Heart
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Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem for the challenge! I enjoyed reading it and I could relate. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader. Thank you for being a friend too. :)
Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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This is an excellent poem for the challenge! I enjoyed reading it and I could relate. You also use descriptive words and colorful imagery that draw in a reader. Thank you for being a friend too. :)
Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your kind review and also for being a friend! Best wishes! 😊
Kristen
Comment from Laine Carson
The heart is amazing. I holds life, love and happiness...even when broken is remains able. You have captured many of it's incredible attributes in your poem.
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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The heart is amazing. I holds life, love and happiness...even when broken is remains able. You have captured many of it's incredible attributes in your poem.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your lovely review!
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
The poem is nice. The picture was complimentary.I Imagine this was hard to do. When you get a chance, please read my first lune poem, my first poem period, and my first writing here, "Remittance". Tell me what you think. Karen
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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The poem is nice. The picture was complimentary.I Imagine this was hard to do. When you get a chance, please read my first lune poem, my first poem period, and my first writing here, "Remittance". Tell me what you think. Karen
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your kind review! I will look at those poems.
Comment from Eleri
All-in-all this is a well written Pleiades poem. However, I admit that I don't quite understand the 'heaving all of our dreams' bit and I think that I would have kept all the bodily function bits together, ie lines 1, 2 and 5. Also, your rhythm is a bit chaotic varying from six to ten beats per line. Having said that though I did enjoy this poem so good luck in the contest
Eleri
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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All-in-all this is a well written Pleiades poem. However, I admit that I don't quite understand the 'heaving all of our dreams' bit and I think that I would have kept all the bodily function bits together, ie lines 1, 2 and 5. Also, your rhythm is a bit chaotic varying from six to ten beats per line. Having said that though I did enjoy this poem so good luck in the contest
Eleri
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your review!
