One Man's Calling
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Comment from BethShelby
Ben always seems to find those who will help and those that want to beat him up. I guess talking about God isn't always goofd for business and it doesn't keep Ben from doing what he does. Good story.
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Ben always seems to find those who will help and those that want to beat him up. I guess talking about God isn't always goofd for business and it doesn't keep Ben from doing what he does. Good story.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 02-Sep-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
Ben seems to have found a friend in Clyde, and he certainly needs friends. I like the way Ben turned things around on Clyde and his friends, who are protecting Ben, by asking if their souls are protected.
When you say "As Ben finished making his point" it tells me that the message is his, not God's. "sharing God's word" might be a more effective way to say it. Just a thought.
Check "could handle one easy enough" - I think the adverb should be "easily".
Good job of foreshadowing danger coming.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Ben seems to have found a friend in Clyde, and he certainly needs friends. I like the way Ben turned things around on Clyde and his friends, who are protecting Ben, by asking if their souls are protected.
When you say "As Ben finished making his point" it tells me that the message is his, not God's. "sharing God's word" might be a more effective way to say it. Just a thought.
Check "could handle one easy enough" - I think the adverb should be "easily".
Good job of foreshadowing danger coming.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you! And you are right. I'll fix both.
Comment from Jim Wile
Good chapter, Wayne. You are certainly building up the suspense about what's brewing in SF. Ben appears to have his protectors, but it would appear they still need his help as he does theirs.
I'm sure Ben was disappointed to find the man he had saved from being shanghaied by men to being shanghaied by booze--something equally bad. He has some further lessons to instill in this man. - Jim
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Good chapter, Wayne. You are certainly building up the suspense about what's brewing in SF. Ben appears to have his protectors, but it would appear they still need his help as he does theirs.
I'm sure Ben was disappointed to find the man he had saved from being shanghaied by men to being shanghaied by booze--something equally bad. He has some further lessons to instill in this man. - Jim
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your great review.
And yes, lessons are coming.
Comment from JSD
Continues to be excellent. More twists and turns than those city streets. You are taking me on a wonderful, spiritual journey. Well done and please continue.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Continues to be excellent. More twists and turns than those city streets. You are taking me on a wonderful, spiritual journey. Well done and please continue.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you. Your encouragement is a blessing!
Comment from Wendy G
A good chapter, and It's pleasing to see some people looking out for Ben and offering some protection, but I am wondering who the guy with the white hat is.
Wendy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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A good chapter, and It's pleasing to see some people looking out for Ben and offering some protection, but I am wondering who the guy with the white hat is.
Wendy
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review.
The good guys organized volunteers (wearing white hats) to guard Ben.
Comment from Jay Squires
Ben is shaking some cages again. And he doesn't listen to those who are trying to protect him. The guy's got class!
One thing I've noticed, and I'll just throw it out there: you seem to have a fondness for having long dialogue by one person bleed over into two or three paragraphs. Sometimes you do it when it's not really necessary. Here's an example:
"That's right. And maybe I'm doing it again. You never know.
"Come on, pick 'em up. We'll maybe get something to eat. You have a family, Joshua? It's Joshua, isn't it?"
In that example, you could easily combine them with a bridge like, Something like that, and then start the dialogue in the same paragraph. You probably hear the characters' voices in your head -- I know I do with mine -- but the reader may not. Why confuse him or her? Just a thought. It was used a lot in the 19th and early 20th century, but rarely now.
The storm is coming! And is it ever! of Biblical proportions.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Ben is shaking some cages again. And he doesn't listen to those who are trying to protect him. The guy's got class!
One thing I've noticed, and I'll just throw it out there: you seem to have a fondness for having long dialogue by one person bleed over into two or three paragraphs. Sometimes you do it when it's not really necessary. Here's an example:
"That's right. And maybe I'm doing it again. You never know.
"Come on, pick 'em up. We'll maybe get something to eat. You have a family, Joshua? It's Joshua, isn't it?"
In that example, you could easily combine them with a bridge like,
The storm is coming! And is it ever! of Biblical proportions.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you for the great review and the dialogue lesson. I recognized the matter as I write, but it seemed appropriate in that I change subjects. I never thought of a bridging device. Thank you.
(...combine them with a bridge like, Something like that, and then start the dialogue...) This confused me a bit, but I think I got the point. Thanks again.
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Sorry for the confusion.
Comment from lyenochka
I hope Smalley realizes what a good friend or "pal" that Ben is being to him to rescue him one more time!
I was relieved that the three men who approached Ben were on his side. And I'm curious about Mr. White Hat with Yellow Band.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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I hope Smalley realizes what a good friend or "pal" that Ben is being to him to rescue him one more time!
I was relieved that the three men who approached Ben were on his side. And I'm curious about Mr. White Hat with Yellow Band.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your very kind review. This is a problem with small posts. The white hats dudes are explained in the next segment. They are volunteer guardians.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Ben's friends are wise to try to protect him from whoever is following him. But then he finds Josh again and has to protect him from another shanghaiing. No doubt that is the reason the Golden Cup extends credit, they know they will be paid off for helping to shanghai another sailor. Ben doesn't seem to take his friends' anxiety for him very seriously.
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Ben's friends are wise to try to protect him from whoever is following him. But then he finds Josh again and has to protect him from another shanghaiing. No doubt that is the reason the Golden Cup extends credit, they know they will be paid off for helping to shanghai another sailor. Ben doesn't seem to take his friends' anxiety for him very seriously.
Comment Written 31-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Ben knows that the One for him is greater than those against him. But he ends up using common sense. Thank you for your great review.
Comment from royowen
I really like this series, you really seem to have a handle on the evangelical heart of God, and the character of Ben Persons suits the heart of God, bent under the mantle of God's love. Beautifully written Wayne, blessings Roy
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reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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I really like this series, you really seem to have a handle on the evangelical heart of God, and the character of Ben Persons suits the heart of God, bent under the mantle of God's love. Beautifully written Wayne, blessings Roy
Typo : Just a couple (of) blocks further.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2023
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Thank you for your very nice review.
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My pleasure
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like this part, I think we sometimes forget to take a pause and let God do his work:"Look, don't think I'm not grateful for what you did. But when you ask God to do something, you have to give him a chance to do it."
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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I like this part, I think we sometimes forget to take a pause and let God do his work:"Look, don't think I'm not grateful for what you did. But when you ask God to do something, you have to give him a chance to do it."
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Comment Written 30-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2023
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Thank you.
I believe it, too.
Thanks again for your very kind review.