Fern, Sweet Faerie
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Comment from patcelaw
This is a beautifully rhymed poem that you have written for the rhyming poem contest I wish you the very best in the contest your presentation is beautiful. Have a good day, and may God bless.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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This is a beautifully rhymed poem that you have written for the rhyming poem contest I wish you the very best in the contest your presentation is beautiful. Have a good day, and may God bless.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Hi Pat! Thank you for reading and for the review! Very much appreciated 😊
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
What a delightful verse which has such an ethereal quality about it, in-keeping with the subject!. It took a couple of reads to absorb the story and your notes were very helpful in explaining this particular verse form. But I liked the way in your second stanza, in particular, that nature reflected the mean and negative responses of the townsfolk to Fern. She had no alternative than to move on and be crowned where she was better appreciated. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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What a delightful verse which has such an ethereal quality about it, in-keeping with the subject!. It took a couple of reads to absorb the story and your notes were very helpful in explaining this particular verse form. But I liked the way in your second stanza, in particular, that nature reflected the mean and negative responses of the townsfolk to Fern. She had no alternative than to move on and be crowned where she was better appreciated. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Hi Debbie!! Aw thanks for the great review! Yeah, a lesson learned! ? but too late for that sad town 😬
Comment from w.j.debi
This is a wonderful form. It flows so well. Thank you for introducing me to it.
You've created a beautiful story poem with an excellent theme. Misunderstanding and intolerance rob people of some of the best blessings in life. Too bad Fern had to move on to another town where she could be appreciated.
I hope you do well in the contest.
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This is a wonderful form. It flows so well. Thank you for introducing me to it.
You've created a beautiful story poem with an excellent theme. Misunderstanding and intolerance rob people of some of the best blessings in life. Too bad Fern had to move on to another town where she could be appreciated.
I hope you do well in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
Comment from royowen
Congratulations on your 200th posting, it might take a while depending on proliferation, but always worthwhile. Beautifully written with great theme, flow, with an interesting rhyme scheme, articulate and skilful, great job, should do well, good job, good luck, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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Congratulations on your 200th posting, it might take a while depending on proliferation, but always worthwhile. Beautifully written with great theme, flow, with an interesting rhyme scheme, articulate and skilful, great job, should do well, good job, good luck, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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Thanks Roy, I had a little fun with this one. Thanks for taking the time to read and review! 😊
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Well done
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have not heard of this form before Susan, and this is a fine example of it. Jealousy always exists when there is something beautiful to be admired and loved, I enjoyed the sentiment and your rhymes and wish you luck with the contest, this is a joy to read, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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I have not heard of this form before Susan, and this is a fine example of it. Jealousy always exists when there is something beautiful to be admired and loved, I enjoyed the sentiment and your rhymes and wish you luck with the contest, this is a joy to read, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you Dolly, for the wonderful review! Richard Jenkins created and taught me this form. He only has a million original forms :)
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I have not heard of him, is he a member on Fanstory?
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Oh for some reason I thought you knew each other? he used to be a member here. He no longer is. He belongs to several other sites. Master poet and has taught for years. :) I kinda wish he was still here? his work is absolutely amazing.
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Shame he is no longer on Fanstory Susan x
