Saving Mr. Calvin
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I did remember this storyline from before and am interested with what you're going to do with us. I'm sure you're going to marry up the stories just not sure how. I can't wait to read.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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I did remember this storyline from before and am interested with what you're going to do with us. I'm sure you're going to marry up the stories just not sure how. I can't wait to read.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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This version is quite enhanced from what was in Some Call It Luck and from Kenny's point of view too, where that one was from Abby's. I promise you it will tie in with the rest.
Comment from royowen
I've always liked biographies, even though I didn't know either grandfather, I met my maternal and paternal grandmothers, but we left England when I was very young, so being a grandfather is really important to me. So generations are really important to me, I like your stories, though the relations are many generations, I love these characters, beautifully written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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I've always liked biographies, even though I didn't know either grandfather, I met my maternal and paternal grandmothers, but we left England when I was very young, so being a grandfather is really important to me. So generations are really important to me, I like your stories, though the relations are many generations, I love these characters, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much, Roy. I've gotten to love them too as I've written about some of them in a number of stories now. My favorite is Abby who plays an important role in this one too.
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I like Abby, who accepted and befriended E.J.
Comment from lancellot
Well, it is nice to see some familiar characters again. I see you found a way to tie everything together in a cohesive continuity. Cool. Now, what are they learning or gaining from all this. That is the question.
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When I left Holland and now Scotland, Kilian and Kirk just went on living their lives as normal. That's my theory anyway.
- How would he know? He didn't look them up in history. He never left the golf course.
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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Well, it is nice to see some familiar characters again. I see you found a way to tie everything together in a cohesive continuity. Cool. Now, what are they learning or gaining from all this. That is the question.
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When I left Holland and now Scotland, Kilian and Kirk just went on living their lives as normal. That's my theory anyway.
- How would he know? He didn't look them up in history. He never left the golf course.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2023
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You've raised an excellent question, here. In fact, the key question. What are they learning and what is the purpose of it all? That's exactly what will be addressed in Part 4.
Concerning Kevin's theory, he doesn't know for sure; that's why it's a theory. He bases it on the fact that his hosts had no apparent knowledge of his presence in their minds. Therefore, why would it have any effect later when he leaves them again. He will find out near the beginning of Part 4 that his theory is correct when he talks to Kenny and Abby Payne in 2032.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Fortunately, I read your author's notes. I feared this would turn into Some Call It Luck, but I don't read books twice. Since you say this is changed, I will stick with it, mostly because I'm trying to find out how someone saves nice Mr. Calvin.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Fortunately, I read your author's notes. I feared this would turn into Some Call It Luck, but I don't read books twice. Since you say this is changed, I will stick with it, mostly because I'm trying to find out how someone saves nice Mr. Calvin.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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It's an enhanced version of this part of SCIL. If you do decide to skip a few chapters later on, make sure you come back for Part 4 because that's where everything in the story comes together.
Comment from Jay Squires
Bring it on! I liked the part about the woman who stole the suit out of Abby's daughter's locker and used it to beat Abby (I think ...) I like where you're taking us, Jim.
Yes, it's true. Those of you who read my previous novel Some Call It Luck [That's right! I was automatically thinking the suit thing was part of the first few chapters of your current novel (before the couple flies off the cliff -- no, I won't let you forget that --.]
Keep 'em coming!
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Bring it on! I liked the part about the woman who stole the suit out of Abby's daughter's locker and used it to beat Abby (I think ...) I like where you're taking us, Jim.
Yes, it's true. Those of you who read my previous novel Some Call It Luck [That's right! I was automatically thinking the suit thing was part of the first few chapters of your current novel (before the couple flies off the cliff -- no, I won't let you forget that --.]
Keep 'em coming!
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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I haven't forgotten it. I'm dying to hear what you have to say about it when we get there.
Comment from lyenochka
Glad you listened to your wife about the "Dumbo" as that would be more appropriate for teen boys or younger. Lol.
So you brought in your other characters and took us away from the time traveling novel to a sort of practical sci-fi section. You're right - I'm impressed with the lady engineer coming up with a golf suit!
Suggestion: This sentence went on too long and would be better as at least two: " Following a few leaves of absence to give birth to our two kids and stay home with them for a year, she has since worked her way up to being the manager of the actuarial department."
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Glad you listened to your wife about the "Dumbo" as that would be more appropriate for teen boys or younger. Lol.
So you brought in your other characters and took us away from the time traveling novel to a sort of practical sci-fi section. You're right - I'm impressed with the lady engineer coming up with a golf suit!
Suggestion: This sentence went on too long and would be better as at least two: " Following a few leaves of absence to give birth to our two kids and stay home with them for a year, she has since worked her way up to being the manager of the actuarial department."
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Yeah, after a while, even I began cringing when I heard "Dumbo." You said exactly what Elise said, "Dumbo" is a name for younger people.
Kenny, Abby, E.J., and Eddie have found their way into all of my novels. Abby has always been my favorite character.
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I noticed your favorite female characters' names all start with A.
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Good observation. Not a coincidence either. Did you notice how all the main guys in each age start with "K" too?
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Yes, and I'm guessing that was intentional, too! 😊
Comment from Tom Horonzy
How much of this is real? I searched Eddie Phillips putters without success. If it is, what was it's name and which pros signed on board. Putting is my bane. I can get everything close but nothing seems to fall in.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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How much of this is real? I searched Eddie Phillips putters without success. If it is, what was it's name and which pros signed on board. Putting is my bane. I can get everything close but nothing seems to fall in.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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According to Some Call It Luck, Eddie sold his putters to Tom Weiskopf, Fuzzy Zoeller, and Hubert Green. Based on that, Kenny decided to quit his job as a mechanical engineer for the food industry and join Eddie as a partner. I think only Fuzzy is still alive, so you'll have to get him to attest to the quality of the putter.
Yeah, none of this is real--just a figment of my warped imagination.
If only the hole were a couple inches bigger, this game wouldn't be so damn frustrating!
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Funny - about making the hole larger. I have played in events where they were twice the size or eight and a hlaf wide. Did not make a difference. I still left them short.
My best man (Scott Harrill) for my wedding was Director of Golf at Ford's Colony, Williamsburg, Va, while Fuzzy was their touring pro. The stories told can only be imagined.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
I appreciate that you are taking the time and making the effort to clarify the time travel aspect of the story, as it is the central theme, along with golf, of course! The name changes may be confusing, but if they are listed with the characters, we should be able to figure it out. Hopefully, your corrections will give you a more solid book when all of this is said and done.
You have a thing for redheads, don't you, lol!
I only read a couple of chapters of Some Call It Luck, yet I immediately recognized where you were taking the story. An interesting combination. I like that you're in a time I'm more familiar with now; it will be a nice change (not that there was anything wrong with the past, just different).
I have one gentle critique, and I was just addressing this with another novelist here who uses pictures of her family for her images instead of pictures relevant to her story. You always use pictures of recognizable actors. I know how hard it can be sometimes to find appropriate pictures for one's story, but I feel that seeing actors I know from film takes me out of the story a bit. I wonder if you Googled "red headed women of a certain age" if you would get images that suit your purpose who we don't already know.
Other than that, I thought this was a good start to your new story, and it will be interesting to see how you develop this suit.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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I appreciate that you are taking the time and making the effort to clarify the time travel aspect of the story, as it is the central theme, along with golf, of course! The name changes may be confusing, but if they are listed with the characters, we should be able to figure it out. Hopefully, your corrections will give you a more solid book when all of this is said and done.
You have a thing for redheads, don't you, lol!
I only read a couple of chapters of Some Call It Luck, yet I immediately recognized where you were taking the story. An interesting combination. I like that you're in a time I'm more familiar with now; it will be a nice change (not that there was anything wrong with the past, just different).
I have one gentle critique, and I was just addressing this with another novelist here who uses pictures of her family for her images instead of pictures relevant to her story. You always use pictures of recognizable actors. I know how hard it can be sometimes to find appropriate pictures for one's story, but I feel that seeing actors I know from film takes me out of the story a bit. I wonder if you Googled "red headed women of a certain age" if you would get images that suit your purpose who we don't already know.
Other than that, I thought this was a good start to your new story, and it will be interesting to see how you develop this suit.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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You nailed me, Pam. I do have a thing for redheads!
I'm glad you asked the questions you did on the previous posting, which spurred me to explain the time travel aspect better (and also to think more about how it would really work.) That's one of the reasons I like posting the novels on FS--because it really helps me to know how the readers see things and what needs to be improved. I thank you for that.
When I first thought of how Abby would look in her mid-30s, I pictured Emma Stone, but I also Googled redheaded women like you suggested, and didn't find anyone else, through quite a bit of searching, who improved on my image of her.
I think what happens is that when I picture a character in my head, I think first of an actor, hence a number of my pictures are of actors. Not all, though. All my other redheads were and will be (yes, there will be one more in Part 4) unknowns.
I know what you're saying, about using recognizable actors, though. Did you also recognize David Strathairn and David Soul as E.J. and Kenny?
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Sure did:-)
Comment from JSD
Well, I didn't question what happened to the characters left behind. I suppose I go too easily with a narrative and focus only on the characters in focus at the time. I wonder what that says about me? Anyway, enjoying the new time already and I love how you continue to devise new ideas for golf. The idea of the suit is fully appropriate for the twenty-first century. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Well, I didn't question what happened to the characters left behind. I suppose I go too easily with a narrative and focus only on the characters in focus at the time. I wonder what that says about me? Anyway, enjoying the new time already and I love how you continue to devise new ideas for golf. The idea of the suit is fully appropriate for the twenty-first century. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Thanks, John. This suit is a figment of my imagination, and I have no idea if it could really worked as planned, but I tried to make it sound realistic anyway.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is superb, Jim! Once again you get your reader into your time-travel story fluently with your helpful introduction and recurring theme. Now in 2002 we have great insight into the main characters and an inspired idea from Abby ( who longs to get back into engineering), about inventing a golfing suit. A perfect start setting the scene with backgrounds to the characters that will inevitably assist in this venture. Well done and let's get started on that suit! Debbie
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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This is superb, Jim! Once again you get your reader into your time-travel story fluently with your helpful introduction and recurring theme. Now in 2002 we have great insight into the main characters and an inspired idea from Abby ( who longs to get back into engineering), about inventing a golfing suit. A perfect start setting the scene with backgrounds to the characters that will inevitably assist in this venture. Well done and let's get started on that suit! Debbie
Comment Written 25-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 25-Sep-2023
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Thank you so much, Debbie, for your wonderful review and for the 6 stars. Much appreciated. These characters and parts of this sequence appeared in my previous novel, Some Call It Luck which I posted on this site earlier and have jumped into.
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That's what makes it all so fluent because we don't have to start all over again getting to know the characters. You've got a great idea going there!