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Put pen to paper Potlatch Poetery Club entry28 total reviews
Comment from Raul1
I like how you wrote your poem and it is well written. I am experimenting with poetry and trying to master the iambic pantameter. I can write a tyburn poem. Your poem is very good.
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reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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I like how you wrote your poem and it is well written. I am experimenting with poetry and trying to master the iambic pantameter. I can write a tyburn poem. Your poem is very good.
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Comment Written 14-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Raul so sorry for my long delayed reply, I had a total knee replacement two weeks ago. good success with iambic pentameter, Imhad loads coqxhing from within FS supporters. Jim
Comment from Sanku
Very well written florette poem .I find these formats very challenging .You have done it so well with ease and a natural flow. A good addition to the club event
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Very well written florette poem .I find these formats very challenging .You have done it so well with ease and a natural flow. A good addition to the club event
Comment Written 14-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Oct-2023
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Sanku, I aplogize for my long delayed reply. I had a total, knee replacement two weeks ago and now I just trying to cath up, Jim
Comment from Dawn Munro
What a lovely poetry format, and used so beautifully! I loved every word, and it resonates with me deeply, with my beliefs -- we are connected, in every way.
"At such infinite immenseness,
pulled outward into this denseness so unprepared."
Exactly. (I have no sixes left this week, and this is so very worthy of that rating. Incredible imagery evoked, and a beautiful presentation...)
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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What a lovely poetry format, and used so beautifully! I loved every word, and it resonates with me deeply, with my beliefs -- we are connected, in every way.
"At such infinite immenseness,
pulled outward into this denseness so unprepared."
Exactly. (I have no sixes left this week, and this is so very worthy of that rating. Incredible imagery evoked, and a beautiful presentation...)
Comment Written 14-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Dawn, thank you soul sister.
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Good job in showing the beauty of the nature, such as sun sinking, the granite rocks and the standing fox.
The starry lights include the beautiful shining stars and the aglow fox eyes etc.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Good job in showing the beauty of the nature, such as sun sinking, the granite rocks and the standing fox.
The starry lights include the beautiful shining stars and the aglow fox eyes etc.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 14-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much, sir!
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
OMG John. You are really amazing. I've tried so many form.of poetry on this site and never heard of a florette. You have handled this so brilliantly. And your subject matter is a personal favorite. Thanks for writing this. It's something I needed right now. Not feeling well and this brightened my spirits. I may try one.
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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OMG John. You are really amazing. I've tried so many form.of poetry on this site and never heard of a florette. You have handled this so brilliantly. And your subject matter is a personal favorite. Thanks for writing this. It's something I needed right now. Not feeling well and this brightened my spirits. I may try one.
Luv&stuff,
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 13-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Katiemaedead, my goodness I am honored! I am sending my thoughts for the highest and best practices to return to good health in mind, body and spirit, Jim
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Aw, thanks so very much Jim!
Luv&stuff
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and good presentation.
-Effective imagery, rhyme, and concluding lines.
-You set the scene very well in verse one.
-The description of the twilight and stars is also very good.
-I like how you create a bond with the "grey fox...As if our spirits had blended ages ago."
-A very good concluding verse.
-Very well written and thought out.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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-Very nice artwork and good presentation.
-Effective imagery, rhyme, and concluding lines.
-You set the scene very well in verse one.
-The description of the twilight and stars is also very good.
-I like how you create a bond with the "grey fox...As if our spirits had blended ages ago."
-A very good concluding verse.
-Very well written and thought out.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Pam, I am of course honored by your very kind comments and six-stars are the cherry on top of my sundae! Thank you, friend, Jim
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You are very welcome and deserving, friend. Very well done!!!
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Jim,
This is a good entry for the florette Potlatch.
This shows the beauty and connectedness of nature and it's beings.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Hi Jim,
This is a good entry for the florette Potlatch.
This shows the beauty and connectedness of nature and it's beings.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a great rest of the week.
Joan
Comment Written 13-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Joan, thanks as always, wherever you are today may your Thursday activities fill your mind, body and soul with all good things.
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No problem, Jim. Thanks for such kind wishes.
Joan
Comment from Mia Twysted
It was a little difficult to get off the tongue as I read it aloud. That being said I felt forces circling around me. This was a great piece and you did very well.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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It was a little difficult to get off the tongue as I read it aloud. That being said I felt forces circling around me. This was a great piece and you did very well.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Mia, perhaps the words shared were meant for the heart and soul not so much the mind. Thanks much!
Comment from mermaids
You have a delicious use of words here that makes your poem fun to read out loud. Love the image of the grey fox, he is almost like a watcher,observing all. The image of the stars coming out and the night sky appearing is vivid and brings forth feelings and emotions.
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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You have a delicious use of words here that makes your poem fun to read out loud. Love the image of the grey fox, he is almost like a watcher,observing all. The image of the stars coming out and the night sky appearing is vivid and brings forth feelings and emotions.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 14-Sep-2023
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Mermaids, as always I enjoy your well-thought-out comments, thank you, Jim
Comment from Bobby Jo
This is a great poem as it catches the mood that is in the air. I feel the darkness in its wonder. Our world is a mystery that can spark a light upon our souls in the vast open skies of darkness and light.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023
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This is a great poem as it catches the mood that is in the air. I feel the darkness in its wonder. Our world is a mystery that can spark a light upon our souls in the vast open skies of darkness and light.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2023
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Bobby Jo, thank you so much! My gratitude is beyond words...Jim
