the rhyming slots in seamlessly, well done and good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you, Roy as always. I appreciate your comment for stopping by always happy to receive them. Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it!
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My pleasure
Comment from Eleri
This is a very descriptive poem of some of the supposed horrors that might await the unwary on Halloween. The rhyming couplets are good and the images fantastic but the rhythm varies from eight to ten beats per line. Therefore, the poem would read better out loud if that was more consistent. Having said that though I do like this poem so good luck in the contest
Eleri
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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This is a very descriptive poem of some of the supposed horrors that might await the unwary on Halloween. The rhyming couplets are good and the images fantastic but the rhythm varies from eight to ten beats per line. Therefore, the poem would read better out loud if that was more consistent. Having said that though I do like this poem so good luck in the contest
Eleri
Comment Written 04-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 04-Oct-2023
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Thank you Eleri for your kind comments and for your suggestions! Thank you for your fine review too. And I will look over the beats that you mentioned. Thanks for the great advice. I hope you have the best days thanks again!
Comment from Lordinajamjar
An enjoyable read. This piece really does strive to put the sense of horror back into Halloween. It succeeded admirably, even Poe himself might ruffle a raven feather to fend off the chill.
Well done Lea. I noticed you spelled pumpkin, as you didn't mention it in your notes I am not sure if you dropped the p intentionally or not.
Good luck
John
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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An enjoyable read. This piece really does strive to put the sense of horror back into Halloween. It succeeded admirably, even Poe himself might ruffle a raven feather to fend off the chill.
Well done Lea. I noticed you spelled pumpkin, as you didn't mention it in your notes I am not sure if you dropped the p intentionally or not.
Good luck
John
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Thank you so much, John for stopping in for a read. Yes, I did change the spelling on that good catch. Thank you very much, thanks for reading and thanks for your fine review. And I hope your day is amazing!
Comment from JSD
You need some punctuation in your last line and an apostrophe at the beginning on 'witches'. Otherwise this is your usual excellent writing. Where have you been? I hope you're well and life's ok. Take care. John x
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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You need some punctuation in your last line and an apostrophe at the beginning on 'witches'. Otherwise this is your usual excellent writing. Where have you been? I hope you're well and life's ok. Take care. John x
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Hi John, yes you are correct and I have made the correction on this as well. You have a keen Eye. Thank you very much for pointing that out. And thanks again for your fine reviews. I always look forward to seeing tdamn. And it's good to be back after climbing the mountain and coming back out. The other side have a great day!
Comment from Lisasview
Hi Lea,
I think this is excellent ... the poem and the image.
On my computer your last two lines appear as one long line.
Also, Did you mean Hollarween? Not Halloween
If so I suggest that you put that in your authors notes so that the reader doesn't think there was a typo...
Lisa
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Hi Lea,
I think this is excellent ... the poem and the image.
On my computer your last two lines appear as one long line.
Also, Did you mean Hollarween? Not Halloween
If so I suggest that you put that in your authors notes so that the reader doesn't think there was a typo...
Lisa
Comment Written 03-Oct-2023
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
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Hi, Lisa, thank you so much, I'm glad to see you here. I've been away for a while climbing a mountain. And yeah, have come out the other side. Well, I have to see your review. And yet. Thank you for spotting that the correction has been made. I appreciate your comments as well, always insightful and always helpful. I hope you have the best day!
