Beneath the Waves
The mighty Titanic17 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
This is a fantastic write about the ill fated Titanic .The incident has inspired no less than two movies.. the picture also is very graphic .Thank you .all the best for the contest
From debi's poem I understand it is your birthday.MANY MANY HAPPY RETURNS OF THE DAY ! GOD BLESS.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
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This is a fantastic write about the ill fated Titanic .The incident has inspired no less than two movies.. the picture also is very graphic .Thank you .all the best for the contest
From debi's poem I understand it is your birthday.MANY MANY HAPPY RETURNS OF THE DAY ! GOD BLESS.
Comment Written 17-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2023
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Hello Sanku, I'm behind in reviewing. Many thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed it. And thanks for the birthday wishes, I'm too old now (78) love, Kay.
Comment from Bill Schott
This loop poem, Beneath the Waves, has the proper formatting and presented with four ABAB-rhymed quatrains and a similar quintain. The words capture again the carnage and horror experienced that day when the Titanic sank. Important poem.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023
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This loop poem, Beneath the Waves, has the proper formatting and presented with four ABAB-rhymed quatrains and a similar quintain. The words capture again the carnage and horror experienced that day when the Titanic sank. Important poem.
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023
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Hello Bill, Thanks for dropping in. Glad you appreciated my poem. The Titanic should never have sunk because she was steaming at 24.5 knots, and other ships running at 17 knots grazed icebergs with no harm. Best wishes, Kay xx
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023
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This is an excellent poem. I enjoyed reading it. Your presentation is very good, too. You also use descriptive words that draw in a reader.
Best wishes!
Alexandra
Comment Written 15-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2023
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Hello, my friend. Glad you liked my rendition of the death of the Titanic. I'm excited, I just won second place for 'The Storm!' Had to share this with you. K xx
Comment from l.raven
Hi Kace, WOW sweetie pie...
a very smooth read...with great rhythm...
this has always been one of my favorite stories told...
I don't like that it's true...it's so hard to believe...but it did
happen...I hated that more people weren't saved...
I would like to believe those who didn't make it...still live on
the Titanic...the way it was before it went down...spirits...
your poem is very well written my sweet friend...and your picture
speaks for it self...I love your story told...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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Hi Kace, WOW sweetie pie...
a very smooth read...with great rhythm...
this has always been one of my favorite stories told...
I don't like that it's true...it's so hard to believe...but it did
happen...I hated that more people weren't saved...
I would like to believe those who didn't make it...still live on
the Titanic...the way it was before it went down...spirits...
your poem is very well written my sweet friend...and your picture
speaks for it self...I love your story told...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 11-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2023
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One of my best I think. It got rave reviews. She still holds our interest after over 100 years. Thank you possum. K xx
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you should have...you did a wonderful job...well done...love to ya...xxoo
Comment from Teri7
I wish I had six stars to give you for this very well written, rhyming poem about the Titan and what happened on the ship and to the people. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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I wish I had six stars to give you for this very well written, rhyming poem about the Titan and what happened on the ship and to the people. You used great descriptive words and great imagery from the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 02-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 04-Sep-2023
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Hi Teri, Many thanks for reading my friend. Love Kay XX
Comment from LJbutterfly
You have captured in a looping, rhyming poem, some of the basic considerations in the tragic sinking of the mighty Titanic. Your poem covers the wealthy and those in third class, both dying the same death, while "Pains belong to the living." You did an excellent job telling the story. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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You have captured in a looping, rhyming poem, some of the basic considerations in the tragic sinking of the mighty Titanic. Your poem covers the wealthy and those in third class, both dying the same death, while "Pains belong to the living." You did an excellent job telling the story. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Hello friend, Many thanks for reading. Glad you appreciated my poem. K XX
Comment from Sally Law
Wonderful loop/rhyming poem of the sinking of the Titanic. I've read and studied this disaster for years and found out it could have been avoided at least by the actions of Captain Edward John Smith.
From my FanStory article: "The Precious Cargo of the Titanic."
From the Chicago Examiner dated Thursday April 18, 1912:
"TITANIC'S CAPTAIN WARNED OF HUGE FIELD OF ICEBERGS--
Operator on La Bretagne Tells How Messages Were Sent in All Directions From Near Cape Race.
New York, April 17--Captain Smith of the Titanic had warning of the danger ahead of him in the giant iceberg that sent his vessel to the bottom of the North Atlantic. As a matter of fact, the Titanic relayed the warning to the shore." *Source.
To me, this is negligence as a captain of any ship. A lot of pride went down with those precious lives. So unfortunate and sad. It didn't have to be.
Thanks for sharing.
Sending you my best today as always and and early Happy Birthday, Kay!
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Wonderful loop/rhyming poem of the sinking of the Titanic. I've read and studied this disaster for years and found out it could have been avoided at least by the actions of Captain Edward John Smith.
From my FanStory article: "The Precious Cargo of the Titanic."
From the Chicago Examiner dated Thursday April 18, 1912:
"TITANIC'S CAPTAIN WARNED OF HUGE FIELD OF ICEBERGS--
Operator on La Bretagne Tells How Messages Were Sent in All Directions From Near Cape Race.
New York, April 17--Captain Smith of the Titanic had warning of the danger ahead of him in the giant iceberg that sent his vessel to the bottom of the North Atlantic. As a matter of fact, the Titanic relayed the warning to the shore." *Source.
To me, this is negligence as a captain of any ship. A lot of pride went down with those precious lives. So unfortunate and sad. It didn't have to be.
Thanks for sharing.
Sending you my best today as always and and early Happy Birthday, Kay!
Sal XOs
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Hi Sally, Thanks for reviewing. Lots of stories, some true, some not. Apparently, smaller slower ships ran into icebergs at 17 knots. The Titanic had no chance of running at 24.5 Knots. The smaller ships survived. Blessings, Kay xx
Comment from BethShelby
This is nice rhyming poem about the Titanic. How tragic to be trapped below. That had to be horrible. Thank you for sharing this poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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This is nice rhyming poem about the Titanic. How tragic to be trapped below. That had to be horrible. Thank you for sharing this poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Beth, Thanks for reading, and yes, the immigrants must have been terrified. The stewards had to lock them in to prevent a riot. K xx
Comment from Eleri
This is a great idea for a rhyming poem and I like the idea of repeating the last word as the first word in the next line. However, this has resulted in you using drown three times and frown twice as an end rhyme. There are many other words that rhyme with down that you could have used instead eg crown, gown, town, renown, or near rhymes such as ground, round, found etc. Your poem would have been better, I think, if you had picked one of them rather than keep using the same words no matter how much they relate to the story you are telling.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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This is a great idea for a rhyming poem and I like the idea of repeating the last word as the first word in the next line. However, this has resulted in you using drown three times and frown twice as an end rhyme. There are many other words that rhyme with down that you could have used instead eg crown, gown, town, renown, or near rhymes such as ground, round, found etc. Your poem would have been better, I think, if you had picked one of them rather than keep using the same words no matter how much they relate to the story you are telling.
Good luck in the contest
Eleri
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Eleri, Thanks for reading and I will have a look, repetition not a good thing. K xx
Comment from aryr
Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Aussie /Kay. What a fantastic picture that was. Such devastation that was when the Titanic sank ripped open by an iceberg. Very well done and sadly missed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Good luck wishes regarding the contest entry, Aussie /Kay. What a fantastic picture that was. Such devastation that was when the Titanic sank ripped open by an iceberg. Very well done and sadly missed. Blessings n Hugs!!!
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2023
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Hello little hugger. Thanks for reading, she seemed to be a cursed ship. Going too fast against the iceberg. Other ships survived because they were slow. Around 17 knots whereas the Titanic was hauling 24.5 knots. Love, Kay xx
