Comment from judiverse

Excellent

Great work, and congratulations on your contest win. This looks tricky to write but you aced it with your precise syllable count and rhyme. That's a beautiful artwork choice, in keeping with your poem. You describe the attractions of fall. Nature is enticing. Excellent addition of the loon's call as a reminder of autumn. Beautiful presentation. judi

 Comment Written 21-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023

Thank you Judi. It was the second one I wrote. I lost the first one and thought it was gone for ever but found and posted it the next day. i'm glad you like it. Not many people entered.
Beth

Comment from tempeste

Excellent

Ciao mystery poet, you now have 4 votes.

Autumn IS the best season of them all.

Your poem read so smoothly , a true delight .

I'm looking forward to hearing the wood crackle in my fireplace

And in enjoying the sounds , tastes , scents and colours of Autumn.

 Comment Written 19-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 19-Sep-2023

Thank you much if your are one voted for me I'm glad you like my poem. Fall is very beautiful and I already seeing the yellow leaves floating down although the days are still warm.

reply by tempeste on 20-Sep-2023

Yes, I gave you your forth vote!

That pic is beautiful.

I am surrounded by pine forests and woods full of chestnuts. (smile)

On the 6 of October, we will be celebrating the Chestnut festival

..polenta with sausages, risotto and mushrooms, roasted chestnuts, vin brule, and folk music.

There will be also Tapaluco which is minced donkey done in red wine. Personally, I prefer to see the donkey alive. (wink)

reply by the author on 20-Sep-2023

With all the talk of food, I think I may know who you are. You wouldn't happen to live in New Jersey, would you?

reply by tempeste on 20-Sep-2023

No , I?m not American and live across the globe

Here is a hint. 👢

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Love the choices of rhymes in your diatelle poem including such multi-syllabic words like "suffice, paradise, entice, precise" - I think a lot of poets love autumn best!

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023

Thank you Helen. I appreciate the review. Not many seem to be entering this contest. This form is a bit more complicated. The last four line are most the difficult.

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

The author's are lovely, descriptive and creative! The author describes
fall so well. I miss it very much as I live in Florida now and there are no
colored leaves that I will see. The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork is awesome and compliments these words. Great Poem!

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023

Thank you so much for a great review. I lived in New Orleans for a while and I missed the colored leaves. I'm back where I can enjoy the beauty of the season.

Comment from Eleri

Exceptional

This is a well-written piece that has all of the syllables and rhyming required of a diatelle poem. It reads well throughout and you have not repeated any end rhymes which is easy to do in a poem of this form. I also love the images that your poem calls up. Good luck in the contest
Eleri

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023

Thank you so much for a great review and lovely comments. I'm glad you like it.

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Surely 'Loons' needs an apostrophe? 'loons''? Not sure if it's plural or not. Otherwise this is an excellent attempt at this fiendish form. The whole thing works really well and I wish you the best of luck in the competition.

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

Thank you for noting I needed the apostrophe. I really appreciate the review.

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

A very nice diatelle, well composed. I particularly liked the first half, but I would have preferred "the air seems pure and clear". I liked the falling leaves as a sacrifice too - very original and different. Well done, and very best wishes for your entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

Thank you Wendy. I'm glad you liked the poem. I had pure and clear but I need clear it later and I changed it to avoid using it twice. I found the last four lines more difficult. Do you think its ok ti use twice?

reply by Wendy G on 15-Sep-2023

Up yo you but when I read air pure and sheer, I wasn't sure it sat well with me. The two uses are far apart, and if you used clear twice I don't think most peple would notice. But sheer means transparent and thin, so you may well prefer to keep it. It's probably just me. Anyway, it's a fine poem whichever you decide.
Wendy

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

We are still experienced the tale end of a heat wave and it is slowly cooling down now. It has been a wonderful September so far but I know Autumn will take hold soon, I enjoyed your fine descriptions and the form here, a delightful read, love Dolly x x x

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

Thank you for the nice review. The change it temperature is gradual but the air is starting to contail less humidity.

Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Exceptional

Complete perfection with this poem. The picture is glorious. The matting could not be any better. The font seems to be a bit curled like the leaves as they fall. It is all just marvelous. You capture the feeling entirely. Do me a favor and Review "Alistar Approaches" and tell me what you think.
Karen

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

Thank you Karen. I really appreciate the nice review and the six stars.

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

I definitely understood this poem and it is well written. The distills is in perfect form. I see no mistakes at all so far. Excellent work! No mistakes found. Nice. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 14-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

Thank you Raul, I really appreciate the review and comments. This is a more difficult poem to write that I'd expected.