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A third party for President 2024

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Comment from JSD
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And another thing behind the surreal craziness is the satire that exists, commenting subtly on your American system of government. Excellent still.

John

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Thank you, John
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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This is such fun, Bill. I can imagine this happening in many countries, (who allow their people to vote) I've always been a fan of Ned and Pons and you never disappoint. Their story at this time, with all the election mumbo-jumbo going on in real life, makes a refreshing change. Another great chapter, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 06-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 06-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Sandra. Fiction pales before what the reality seems to be.
reply by Sandra Stoner-Mitchell on 06-Sep-2023
    It is a bit of a horror story, isn't it?
Comment from w.j.debi
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This is more interesting and more fun than the campaign on television. At least we know who the good guys are, or do we? I look forward to seeing what happens next.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023
    I will try to entertain you as much as politics allow.
Comment from Faith Williams
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How appropriate to 'destroy another's campaign' rather than discuss your own merits. You may be writing satire, Bill, but I'm not sure you're that far off in some respects. Avocado clothes? And the conversation between Zora and DED was hilarious.

 Comment Written 03-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Faith, for giving this a look. I will be posting this evening if it all rolls out well.
Comment from royowen
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An incredibly humourful post Bill, with a motley collection of individuals on display, what a great advertisement, for the marginals of this world all meeting at the same. Imaginative dialogue my friend, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
    Thank you, Roy. I hope I can get one of these elected.
reply by royowen on 02-Sep-2023
    I hope not heh heh, we?re in enough trouble
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Well this is a wacky script for this electioneering campaign centre parody! I think I'm still a bit dazzled by the dialogue and the colours so I may have to re- read this one. But I have no doubt this is another post with which we're going to have fun from now on! Thanks for sharing, Bill! Debbie

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
    Thanks, Debbie
Comment from LJbutterfly
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And the plot thickens as I laugh. All the names Pons calls MauMau, for instance, or reserving a place for Pons in the rose garden shed. I'll see you in the next chapter and the campaign continues.

"ramms his elbow into the starngers jaw, who gthen collapses." (rams, strangers, then)
"It bilds to a maniacal pitch. Then -- lights out. (builds)

I never know whether I'm looking at typos or humorous spellings.

 Comment Written 02-Sep-2023


reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
    Wow, I must have let this go accidently before the last revision. Those items were fixed some time ago. .