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Scenes at a Third Party

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A third party for President 2024

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Comment from Faith Williams
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'Insanity knows no boundaries.' Now that's a true statement regarding politics. I outright laughed at 'crazy is where it's at.' Different agendas and chaos galore--sounds like a political debate alright.

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
    Here is where we are. Thank you for giving this a look.
Comment from judiverse
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Yes, if you want to be president, that makes you crazy. Pons is his usual rational self. Ned's been rather silent, but I love his rather Shakespearean reaction to Pons's line:Yer dirty car jumped the shark test gummies, etc. Pons seems the only rational person there. Fun bit with the dropped pants. This would work well on stage. You might try to limit the number of characters on stage. judi

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    I know, Judi. I always load the stage up. My thought is that as I go along the players' parts will be obvious for a break in the scene.
Comment from Isabel Fontes
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Well, and the story continues...
Who will win? That is the question.
And the dancing is still in the air.
We will see the scenes from the following chapters.
I continued to enjoy reading!

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    thanks, Isabel
reply by Isabel Fontes on 07-Sep-2023
    You are welcome, Bill.
Comment from nomi338
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Why do I imagine I hear "Nyuk, Nyuk, hey Moe", in the background.? This is right out of the three Stooges isn't it? If not it certainly sounds like it could be, or maybe it's the Mark Brothers I'm thinking of. Maybe even Laurel and Hardy.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Slapstick is always funny. A play needs motion and surprise to be watchable. There is nothing new under the sun, nomi. I may add a zombie or superhero if that will help.
reply by nomi338 on 06-Sep-2023
    I hope you didn't think this was a criticism. I love this type of comedy. I am usually reduced to being in stitches when watching.
Comment from BethShelby
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These skits are always intertaining. Especially when Ned is present. Pons is the only voice of reason. It seems the tricksters only tricks the yank peoples pants down. I've not heard of that one being used in Washington. At least, not literally.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Getting pantsed will be big again.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Wow!! It certainly looks like a serious discussion going on there! LOL. This is such a fun election, I still want Ned to be president. I've still got my banner: NED FOR PRES!! Loving this! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Sandra. Who knows. Ned might be nominated as a fourth party candidate.
Comment from JSD
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Just bizarre and crazy writing but compelling and fascinating. You have a lovely imagination to produce such a strange world but it is entirely successful. Well done.

John

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Thank you, John.
Comment from lyenochka
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Well, it certainly is pouring here - so much going on and I wasn't sure what happened but the chaos seems to be keeping planned chaos from happening, I think.
I wasn't sure what this meant:
"She slaps AB's face as GED pants him" So Ann slaps Brah but what does "pants him" mean? I never saw "pants" used as a transitive verb before.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Pants is a colloquial term for pulling someone's pants down. It sometimes leads to leaving the victim pants-less somewhere.
Comment from Jasmine Girl
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It has been a while since I read your play and you wrote plays. I forgot what a Kwanza was. I'm eager to find out about the dead bugs. It will not help with the election.

Well done.

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Kwanzaa is an African American holiday begun in 1966 and celebrated from December 26 through January 1.
Comment from jim vecchio
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Whats the difference between a politician and a snail?
One is slimy, a pest, and leaves a trail everywhere and the other is a snail.
I hear Trump might be running for British Prime Minister. He wants to assure each British citizen buys whole cheese for pasta, so he can make Britain grate again
What's the difference between death and taxes? Congress doesn't meet every year to make death worse.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
    You are a funny man, Jim.
reply by jim vecchio on 05-Sep-2023
    I would've said more if I could spell "raspberry".