2023 Gypsy's Haiku
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Comment from aryr
This was an awesome haiku, Gypsy, your use of the eclipse was wonderful. Your words were special to me especially because they mention 'cancerous'. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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This was an awesome haiku, Gypsy, your use of the eclipse was wonderful. Your words were special to me especially because they mention 'cancerous'. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend. Blessed be.
Gypsy hugs
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You are so very welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from shelley kaye
ooh this was good yet sad and very thought-provoking with a smidge of hope all in one.
i like the eclipse and dark circles
and it tying it in with a cancer ward was unique and interesting
nice!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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ooh this was good yet sad and very thought-provoking with a smidge of hope all in one.
i like the eclipse and dark circles
and it tying it in with a cancer ward was unique and interesting
nice!
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Great metaphor for the cancer ward. I have been there and done that. I remember when I went through chemotherapy, breast cancer, and saw others there. I was hoping I didn't look like them, but I know I did. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Great metaphor for the cancer ward. I have been there and done that. I remember when I went through chemotherapy, breast cancer, and saw others there. I was hoping I didn't look like them, but I know I did. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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I am so happy you are healthy now. :)
Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
such a powerful haiku with only fifteen words to amplify the intent... impressive!
I guess most of us by now have been touched in some way in the knowing of the 'cancer ward'. So to have the 'eclipse' to take away the light really painted a vivid picture... add the 'dark circles around her eyes', and now one sees the whole painting from a distance where everything become real and obvious.
Such a heavy impact achieved within this short form.
It has to be said... 'you move me with your words MariVal'.
This haiku delivered me straight to Jade's mother and my mother, both succumbing to the cruel ravages of cancer. The hospital, the ward, the room... the end.
But there is always light as soon as the shadows subside... and life goes on, as it should.
Stunning presentation and brilliant composition!
With our thoughts we create...
the beauty of time.
Warmest regards,
James.
****** Stars exceptional!
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Hi MariVal,
such a powerful haiku with only fifteen words to amplify the intent... impressive!
I guess most of us by now have been touched in some way in the knowing of the 'cancer ward'. So to have the 'eclipse' to take away the light really painted a vivid picture... add the 'dark circles around her eyes', and now one sees the whole painting from a distance where everything become real and obvious.
Such a heavy impact achieved within this short form.
It has to be said... 'you move me with your words MariVal'.
This haiku delivered me straight to Jade's mother and my mother, both succumbing to the cruel ravages of cancer. The hospital, the ward, the room... the end.
But there is always light as soon as the shadows subside... and life goes on, as it should.
Stunning presentation and brilliant composition!
With our thoughts we create...
the beauty of time.
Warmest regards,
James.
****** Stars exceptional!
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Hello, James,
I'm so happy to hear from you. I am sorry my haiku brought up sad memories but I'm glad you still like it. Haiku is supposed to touch the reader in some way.
MariVal hugs xoxox
"Scars mean you fought. Wrinkles mean you lived. Heartache means you loved." - Matshona Dhliwayo
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Love the quote... and never be sorry for the brilliance you deliver with your craft.
Some memories for sure will bring sad reflections, but in their lies our strength of acceptance.. I love your poems and the emotion they evoke dear MariVal.
"It is our attitude toward events, not events themselves, which we can control. Nothing is by its own nature calamitous ? even death is terrible only if we fear it." ? Epictetus
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This reply goes well with my other poem, the end of day.
Thank you for being so encouraging and kind... always. May you have a wonderful day ahead.
Abrazos,
Gypsy Queen
Comment from Gloria ....
So very good, and eclipse is a strong and apt metaphor for the cancer ward, and the poisoning of the body with chemotherapy.
Circle around her eyes a sorrowful sign.
Your presentation is paradoxical in its beauty.
Very well done.
Gloria
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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So very good, and eclipse is a strong and apt metaphor for the cancer ward, and the poisoning of the body with chemotherapy.
Circle around her eyes a sorrowful sign.
Your presentation is paradoxical in its beauty.
Very well done.
Gloria
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from kahpot
So well written though so very sad, I truly feel for these children, as adults we can handle and understand a little better, an excellent and heartfelt read, very well written and presented****kahpot
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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So well written though so very sad, I truly feel for these children, as adults we can handle and understand a little better, an excellent and heartfelt read, very well written and presented****kahpot
Comment Written 30-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from GWHARGIS
Awe. This was very sad. The connection between the eclipse and the circles around her eyes was brilliant. Sad to think about people going through cancer. Even the less threatening forms. It makes you wonder why your body turns against you. Gretchen
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Awe. This was very sad. The connection between the eclipse and the circles around her eyes was brilliant. Sad to think about people going through cancer. Even the less threatening forms. It makes you wonder why your body turns against you. Gretchen
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Yes, thankfully none in my family has gotten cancer, may be always that way. It's a perverse illness that ravages the patient and family.
Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Gypsy, this is a touching haiku about cancer.
I see people in the cancer ward, hoping to live, taking chemotherapy. One word: I read more people are surviving cancer every day.
A very beautiful poem.
Blessings, Cindy
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Gypsy, this is a touching haiku about cancer.
I see people in the cancer ward, hoping to live, taking chemotherapy. One word: I read more people are surviving cancer every day.
A very beautiful poem.
Blessings, Cindy
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much, Cindy, for the exceptional six stars review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, it's a terrible thing to be diagnosed with cancer, it's possibly the worst thing that can happen to anyone, a great post, but a very sober one, considering the grim subject, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Oh yes, it's a terrible thing to be diagnosed with cancer, it's possibly the worst thing that can happen to anyone, a great post, but a very sober one, considering the grim subject, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for the excellent review and kind words. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy hugs
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Most welcome
Comment from lyenochka
The world is covered by circles due to the eclipse. But the cancer patient probably doesn't see the circles instead they are around her own eyes due to the effects of the chemo. Interesting juxtaposition of different circles.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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The world is covered by circles due to the eclipse. But the cancer patient probably doesn't see the circles instead they are around her own eyes due to the effects of the chemo. Interesting juxtaposition of different circles.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much, big sister. I appreciate the excellent review and feedback.
Gypsy hugs