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The Walrus and the Starfish

Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Old Friends"
They have some interesting conversations.

26 total reviews 
Comment from Pearl Edwards
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This is a delightful read Yvonne as these two quirky friends go through life hand in hand while dreaming up adventures. This left me with a smile, thanks for that.
Cheers
Valda

 Comment Written 04-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 05-Oct-2023
    I'm so glad. Thanks, Valda.
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Yvonne,
I loved this poem. Surely you must have a stack of these set aside for your grandchildren when they visit? I think they would be delighted to have you as their grandma. Do you ever share your stories with them, like driving the bus and working in the morgue? I'd like to see more of those myself. Thanks for sharing this gal.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    Have you read the Wally stories. Not asking you to review them. Don't please, but read them.
reply by T B Botts on 04-Oct-2023
    I don't think I have Yvonne. When I get a moment I'll take a look, thanks.
    Blessings,
    Tom
Comment from harmony13
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The author's words were fun to read! They made me smile a lot! The
poem is descriptive and creative. I really like the last stanza which says
what friendship is all about! The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork is awesome! Hi Yvonne, hope you are doing well!....Maria

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    Thank you so much. I'm doing well for an old woman. Hahaha. How about you?
reply by harmony13 on 03-Oct-2023
    Hi Yvonne,
    I am doing well too - for an old woman!
    Enjoy the rest of the week!....Maria
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    That's what I always say, too! Like minds. Poor you if you have a mind like mine.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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This makes me glad but also sad that I never had a starfish or a walrus for a friend but I did soar moe than a few times for a rebound, and tho i landed way to soon I felt as If I had flown over the moon.
Otherwise, I liked the story!

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    Thank you. You always make me smile.
Comment from BethShelby
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This is a great poem for children. I remember reading one of them before. Did you created a book of poem about these two.? This is a neat idea have two creatures of the sea to be best friends. I remember a childrens' poem about the walrus and the carpenter.

 Comment Written 03-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    When I started this, I wasn't even thinking about that old poem. Yes, I'm put them in a book in my portfolio. Thanks so much, Beth.
Comment from lyenochka
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Lol. That's so cute! I like this couple of friends much better than that old "Walrus and the Carpenter" who cunningly lured a bunch oysters away. These two just had fun with their imaginations!

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    Thank you. When I started writing these stories, I hadn't thought about that old poem.
Comment from Pam (respa)
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-Love the artwork and very nice presentation.
-I remember your characters and you did
a great job with the poem.
-Animals make writing fun because
you can come up with anything, and
it still makes sense and is fun, too.
-One of my favorite images is
"my flippered friend."
-I like how the Walrus encourages his friend,
and the starfish even gets into the prospect
of a new adventure.
-The Walrus has a very good response, and
I like the concluding verse very much.
-I enjoyed your poem.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 03-Oct-2023
    I'm so glad. That's always good to hear. Thanks, Pam.
reply by Pam (respa) on 03-Oct-2023
    You are very welcome, Yvonne. It is fun to write about animals😊
Comment from Pantygynt
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What will you do for an encore? I suppose you could try an updated version of Jabberwocky or perhaps the lobster quadrille. Lol.

I think the starfish is typecast as the Red Queen.

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    I don't know if there will be anymore Walrus/Starfish stories. But who knows? Thanks, Jim.
Comment from judiverse
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Very imaginative to think of a walrus and starfish together. You carried it off. Great idea to use the back and forth dialogue. The starfish has his doubts about their ventures, but the walrus is encouraging. The starfish needs that encouragement. It's sweet they become friends. It would be funny to see them together. Excellent rhyme. judi

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    Thank you so much. Yes, they've been friends for a long time. heeheeheehee
Comment from dragonpoet
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Hi Yvonne,
This is a well rhymed story in a poem about close friendship and daydreams. I think all landbound animals may have this dream to fly.
Thus the invention of airplanes, helicopters and hot air balloons. And the myth Daedalus and Icarus.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great week.
Joan

 Comment Written 02-Oct-2023


reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
    Thank you.
reply by dragonpoet on 03-Oct-2023
    No problem.
    Joan