Bird of Grace
Swan Song6 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Great entry for the 10 Line Poem writing prompt contest. I like the imagery and presentation too. Good line count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
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Great entry for the 10 Line Poem writing prompt contest. I like the imagery and presentation too. Good line count and connection between lines.
Gypsy
Comment Written 24-Sep-2023
Comment from l.raven
truly a very beautiful poem...just looking
at the picture...and reading the poem...
you can almost watch the Bird of Grace
swim by....in the shadow of the evening...
I love your poem...very nicely written...
and your picture...stunning...love Linda xxoo
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truly a very beautiful poem...just looking
at the picture...and reading the poem...
you can almost watch the Bird of Grace
swim by....in the shadow of the evening...
I love your poem...very nicely written...
and your picture...stunning...love Linda xxoo
Comment Written 22-Sep-2023
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is such a lovely, meditative verse! The image is beautiful and your fine sentiments seem to flow as smoothly as that lake. Thank you. I needed this calming influence! Good luck! Debbie
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This is such a lovely, meditative verse! The image is beautiful and your fine sentiments seem to flow as smoothly as that lake. Thank you. I needed this calming influence! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 22-Sep-2023
Comment from royowen
Of course black swans are found in the southern hemisphere, but yes, they are beautiful, graceful creatures, symbolic of the human ballet, this is a great entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy
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Of course black swans are found in the southern hemisphere, but yes, they are beautiful, graceful creatures, symbolic of the human ballet, this is a great entry in this contest, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Sep-2023
Comment from Lance Levens
I would prefer the pattern of line lengths be clearer. Short to long, then long back to short works well. Unfortunately, "marks the days end" is four words. That line appears after the author has passed the three words section coming back down.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2023
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I would prefer the pattern of line lengths be clearer. Short to long, then long back to short works well. Unfortunately, "marks the days end" is four words. That line appears after the author has passed the three words section coming back down.
Comment Written 22-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2023
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Thanks for your review. The purpose of the format is there to be 1-5 syllables in the first 5 lines then 5-1 in the second.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Royal indeed, protected by the crown and this graceful bird is loved by everyone and a symbol of peace and tranquility. Your poem pays tribute to this magnificent bird. We used to have swans in our town every October but they must have found a better place to live because they have not visited us for a couple of years now, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2023
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Royal indeed, protected by the crown and this graceful bird is loved by everyone and a symbol of peace and tranquility. Your poem pays tribute to this magnificent bird. We used to have swans in our town every October but they must have found a better place to live because they have not visited us for a couple of years now, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 22-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2023
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Thanks for your review Dolly. One of my favorite childhood memories is going down to the neighbourhood lake and feeding the black swans. I don't think we knew the dangers of doing that in the 70's