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Pieiades poem

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Comment from Andrea Kepple
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I like your subject choice for this contest.
In my mind, I read your poem on two different levels. On one level I easily picture someone on a ride. On the other level, I see the images as a way of talking about someone who has taken the reigns of their life as an adult. Good job.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2023

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Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
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Nice poem. Pretty picture.Good luck in the contest. When you get a chance, if you haven't yet, Please take a look at "Remittance" first lune poem, my first ever poem on this site. My first writing on here period. Tell me what you think please. Karen

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2023

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Comment from Teri7
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I wish I had six stars to give you for this great Pleiades poem you have penned for the writing prompt contest. You used great descriptive words and very beautiful imagery. It made me think way back to the time when I was a child and got to ride those horses too. That was a very fun time in life. Best wishes in the contest! Teri

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2023

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Comment from jaded831
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You created a fun day on a carousel. You brought me back to my childhood, Saturdays with my dad as he watched me on the carousel laughing. He would stand next to me and hold me steady as we went round and round.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2023

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Comment from Eleri
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This is a truly joyful poem and I just love your last line. However, your metre is very changeable from four to thirteen beats per line, which makes the poem awkward to read out loud with ease. I think that I would have tried to make it a bit more consistent in that respect.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2023

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Comment from Barry Penfold
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What an interesting style of poem. I believe you have made a very good attempt and appear to have met the requirements of the competition. Love the image and the feeling of fun projected by your words.
Take care and have a great day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2023

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