2023 Gypsy's Tanka
Viewing comments for Chapter 33 "The Long Walk"-
15 total reviews
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Aw. beautiful tanka Gypsy! It's been a while since I've written one but your notes brought me back to what I once learned. That third line especially. I was taught it's supposed to be both the haiku satori and the pivot line for the next 2 lines of 7 (or whichever).
Your notes go into it a bit deeper than what I studied with Alvin but that's a good thing. I love this and must find time to read and write more. Japanese poetic forms.
Take care
Luv&stuff
Katiemaedead
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Aw. beautiful tanka Gypsy! It's been a while since I've written one but your notes brought me back to what I once learned. That third line especially. I was taught it's supposed to be both the haiku satori and the pivot line for the next 2 lines of 7 (or whichever).
Your notes go into it a bit deeper than what I studied with Alvin but that's a good thing. I love this and must find time to read and write more. Japanese poetic forms.
Take care
Luv&stuff
Katiemaedead
Comment Written 04-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words.
Gypsy
Comment from Jumbo J
Hi MariVal,
firstly let me apologise for my on and off reviewing... I went back trying to find one of your most beautiful poems... a tanka I believe. One about the sun and moon always chasing each other, but never being able to connect. I read it, and never had the opportunity to review it... It stirred my soul had me lingering in mid-air in contemplation.
A heaviness of being, lightens within gratitude... tapping into the energy of our essence is our horizon. Our balance is our focused connection to our experience. It allows our landscape to have a more expanded panoramic view... a oneness with the vista of our existence.
I love how you tap into your emotions and create such beautiful lingering thoughts.
You are a very talented wordsmith Reina Lobo Gitana. Strength comes in all sorts of amazing heightened senses... you my sweet woman have all on full beam.
Need I say it?
Your presentation and composition is as impeccable as ever.
With our thoughts we create...
a stable range of vision.
I love that you chose to include Helen's quote with your notes... she is a wise and insightful person.
Warm regards,
James.
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reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Hi MariVal,
firstly let me apologise for my on and off reviewing... I went back trying to find one of your most beautiful poems... a tanka I believe. One about the sun and moon always chasing each other, but never being able to connect. I read it, and never had the opportunity to review it... It stirred my soul had me lingering in mid-air in contemplation.
A heaviness of being, lightens within gratitude... tapping into the energy of our essence is our horizon. Our balance is our focused connection to our experience. It allows our landscape to have a more expanded panoramic view... a oneness with the vista of our existence.
I love how you tap into your emotions and create such beautiful lingering thoughts.
You are a very talented wordsmith Reina Lobo Gitana. Strength comes in all sorts of amazing heightened senses... you my sweet woman have all on full beam.
Need I say it?
Your presentation and composition is as impeccable as ever.
With our thoughts we create...
a stable range of vision.
I love that you chose to include Helen's quote with your notes... she is a wise and insightful person.
Warm regards,
James.
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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You, Helen, and karenina are my favorite reviewers. You are all so insightful and eloquent with your words
James, it feels like you can get into my mind and soul and know exactly what I meant. Thank you for that. You are so kind to me, kinder than I an to myself.
I really appreciate that you are going through my poems and reviewing so many at once. Thank you.
Besitos y abrazos
Marival
I" have to face life with passion. I must rediscover the irresistible will to live and to love." Unknow
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Love the quote Unknown!
Thank you for the very lovely comments. It seems we are attracted to like.
And I still love the words I have permanently on my skin:
Pain and suffering are inevitable, misery is optional-Lou Gehrig.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
What an amazing picture this is and your colourful words are a delight. Staying balanced in the face of adversity is always a challenge and these scenes help us to stay positive, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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What an amazing picture this is and your colourful words are a delight. Staying balanced in the face of adversity is always a challenge and these scenes help us to stay positive, love Dolly x
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much, Dolly. I appreciate your review and kindness.
gypsy
Comment from Heather Knight
You're the Queen of Japanese poetry and the Queen of beautiful presentation.
I loved the last two lines and the whole sentence in the notes. When you say Helen, do you mean leynocha?
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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You're the Queen of Japanese poetry and the Queen of beautiful presentation.
I loved the last two lines and the whole sentence in the notes. When you say Helen, do you mean leynocha?
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you for the exceptional six stars review, Heather. You are very kind. Yes, it's Helen, lyenochka.
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Well deserved. Disfruta del finde como dicen ahora.
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Mi cumpleaņos es maņana pero lo celebre con mi hijo y nuera hoy. Yo vivo con mi hija Mas joven, micaela, u marido, y mi nieto tambien vinieron. Lo pasamos muy bien. Fuimos a un restaurante Espaņol a Comer tapas y paella. Maņana a celebrar otra vez en casa. :)
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I hope you had a great time.
Muchos besos,
MJ
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Once my husband is ready, he takes a lot longer than me, we will leave for the gulf and visit with our son. I can't wait to walk along the shore and just breathe. Thank you for sharing your beautiful package with us.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Once my husband is ready, he takes a lot longer than me, we will leave for the gulf and visit with our son. I can't wait to walk along the shore and just breathe. Thank you for sharing your beautiful package with us.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy weekend. (*÷*)
Gypsy⁰
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I especially like this one. It's awesome thinking of being balanced on the horizon. The details of feet covered in sand bring the poem back to what we feel.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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I especially like this one. It's awesome thinking of being balanced on the horizon. The details of feet covered in sand bring the poem back to what we feel.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy weekend. (*÷*)
Gypsy
Comment from shelley kaye
good alliteration of B and H in the last two lines
liked the S before that, too
good imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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good alliteration of B and H in the last two lines
liked the S before that, too
good imagery and smooth flow
thank you for sharing
shelley :)
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Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy weekend. (*÷*)
Gypsy
Comment from royowen
Yep, sometimes creation sends out a message that we can't depend on what we see, we will sometimes think we're alone in the universe, that's belief is no natural, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Yep, sometimes creation sends out a message that we can't depend on what we see, we will sometimes think we're alone in the universe, that's belief is no natural, blessings Roy
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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True, we are never alone.
Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy weekend. (*÷*)
Gypsy
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Yes, never truly alone, it just feels that way.
Comment from aryr
What a great tanka, Gypsy and a fantastic quote from Helen. The dual pictures representing the boardwalk into the horizon and the seashell at the end. They both seem to gather sand around them. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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What a great tanka, Gypsy and a fantastic quote from Helen. The dual pictures representing the boardwalk into the horizon and the seashell at the end. They both seem to gather sand around them. Very well done and greatly enjoyed. Blessed Be n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy weekend. (*÷*) blessed be.
Gypsy
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Most welcome, Gypsy.
Comment from AP Apgar
I like your tanka poem- nice picture presentation and flow - good story line finding a balance with depression by walking on the beach - watching the sun on the horizon- new beginnings- Good Job AP
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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I like your tanka poem- nice picture presentation and flow - good story line finding a balance with depression by walking on the beach - watching the sun on the horizon- new beginnings- Good Job AP
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Thank you very much for your excellent review and kind words. Happy weekend. (*÷*)
Gypsy