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A third party for President 2024

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Comment from Faith Williams
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My schedule is all screwy, and I missed this one, Bill. I'm not quite sure whether to shake my head or laugh. Conduit made me chuckle. Cabbage as a vibrant force--hilarious. One thing: I do believe Kwanzaa is spelled with a second 'a' on the end. On to the next part...

 Comment Written 08-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 08-Sep-2023
    Thanks, Faith. You are right, but the other spelling is also recognized. I have changed it since, I think.
Comment from JSD
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Quite apart from the bizarre collection of brilliantly named characters, it is the hilarious dialect you convey so effortlessly that makes this even more enjoyable. Another great episode. Well done!

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Thanks, John. Had to rewrite one of these as I had mixed Ned?s Candidate up with Skar?s. That included the manager, poet laureate, and dirty trickster.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Another funny, brilliant piece, Bill. The confusion you've created will probably end up with the dustman becoming president. (I think you call them trash men who collect the rubbish?) I want Ned to be president! :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    I see Ned as a Chauncey Gardiner from the novel *Being There*. Everyone things there is more there than there is.
Comment from Isabel Fontes
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This scenario is well set up, and the confusion is clearly described.
You have captured the essence of American politics through well-developed characters and excellent writing, including a considerable touch of satire.
I really enjoyed reading this group of people.

 Comment Written 05-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Isabel.
reply by Isabel Fontes on 05-Sep-2023
    You are most welcome, Bill.
Comment from jim vecchio
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Which reminds me...I just wrote a script for a theatrical production about how they made the dictionary. It's a play on words. (drum roll) What's it like to be an aspiring writer? It's difficult to put into words! (cymbal) What's the difference between a writer and a cheese pizza? The pizza can feed three people. This one I gotta tell you! How do you make a small fortune in writing? You start with a large fortune! (also helps on FanStory) There ! Now you earned six stars!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    So funny!! Thanks for the exceptional grade, Jim.
reply by jim vecchio on 04-Sep-2023
    I had one extra star left, and you posted at the right time!
Comment from nomi338
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It's gonna be a riot, there's gonna be a riot. Hold onto your hat and search for an exit, because, there's gonna be a riot. If the minions do what they said they want to do, it's gonna be a riot. Run for the exits while you still can. Because, there's gonna be a riot!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    So, do you think there will be a riot, nomi?
reply by nomi338 on 04-Sep-2023
    There will either be a riot or a giant love fest as a result of the pulling down of pants.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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I wish I knew more about American politics to fully appreciate all of this. My head was spinning by the end of the introduction. But I know it's brilliant and hilarious because this sort of satire is what you do best:) Any additional notes from now on will still be warmly welcomed. Well done! Debbie

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    Thank you so much, Debbie, for the kind and encouraging review. Bill
Comment from BethShelby
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This election might be as disfunctional as the one we'll soon have underway. I don't think all the dirty trickters and are going to able to get their act together.
Why isn't Pons running instead of offerent up a clone? He might be worth voting for. very amusing.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    It's amazing out of millions of people only a handful run for the office.
reply by BethShelby on 04-Sep-2023
    You got have someone who thinks you can do something for them with a ton of money.
Comment from lyenochka
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I like your AA character best! I think you are getting in some commentary about poetry at the same time as a commentary about what happens in politics. Who knows who is responsible and who are the minions who cause grief in our political system?

your acquaitance, uh - (acquaintance) since this is GED speaking, I would think he's better at pronunciation than NED

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    I was going to copy and paste this whole thing into google for a spell check, but the last time I did that I copy and pasted it back and had to spend another two hours re-spacing and changing fonts.
reply by lyenochka on 04-Sep-2023
    Please don't trust Google! Next thing you know Amazon will offer you Kwanzaa gift suggestions.
Comment from Ulla
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I love it, Bill, you're taking the mikey out of all politicians in your country. It's nothing more than a farce. What a great piece of satire. And Ned, of course, is forever my favourite. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Ulla. This is a real kick.