Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

I do like Bessie, if the serial killer showed up around her, she would clobber him with her iron skillet. More than once( just to be sure). By the way, if ever you are stuck in a story write me. I am a good muse. With my active imagination, and 65 years of reading books, I do know things! hahaha good work. NNR

 Comment Written 14-Jan-2024

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reply by the author on 14-Jan-2024

Hi again, Karen. You are sure making some fast pace. I'm so pleased and thank you over and over. Since you are going through all at once, please feel free to point out any alignment issues I have. It's one of the hardest parts of writing novels. In one book, I had a person talking that was supposed to be out of town, lol.

Thanks again, my friend,
Rhonda

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

Bessie is a wise lady! I do hope that Echo heeds her warnings. I doubt it though! LOL. She's a determined yound lady out to get the biggest story of her short life. The description poor Sherry shared with her friends was too close to the man watching Echo. This is not a nice clue! Echo should really be careful. Well done again, my friend. I'm really enjoying you story. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 09-Oct-2023

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reply by the author on 10-Oct-2023

Thank you, thank you! Yes, Bessie is wise, and no, silly Echo doesn?t listen well!

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

I did miss a chapter! I wonder if you posted and it got removed early on? I see that happen and I don't get a second reminder.

Anyway, this lines up with what's revealed about Officer Bradley in the next chapter. Good that Bessie was the first one on the scene!

Comments:
blow her nose noisely in a tissue. (noisily)
thanks for the information and breakfast, Bessie (wasn't it "lunch" - at least, it was referred to as a "lunch plate" earlier)

 Comment Written 24-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 24-Sep-2023

Hi Helen, thanks for going back on the last chapter. I posted it in a hurry, I assure you. I was quickly trying to clean it up and repost. I?ll look for those mistakes.
Hugs,
Rhonda

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Oh, my. This is getting a bit scary with further information about the murder victim and warnings from Bessie, who seems to be related to or knows everyone in town. I'm wondering if Echo will need to be rescued by Theo again.

 Comment Written 18-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 18-Sep-2023

Hi Debi, thanks so much for reviewing my chapter. For sure, Echo is determined to get herself in over her head!!

Hugs,
Rhonda

Comment from Sally Law

Exceptional

This is splendid crime fiction, my friend. I was enthralled from beginning to end and now... worried! No doubt it's the serial killer and he has come to little Taylorsville. I sure hope Echo Jones learns to be careful early on. I'm glued to this one.

Sending you my best today as always, Rhonda dear.
Sal XOs

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023

Coming from the Mistress of Mystery, I am honored!
Thank you for your comments and the shining 6 stars. You are both kind and generous!

Hugs,
Rhonda

Comment from Iza Deleanu

Excellent

I think you captured very well the secret to the crime, and also a warning that the young and ambitious journalist it might become the victim of this criminal at lose. Thank you for sharing and good luck with the next chapter.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023

Thank you for the lovely review, Iza. I appreciate your time and effort for my long post.

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from forestport12

Exceptional

A newsy person would ask lot's of questions where the dialogue moves the plot along and reveals key information without it being informational offloading. I like how you figured out how to use the dialogue here to keep the story in the moment and moving along. You understand how dialogue can move the story and can backfire if not used properly. As I think I've said, I'm not an editor, so I don't try to find fixes. I just like to highlight something that can encourage.

 Comment Written 17-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 17-Sep-2023

Thank you , my friend, for your encouraging review, and for the brilliant 6 stars!

I like your comments on the dialogue. Like you said, it?s a balancing act, and I?m glad it worked for you.

Like you, I?m not an editor and comment on what I know. That?s hugely helpful!

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is flawlessly written Rhonda. You have a natural flair for dialogue and I was engrossed - with Echo asking all the right questions and probing as deeply as possible. We know that Echo is so committed to this investigation that she is more than likely going to put herself at risk. The tension heightens.. Well done! Debbie

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023

Thank you for the review, Debbie! You?re right on Echo?s risk taking, and on the danger ahead.

Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

Hello Rhonda!

I haven't been following this saga, but I thought I'd pop in and get a feel for your writing.

You have a natural way with dialogue; I love this chapter as it stands alone. I've gotten a decent feel for the story. I will have to catch up if I can.

You have a great style. Best, JohnC

 Comment Written 16-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 16-Sep-2023

Hi John, thank you so very much for dropping by. It?s good to know it works okay as a stand alone as that means it conveys its own message.
I hope to hear from you again.
Take care,
Rhonda

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Hi Rhonda, l loved this chapter and Bessie's and Echo's conversation really carries the chapter. Now I'm curious where you will take this. I can't wait. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 15-Sep-2023

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reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023

Thank you for the review and comments, Ulla. I appreciate you so much!!
Take care,
Rhonda