Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

The poem is clever. The picture was complementary.I Imagine this was hard to do. When you get a chance, please read my first lune poem, my first poem period, and my first writing here, "Remittance". Tell me what you think. Karen

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023

Thanks for your review. I did look up your poem and sent you my review.

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

This is such a lovely poem in this unique form. I especially love the sea and it's moods.

Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sally :))

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023

Thank you so much for your kind review.

Comment from Eleri

Excellent

I know what you mean about waves and the sea. This poem has some wonderful images in it and I love the ideas behind it. However, your rhythm is a but choppy in places varying between six and ten beats per line. I would have tried to make that much more consistent as it makes a poem much easier to read out loud.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023

Thank you so much for your review.