A Particular Friendship
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Crank that Volume"We meet Lizzy who has just come out of the convent
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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I have always had music in my life, My father was a fill-in music leader at church. In "The Church of Christ" we believed that all music should be made by us. So, no musical instruments. Everyone should sing, so no choirs. I love acapella. I was always in a choir at school and won awards. So music is ingrained in me. Lovely writing. Karen
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
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I have always had music in my life, My father was a fill-in music leader at church. In "The Church of Christ" we believed that all music should be made by us. So, no musical instruments. Everyone should sing, so no choirs. I love acapella. I was always in a choir at school and won awards. So music is ingrained in me. Lovely writing. Karen
Comment Written 21-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your engaged review., I'm glad you appreciated it. It sounds like you may have had a nice relationship with your father.
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When I was little yes. When I got raped when I was 18, and he told me that me going to court would embarrass the whole family, I never looked at him the same ever again. Karen
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I was an advocate for SA victims. I have a history of being molested many times, some sexual assault. I am going to lightly address that in my autobiography.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Liz,
Your story is sad on the one hand, yet about survival on the other.
Your story shines with resilience, as you managed to cope through difficult times.
I, too, turned to the radio in my pre teen and teen years. I hadn't travelled much then, so I turned to FM radio at night, and the wee hours of the a.m., listening to Chicago stations, and other "faraway" venues (Mexico) and got lost in the wonderful music.( Our local station only aired til 11 pm). I was a minor behavior problem in junior high and dreaded school until high school.
Liz, your prose brought back feelings and memories (most good).
Good luck, with your book, Liz.
Blessings, and hugs,
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
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Liz,
Your story is sad on the one hand, yet about survival on the other.
Your story shines with resilience, as you managed to cope through difficult times.
I, too, turned to the radio in my pre teen and teen years. I hadn't travelled much then, so I turned to FM radio at night, and the wee hours of the a.m., listening to Chicago stations, and other "faraway" venues (Mexico) and got lost in the wonderful music.( Our local station only aired til 11 pm). I was a minor behavior problem in junior high and dreaded school until high school.
Liz, your prose brought back feelings and memories (most good).
Good luck, with your book, Liz.
Blessings, and hugs,
Cindy
Comment Written 21-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your involved review. Thank you for sharing some of your story. I'm glad my reflections touched you. An invitation for you to write some of your journey.
Comment from aryr
This was a great continuation chapter, Liz. The fondness you and your mother had for loud music was amazing. And your need for Scruffles was equally so, I am so glad you got both. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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This was a great continuation chapter, Liz. The fondness you and your mother had for loud music was amazing. And your need for Scruffles was equally so, I am so glad you got both. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 20-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your compassionate review.
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Most welcome, Liz.
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Some of the loudness formy mother was so we could hear the music on the other side 0of the house. Looking at it through an adult's eyes, it was a small house. As a kid,-lenty large enough to event to happen to be written about....more to come
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plenty
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You are absolutely correct, it's from an adult's eyes.
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Yup
Comment from eliz100
This is another excellent chapter. Music can be the connection with the soul. I hope this chapter has been cathartic for you. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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This is another excellent chapter. Music can be the connection with the soul. I hope this chapter has been cathartic for you. I do not see any room for improvement. Have a blessed day.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your compassionate review. Yes, revisiting this book I began 20+ years ago registers differently than it did back then. It is even more healing.
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Good for you.
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***smile***
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written.
The sensitive high school freshman played it over and over, she wallowing in self pity. - I understand that you may have done this on purpose as 'style', but 'she swallowing' needs a verb, or something.
"I cherished the thrumming growl - unnecessary quote mark
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Nicely written.
The sensitive high school freshman played it over and over, she wallowing in self pity. - I understand that you may have done this on purpose as 'style', but 'she swallowing' needs a verb, or something.
"I cherished the thrumming growl - unnecessary quote mark
Best wishes.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your constructive review.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this with us. This story is very emotional. Although it's fiction there are a lot of truths in it. Many children grow up in this environment. It's the sad truth of our society.
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you for sharing this with us. This story is very emotional. Although it's fiction there are a lot of truths in it. Many children grow up in this environment. It's the sad truth of our society.
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your compassionate. Sadly, it isn't fiction. This is my autobiography, my life. I began writing it 20+ years ago around the same time I wrote Be Wee with Bea 1
Comment from lyenochka
I feel like there are two very different times - like a patchwork of memories. I am glad that you had your mom and both of you were so close . I'm glad you could be away from your father. What a cruel thing to say to his daughter! No wonder you would hate golf and feel sad listening to the national anthem which meant the end of the music.
One spelling suggestion:
harshly tinnly blasted through (tinnily)
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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I feel like there are two very different times - like a patchwork of memories. I am glad that you had your mom and both of you were so close . I'm glad you could be away from your father. What a cruel thing to say to his daughter! No wonder you would hate golf and feel sad listening to the national anthem which meant the end of the music.
One spelling suggestion:
harshly tinnly blasted through (tinnily)
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your compassionate review. I wondered how to spell that. Thank you. lol
Comment from Jay Squires
I enjoy this far more than I enjoyed your children's book from the point of view of the animals. I can sink my teeth more into this autobiographical style. I did run into a few places that were kind of ify, when you kept bouncing back and forth from the sixties to the present. They seemed to need a better transition like the words, "Even today ..." or "I still feel that way today." Specifically, I had a problem with this: It definitely needs punctuation and capitalization, unless your intention is to write it in a stream-of-consciousness style, but then there's no consistency with what came before or after.
Freddy Cannon cool cool water born to lose on a big radio kept on the front sun porch. [Don't understand this sentence.]
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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I enjoy this far more than I enjoyed your children's book from the point of view of the animals. I can sink my teeth more into this autobiographical style. I did run into a few places that were kind of ify, when you kept bouncing back and forth from the sixties to the present. They seemed to need a better transition like the words, "Even today ..." or "I still feel that way today." Specifically, I had a problem with this: It definitely needs punctuation and capitalization, unless your intention is to write it in a stream-of-consciousness style, but then there's no consistency with what came before or after.
Freddy Cannon cool cool water born to lose on a big radio kept on the front sun porch. [Don't understand this sentence.]
Comment Written 19-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your supportive review. It does point out I need more punctuation and bridges. Your attention is how I become a better writer. Thank you.
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Thank you, Liz, for your confidence in what I do here.
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***Saweet***
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I hope you no longer crank the volume all the way up. If so, you will probably wake with tinnitus some morning. It is a misery. When you wanted your father to teach you golf, there probably were not a lot of females playing golf, and he doesn't sound like he would have the patience to teach anyone how to play it. Aren't Cool, Cool Water and Born to Lose supposed to be song titles in the first paragraph?
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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I hope you no longer crank the volume all the way up. If so, you will probably wake with tinnitus some morning. It is a misery. When you wanted your father to teach you golf, there probably were not a lot of females playing golf, and he doesn't sound like he would have the patience to teach anyone how to play it. Aren't Cool, Cool Water and Born to Lose supposed to be song titles in the first paragraph?
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your compassionate review. I have TMJ so I've had tinnitus since 1978 and have acquired a few more sounds with different incidences. Loud noises make me nauseous, so no more cranking. It's been pointed out to me I'm missing some punctuation & caps, especially around song titles.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a beautifully written story, Liz, which expresses so vividly your mood and development growing up in that household and the relationship, in particular, you had with your father. He clearly did nothing to help create a bond or enhance your self confidence. Music, therefore became your stalwart friend and support. This chapter seems to prepare the reader for another friendship that would later have such resonance in your imagination. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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This is a beautifully written story, Liz, which expresses so vividly your mood and development growing up in that household and the relationship, in particular, you had with your father. He clearly did nothing to help create a bond or enhance your self confidence. Music, therefore became your stalwart friend and support. This chapter seems to prepare the reader for another friendship that would later have such resonance in your imagination. Thanks for sharing, Debbie
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your compassionate review.