Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill

Excellent

Well, I am completely depressed now. I truly felt the heaviness of his feelings. The weight he carried every day. It was visceral. I could not move. I wish I had a six to offer I do not. This topic will make it hard for others to really consider you since you made them so depressed. This is a very well-written poem, on a very deep subject. Kudos to you. Amazing work.
Karen

 Comment Written 01-Sep-2023

---

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023

Ciao!,

You are right, out of 33 views I received only two votes.

I might try next time to talk about joy and happiness.

reply by Karen Cherry Threadgill on 02-Sep-2023

There are toic that just don't get read. I had to find out that this place wants stories longer than a flash piece in series form. Very few people read"I Don't Really Belong Here" it was almost 9,000 words. A long short story. Those that made it all the way through liked it. But, out of 140 only 9 read it all. There is no accounting for taste. I dare yiu to read mine all the way through! haha Karen

reply by the author on 03-Sep-2023

10 now.

My favourite format is 5-7-5 or even less.

Why?

Because it?s a challenge to say something of significance in just a handful of syllables.

When you challenged me to read ?I don?t belong here ?I couldn?t resist

It took me 180 minutes to read it .. and I may add one thing

I?m not a big reader but the topic was compelling and I couldn?t stop.

I read it last night ..

it?s 4.30 am now .

Comment from Nicki Nance

Excellent

This is a compelling account of depression's inner workings and tenacious hold. Thank you for the depth of your writing, and for coming forth with this sad wisdom.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

---

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023

Thank you for reading and reviewing my entry.

I might choose a more likable emotion next time seeing out of 33 views it received only 2 votes. (sigh)

Comment from Eric Langford1

Excellent

I don't care for the subject matter, but the poetry is quite clever. The message is clear and very hard hitting, otherwise it wouldn't be doing its job.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

---

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023

Thank you for taking the time to read and review my entry.

Depression is not something most people want to think about, I might choose a more likable emotion next time.

Comment from JSD

Excellent

Such a sad tale. Well done for communicating about this desperately important issue in such a subtle and moving manner. I hope that you do well in the competition, but more importantly that your poem can help some people.

 Comment Written 31-Aug-2023

---

reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023

Thanks for the kind words.

Depression is not really a topic most want to dwell on hence it only received 2 votes.

I might consider picking a lighter emotion next time.