South Carolina
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3 total reviews
Comment from Douglas Goff
Very nice, Sir. Sounds like you are having the time of your life!
I was stationed in Goose Creek, just outside of Charleston and also trained near Myrtle Beach. Not a bad place to go if the military is sending you somewhere.
Small catch:
Change shes to she's in the last sentence.
Another fine write-up, Doc!
PS I did mention you in my one-year anniversary piece called "Thank You" .
Bless you today and everyday, my friend.
D
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Very nice, Sir. Sounds like you are having the time of your life!
I was stationed in Goose Creek, just outside of Charleston and also trained near Myrtle Beach. Not a bad place to go if the military is sending you somewhere.
Small catch:
Change shes to she's in the last sentence.
Another fine write-up, Doc!
PS I did mention you in my one-year anniversary piece called "Thank You" .
Bless you today and everyday, my friend.
D
Comment Written 06-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Thank you Douglas I'll check that out on your site.
Doctor Ricky
Comment from JSD
Beautiful writing, redolent of heat and sea and sand and gorgeousness. Thank you for sharing this. Had me confused for a moment but I think you mean 'Carolina' in your first words of this page, not 'California'. Excellent stuff. Well done.
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Beautiful writing, redolent of heat and sea and sand and gorgeousness. Thank you for sharing this. Had me confused for a moment but I think you mean 'Carolina' in your first words of this page, not 'California'. Excellent stuff. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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The California thing was an error.
So, I corrected that thanks to you.
And, have a blessed day!
Doctor Ricky
Comment from Neo!
This is a great start to a poem. I think it could be made even better with a quick grammar check.
For example:
"South Carolina with her warm Waters and soft sandy beaches."
I'm not sure why "waters" is capitalized here.
"This She truly Bliss?"- I don't understand this sentence. Also, "shes" should be "she's"
Again, this is a great poem, but I think you should just go over it one last time and check for grammar! :)
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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This is a great start to a poem. I think it could be made even better with a quick grammar check.
For example:
"South Carolina with her warm Waters and soft sandy beaches."
I'm not sure why "waters" is capitalized here.
"This She truly Bliss?"- I don't understand this sentence. Also, "shes" should be "she's"
Again, this is a great poem, but I think you should just go over it one last time and check for grammar! :)
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
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Why thank you so much for reviewing and putting out the grammar issues even though there was others have a blessed day.
Doctor Ricky 1024
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