Praying?
Personal pondering4 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
Lol! You should get an A for all the P words you managed to fill this Pleiades poem. You know it's only the first word that needed to start all the same yet you made it a Pleiades alliteration poem while making commentary on the Pharisee's prayer.
Congratulations on your great finish in the contest!
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Lol! You should get an A for all the P words you managed to fill this Pleiades poem. You know it's only the first word that needed to start all the same yet you made it a Pleiades alliteration poem while making commentary on the Pharisee's prayer.
Congratulations on your great finish in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023
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Thank you.
I figured, but followed the example given in the directions (DQ'ed too many times - smiley face here).
Too bad the voters didn't agree with us.
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
Pleased by presentation. The poem is clever. The picture was complementary.I Imagine this was hard to do. When you get a chance, please read my first lune poem, my first poem period, and my first writing here, "Remittance". Tell me what you think. Karen
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Pleased by presentation. The poem is clever. The picture was complementary.I Imagine this was hard to do. When you get a chance, please read my first lune poem, my first poem period, and my first writing here, "Remittance". Tell me what you think. Karen
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Will do. But prob'ly not today.
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Thank you Karen
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Well, I think you playfully went over and above the brief here with all your alliteration! I think third line from the bottom should be - prerequisites? Some rather pessimistic pondering here on the subject of prayer. Well done on fulfilling the brief! Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Well, I think you playfully went over and above the brief here with all your alliteration! I think third line from the bottom should be - prerequisites? Some rather pessimistic pondering here on the subject of prayer. Well done on fulfilling the brief! Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023
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Thank you.
Not being a poet, but clambering for the bucks in support of my prose addiction, I used the example as an example and carried myself away.
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Perquisites - privileges.
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Oh that's a new one to me.
Comment from Eleri
There are certainly an awful lot of 'p's in this poem. The idea is clever and well executed. However, I think that I would have tried to make the metre a bit more constant as it currently ranges from 12 to 16 beats per line, which makes the poem sound a bit odd to me when read aloud.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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There are certainly an awful lot of 'p's in this poem. The idea is clever and well executed. However, I think that I would have tried to make the metre a bit more constant as it currently ranges from 12 to 16 beats per line, which makes the poem sound a bit odd to me when read aloud.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
Comment Written 16-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023
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Thank you.
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Fixed, I hope. thank you for your help.
