The waves
The ocean waves.62 total reviews
Comment from Richard's Opus
This short verse fulfills the requirement of the writing prompt; as such it does a pretty good job of using words to describe the function of the moon's gravity pull on the waters below.
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This short verse fulfills the requirement of the writing prompt; as such it does a pretty good job of using words to describe the function of the moon's gravity pull on the waters below.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
Comment from Wendy G
The poem is simple and clear, with a sense of repetition, and I like that the waves can represent our own mortality as well. Well done. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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The poem is simple and clear, with a sense of repetition, and I like that the waves can represent our own mortality as well. Well done. Sending best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Dec-2023
Comment from Janis M.
I like how this description of the sea could be just that alone, a poetic and peaceful observation of the finite nature of each wave, but it could also be a metaphor for life itself and the generations that come after each parent... we are here and then gone.
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I like how this description of the sea could be just that alone, a poetic and peaceful observation of the finite nature of each wave, but it could also be a metaphor for life itself and the generations that come after each parent... we are here and then gone.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
Comment from Janet Foor
"The Waves" is an excellent metaphor for life. You have captured a beautiful image of life in this thoughtful poem.
Lovely artwork to complement your work.
Blessings and Merry Christmas.
Janet
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"The Waves" is an excellent metaphor for life. You have captured a beautiful image of life in this thoughtful poem.
Lovely artwork to complement your work.
Blessings and Merry Christmas.
Janet
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your beautiful, creative poem reminds us that everything constantly moves and changes. Butterflies change several times before reaching the final stage, the leaves of trees are regenerated with the seasons, and even the cells of our bodies constantly renew themselves. Surely, waves are generated and disappear to make new waves. Great poem.
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Your beautiful, creative poem reminds us that everything constantly moves and changes. Butterflies change several times before reaching the final stage, the leaves of trees are regenerated with the seasons, and even the cells of our bodies constantly renew themselves. Surely, waves are generated and disappear to make new waves. Great poem.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
Comment from LJbutterfly
Your beautiful, creative poem reminds us that everything constantly moves and changes. Butterflies change several times before reaching the final stage, the leaves of trees are regenerated with the seasons, and even the cells of our bodies constantly renew themselves. Surely, waves are generated and disappear to make new waves. Great poem.
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Your beautiful, creative poem reminds us that everything constantly moves and changes. Butterflies change several times before reaching the final stage, the leaves of trees are regenerated with the seasons, and even the cells of our bodies constantly renew themselves. Surely, waves are generated and disappear to make new waves. Great poem.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
Comment from Austin Yu
I loved your concept of everything being temporary, that everything is fleeting. We should learn to appreciate waves, or anything else in life in the present, and not yearn for the past, or hope for the future.
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I loved your concept of everything being temporary, that everything is fleeting. We should learn to appreciate waves, or anything else in life in the present, and not yearn for the past, or hope for the future.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
Comment from nomi338
This lovely poem gives me reason to rejoice as I know that with God, no matter how many gain life upon the earth, they are never replaced in God's vast memory. It is said that he remembers every person that ever lived. With that thought in mind, before I contemplated being one of the many human monsters that have walked the earth I would take that sobering thought in mind.
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This lovely poem gives me reason to rejoice as I know that with God, no matter how many gain life upon the earth, they are never replaced in God's vast memory. It is said that he remembers every person that ever lived. With that thought in mind, before I contemplated being one of the many human monsters that have walked the earth I would take that sobering thought in mind.
Comment Written 15-Dec-2023
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. I think having the stanzas and end lines basically repeat saying the same thing, but with slightly different ways was another nice way of calling back to wave and wave hitting the shore. Not sure about the font style. That may make reading challenging for some. I get it, but still.
Good work.
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Very interesting. I think having the stanzas and end lines basically repeat saying the same thing, but with slightly different ways was another nice way of calling back to wave and wave hitting the shore. Not sure about the font style. That may make reading challenging for some. I get it, but still.
Good work.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023
Comment from tfawcus
The sea spawns many a metaphor and your observation of the waves has a parallel in life. The construction of your verses reinforces the eternal ebb and flow. Nicely done.
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The sea spawns many a metaphor and your observation of the waves has a parallel in life. The construction of your verses reinforces the eternal ebb and flow. Nicely done.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2023