Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

Watching something like this would be so much fun, but I know that the way the holes are set up now, it would be impossible to stand in one place and see everything. But this is the kind of golf game I could get excited about - working against a clock as well as the hole.

Well, you couldn't have gotten any closer than that! So, in future matches, the Snog team will have a better understanding of how to play that fast hole and it will be even MORE competitive.

Good job with the narration, Jim, and having the mishap of Rory added a little tension and dialogue. Plus, you never want things to go perfectly.

Enjoyed the read.

xo
Pam

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

You're right. It would be very tough to watch a fast match played. You would have to run along fast to watch it. This is modeled after today's Speed Golf. I played in one of those once--not against another team, but just to see how fast a ball could go around the course. 100 people had signed up for it and were stationed at fixed points around the course. Not everyone got to hit a shot if the ball didn't come close to you. I think it took 15 minutes for the 18 holes. I don't think they kept the stroke total, though.

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I'm glad our friends won and really wasn't overly surprised. I am not happy that Part 2 is coming to an end. I am interested in how you're going to close it out.
I searched back to make sure I didn't miss any posts. I didn't at least as far as I know.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

You're going to get a bit of a surprise when we get to Part 3, Barbara. I think you'll like it.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

They've done it Jim, it seems they had a struggle, but in the end they emerged out of it as the close but clear leaders, (mind you I thought that was the way it was going to head) you made reading a pleasure and was a wonderfully ending, beautifully written, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

Thanks, Roy. You were very prescient!

reply by royowen on 19-Sep-2023

Well done

Comment from jmdg1954

Excellent

Good morning, Jim.
Wow. This intense chapter grabbed me by my shirt collar and would not let go!

You have details of this final match that keeps the reader in tune and feeling as if they were at the match. Well written!

Hamish was kept sober, Putt did what Putt does best especially with Cat and the Foos now hold the cup!

Maybe you can could name the cup similarly to what they do in hockey? You're very creative with names. Just a thought!

Alrighty then... looking forward to what happens next.

Cheers to the Foos...
John

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

So glad you found it exciting, John. When we get into part 3 very soon, I think you're going to get a surprise.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Hooray! The Foos won and now there will be a wedding! I knew you had to add to the tension by adding the ankle problem. Nothing is ever straightforward and easy.

One comment about the anachronism - but you may have it correct as I know nothing about 1458 Scotland. The use of "Christ" as an expression of venting was probably not done then. Or was it? And to have Cat wrap her legs around Putt seems something that would be more in today's culture - of course, you are way ahead letting the women participate and add to the game. And the silver cup that we're so familiar with today - was that always the trophy? Even five hundred years ago? Not just a goat? Lol.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

Yep, wedding bells are in the air. Thanks for pointing out the anachronisms. I couldn't find exactly when "Christ" started being used in that way, so I just changed it to "crap." I just did some research about silver cups, and they probably weren't used as trophies until a few hundred years later than that; however, the Foos are ahead of their time, so perhaps they used one before it was in vogue? A goat would have been good too!

reply by lyenochka on 19-Sep-2023

And it was pre-Victorian times so perhaps Cat could wrap her legs around Putt without causing a stir. I do like how strong and inventive your female characters are.

reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

Just wait; they will continue to be so.

Comment from Carol Hillebrenner

Excellent

Great playing! They won! The Snog team is going to have to make up another special game to get back their title. Exciting action that made sense even to a non-golfer. Good work.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

Glad you were able to follow it, Carol, and found it exciting. We've got a surprise coming very soon when we get into Part 3!

Comment from Jay Squires

Excellent

The Foos finally finished first, and the Snogs secured a shoddy second. And Putt and Cat look like they may have begun a new game of their own. Now that the match is over, I'm trying to figure where you're going to take us now. I know it'll be good.

Jay

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

I'm planning a big surprise in Part 3. I hope you'll enjoy it, Jay.

reply by Jay Squires on 20-Sep-2023

Oh, I'm sure I will!

Comment from JT traveller

Excellent

Romance, excitement, the building of tension. Your story has it all.

How interesting, a budding romance, perhaps?

I enjoyed this instalment as much as the previous chapters. it is all coming together really well and flows well.

Well done, Jim. Jacqui

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

Thanks so much, Jacqui. I'm so glad you're enjoying it. The story will change quite significantly when we get into Parts 3 and 4. Right now we are about 65% of the way through.

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

There is a lot of emotion going on in this chapter. The excitement and tension of executing the strategy and the effort of playing the game. Looks like romance may be budding as well. It was a close game, which makes things more exciting. Well done.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023

Thanks for your great review, debi. It took a fair amount of planning to make the game that close, but I think it does add to the excitement that way.

Comment from Paul Manton

Excellent

Well, I never grow tired of this story, Jim - and today was no exception!
Hoorah for the Foos! And Putt and Cat might be an item too!

It rattled along with no unnecessary interruptions - lots of action, but never overdone - indeed I felt that you streamlined this more than expected - but that added to the excitement.

I am very glad that you sobered Hamish up enough to manage the math! I don't think I followed it at all, even after teaching the subject for thirty years! But, who cares, in the face of undoubted victory!

Thanks Jim. On to the next chapter - and me to look for a different book to present.

Best from Paul

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023

Thank you so much, Paul. I love your analyses of the chapters, especially your remarks about the timing and the amount of detail. It's always a challenge when describing a golf match to provide the right amount of detail without getting boring, especially when there are a number of readers who are not golfers.

In the past, I've sometimes written way too much and had to cut our large sections that I wrote because they ended up even boring me to read them. I've learned to give highlights of a match and not try to show everything that goes on. In a real round of golf, a lot of it isn't particularly interesting except maybe to the one playing. Nothing worse than listening to someone relate a round of golf they played, hole-by-hole, and I've suffered through this from time to time. I'm thinking to myself, just tell me the highlights for goodness sake!

reply by Paul Manton on 18-Sep-2023

Great. I think you got it just right, Jim. You'll soon know it if I get bored.
Have a great day.
Paul