Our Secret
It is important we not let anyone know.2 total reviews
Comment from JSD
A neat little twenty syllable piece, encapsulating a tiny mystery in its words. Maybe the metaphor could have been extended with the use of 'key' to fit with 'lock'? Your final sentence might gain a little more complexity then?
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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A neat little twenty syllable piece, encapsulating a tiny mystery in its words. Maybe the metaphor could have been extended with the use of 'key' to fit with 'lock'? Your final sentence might gain a little more complexity then?
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Hey, thanks for the tip and for the review. Appreciated.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Secrets between lovers can be kept safe when the heart is loyal, all too often people kiss and tell, I enjoyed your fine words for the contest, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Secrets between lovers can be kept safe when the heart is loyal, all too often people kiss and tell, I enjoyed your fine words for the contest, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the read and feedback. I hope secret secrets are still well kept. xxx